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Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Tue, 30 Oct 2007 17:59:15 GMT

Things in red again.

Cheese1987 wrote:

Thank you very much!

        Three standards define how ethical the media is - objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Columbia University emeritus journalism professor Melvin Mencher claims Objectivity (why capitalize it?) should avoid bias and sensationalism or presenting impartial information. Fairness is advocated by John V. Pavlik. He believes fair reporting should provide 'balanced coverage reflecting all sides of an issue.â (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) I He also believes accurate reporting should be about "getting the facts right and representing a story completely". (John V. Pavlik,2001:93)

     The local reporters are far from being objective; in fact, they often create sensational stories. Kelly Chan, a famous star in Hong Kong, said the media are exaggerating that she and music mogul, Joey Yung, clashed over her upcoming CD. The newspaper (Which newspaper?) reported that Joey Yung hated n songs on her third album, but Kelly, who called the disc "really cool" and versatile, said artist-label disagreement can be healthy. ~~The situation is worsening.~~ ~~(how?) (Explain how this story is considered "sensational".~~) As Kelly Chan said,â You know what it is - this situation is just blown up.â This practice is eroding the public's faith in the media.

        Fairness is also an important standard that should be take notice of. Nevertheless, Sunny Wong had expressed his voice in South China Morning Post. He said,â I am worried, however, about our media, which seem to be selective about the facts they reportâ (Sunny Wong,South China Morning Post,EDT16, EDT, Letters) He claimed former chief executive Tung Chee-wah had been awarded an honorary degree at the graduation ceremony held by Hong Kong University of Science and Technology . A small group of students booed as the degree was conferred. He believed the applause largely had drowned out the booing. But all the press reported the next day was the booing. Obviously journalists have taken sides. Distortion of reality in news coverage is inconsistent with the principle of fairness.

      The reporter should collect facts from as many reliable sources as possible. An event may be reported as a fact if there are two or more independent eyewitnesses to it. However, unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 68 percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers have reported unverified news. The facts of the stories are not right and the stories are not represented completely. This statistic shows Hong Kong newspapers are not accurate in the hearts of most of Hong Kong people.

         Some people argue that some newspapers such as Mingpao, Singtao and Ta Kung Pao are famous for impartial writing. However, this is no longer the case. Mingpao was criticized for giving an incorrect account of an incident involving Independent Commission Against Corruption in March,2007. Mingpao reported that ICAC had applied for a search warrent (spelling) from court after it cannot (tense) get the news material (be specific: what material?) from the newpaper office. But ICAC insisted that it was not true. In fact, they had not applied for a search warrent (spelling) Moreover, some scholars said Singtao had concealed the real motive of the incidents (What incidents?). we no longer see any objective articles these days.

         To conclude, I believe Hong Kong Newspapers are misleading people. They cannot meet the standards of objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Journalism is about reporting as it is. It is just unethical for newspapers to mislead people. If the approach of printing incorrect stories is allowed to proliferate, journalism will eventually go down the path of tabloid journalism.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Tue, 30 Oct 2007 15:37:27 GMT

Thank you very much!

Three standards define how ethical the media is - objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Columbia University emeritus journalism professor Melvin Mencher claims Objectivity should avoid bias and sensationalism or presenting impartial information (Is that a quote? if so, put it in " " ). Fairness is advocated by John V. Pavlik. He believes fair reporting should provide 'balanced coverage reflecting all sides of an issue.â (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) I He also believes accurate reporting should be about "getting the facts right and representing a story completely". (John V. Pavlik,2001:93)

The local reporters are far from being objective; in fact, they often create sensational stories. Kelly Chan, a famous star in Hong Kong, said the media are exaggerating that she and music mogul, Joey Yung, clashed over her upcoming CD. The newspaper (What does it stand for?) reported that Joey Yung (Who is Davis?) hated n songs on her third album, but Kelly (Clarkson who?), who called the disc "really cool" and versatile, said artist-label disagreement can be healthy. The situation is worsening. (how?) (Explain how this story is considered "sensational".) As Kelly Chan said,â You know what it is - this situation is just blown up.â This practice is eroding the public's faith in the media.

Fairness is also an important standard that should be take notice of. Nevertheless, Sunny Wong had expressed his voice in South China Morning Post. He said,â I am worried, however, about our media, which seem to be selective about the facts they reportâ (Sunny Wong,South China Morning Post,EDT16, EDT, Letters) He claimed former chief executive Tung Chee-wah had been awarded an honorary degree at the graduation ceremony held by Hong Kong University of Science and Technology . A small group of students booed as the degree was conferred. He believed the applause largely had drowned out the booing. But all the press reported the next day was the booing. Obviously journalists have taken sides. Distortion of reality in news coverage is inconsistent with the principle of fairness.

The reporter should collect facts from as many reliable sources as possible. An event may be reported as a fact if there are two or more independent eyewitnesses to it. However, unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 68 percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers have reported unverified news. The facts of the stories are not right and the stories are not represented completely. This statistic shows Hong Kong newspapers are not accurate in the hearts of most of Hong Kong people.

Some people argue that some newspapers such as Mingpao, Singtao and Ta Kung Pao are famous for impartial writing. However, this is no longer the case. Mingpao was criticized for giving an incorrect account of an incident involving Independent Commission Against Corruption in March,2007. Mingpao reported that ICAC had applied a search warrent from court after it cannot get the news material from the newpaper office. But ICAC insisted that it was not truth. They had not applied search warrent(Summarize the incident. Still not enough details.) Moreover, some scholars said Singtao had concealed the real motive of the incidents now. we no longer see any objective articles these days.

To conclude, I believe Hong Kong Newspapers are misleading people. They cannot meet the standards of objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Journalism is about reporting as it is. It is just unethical for newspapers to mislead people. If the approach of printing incorrect stories is allowed to proliferate, journalism will eventually go down the path of tabloid journalism.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Tue, 30 Oct 2007 02:17:19 GMT

Parts in red, again.

Cheese1987 wrote:
Julielai wrote:

You need to fix the parts in red.

Cheese1987 wrote:

         Three standards define how ethical the media is - objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Columbia University emeritus journalism professor Melvin Mencher claims Objectivity should avoid bias and sensationalism or presenting impartial information (Is that a quote? if so, put it in " " ). Fairness is advocated by John V. Pavlik. He believes fair reporting should provide 'balanced coverage reflecting all sides of an issue.â (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) I He also believes accurate reporting should be about "getting the facts right and representing a story completely". (John V. Pavlik,2001:93)

     The local reporters are far from being objective; in fact, they often create sensational stories. Kelly Chan, a famous star in Hong Kong, said the media are exaggerating that she and music mogul, Joey Yung, clashed over her upcoming CD. It (What does it stand for?) reported that Davis (Who is Davis?) hates songs on her third album, but Clarkson (Clarkson who?), who called the disc "really cool" and versatile, said artist-label disagreement can be healthy. . The situation is worsening. (how?) (Explain how this story is considered "sensational".) As Kelly Chan said,â You know what it is - this situation is just blown up.â This practice is eroding the public's faith in the media.

        Fairness is also an important standard that should be take notice of. Nevertheless, Sunny Wong had expressed his voice in South China Morning Post. He said,â I am worried, however, about our media, which seem to be selective about the facts they reportâ (Sunny Wong,South China Morning Post,EDT16, EDT, Letters) He claimed former chief executive Tung Chee-wah had been awarded an honorary degree at the graduation ceremony held by Hong Kong University of Science and Technology . A small group of students booed as the degree was conferred. He believed the applause largely had drowned out the booing. But all the press reported the next day was the booing. Obviously journalists have taken sides. Distortion of reality in news coverage is inconsistent with the principle of fairness.

      The reporter should collect facts from as many reliable sources as possible. An event may be reported as a fact if there are two or more independent eyewitnesses to it.However, unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 68 percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers have reported unverified news. The facts of the stories are not right and the stories are not represented completely. This statistic shows Hong Kong newspapers are not accurate in the hearts of most of Hong Kong people.

         Some people argue that some newspapers such as Mingpao, Singtao and Ta Kung Pao are famous for impartial writing. However, this is no longer the case. Mingpao was criticized for giving an incorrect account of an incident involving Independent Commission Against Corruption in March,2007. Mingpao reported that ICAC had applied the a search warrent from court after it cannot get the news material from the newpaper office. But ICAC insisted that it was not turth(Summarize the incident. Still not enough details.) Moreover, some scholars said Singtao had concealed the real motive of the incidents now. we no longer see any objective articles these days.

         To conclude, I believe Hong Kong Newspapers are misleading people. They cannot meet the standards of objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Journalism is about reporting as it is. It is just unethical for newspapers to mislead people. If the approach of printing incorrect stories is allowed to proliferate, journalism will eventually go down the path of tabloid journalism.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Mon, 29 Oct 2007 17:28:53 GMT

Julielai wrote:

You need to fix the parts in red.

Cheese1987 wrote:

Thank You!!

         Three standards define how ethical the media is - objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Columbia University emeritus journalism professor Melvin Mencher claims Objectivity should avoid bias and sensationalism or presenting impartial information (Please quote.). Fairness is advocated by John V. Pavlik. He believes fair reporting should provide 'balanced coverage reflecting all sides of an issue.â (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) I He also believes accurate reporting should be about "getting the facts right and representing a story completely". (John V. Pavlik,2001:93)

     The local reporters are far from being objective; in fact, they often create sensational stories. Kelly Chan(last name?), a famous star in Hong Kong, said the media are exaggerating CD selling reports that she and music mogul Joey Yung clashed over her upcoming CD(what do you want to say?). It reported that Davis hates songs on her third album, but Clarkson, who called the disc "really cool" and versatile, said artist-label disagreement can be healthy. The situation is worsening. As Kelly Chan said,â You know what it is - this situation is just blown up.â(Give a full account of the story here. I don't know anything about this.) This practice is eroding the public's faith in the media.

        Fairness is also an important standard that should be take notice of. Nevertheless, Sunny Wong had expressed his voice in South China Morning Post. He said,â I am worried, however, about our media, which seem to be selective about the facts they reportâ (Sunny Wong,South China Morning Post,EDT16, EDT, Letters) He claimed former chief executive Tung Chee-wah had been awarded an honorary degree at the graduation ceremony held by Hong Kong University of Science and Technology . A small group of students booed as the degree was conferred. He believed the applause largely had drowned out the booing. But all the press reported the next day was the booing. Obviously journalists have taken sides. Distortion of reality of the stories is inconsistent with the fairness. (This paragraph should be about fairness, not objectivity. You need to tie your example to the concept of fairness.)

      The reporter should collect facts from as many reliable sources as possible. An event may be reported as a fact if there are two or more independent eyewitnesses to it.However, unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 68 percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers have reported unverified news. The facts of the stories are not right and the stories are not represented completely. This statistic shows Hong Kong newspapers are not accurate in the hearts of most of Hong Kong people.

         Some people argue that some newspapers such as Mingpao, Singtao and Ta Kung Pao are famous for impartial writing. However, this is no longer the case . Mingpao was criticized for giving an incorrect account of an incident carried out by Independent Commission Against Corruption in March,2007. Mingpao reported that ICAC had applied the a search warrent from court after it cannot get the news material from the newpaper office. But ICAC insisted that it was not turth(What incident? Elaborate.) Moreover, some scholars said Singtao had concealed the real motive of the incidents now. we no longer see any objective articles these days.

         To conclude, I believe Hong Kong Newspapers are misleading people. They cannot meet the standards of objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Journalism is about reporting as it is. It is just unethical for newspapers (only one?) to mislead people. If the approach of printing incorrect stories is allowed to proliferated, journalism will eventually go down the path of tabloid journalism.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Sun, 28 Oct 2007 12:49:56 GMT

You need to fix the parts in red.

Cheese1987 wrote:

         ~~There are~~ three standards define how an ethical the media is - objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Columbia University emeritus journalism professor Melvin Mencher claims Objectivity should avoid bias and sensationalism or presenting impartial information (Please quote.). Fairness is ~~also~~ advocated by John V. Pavlik. He believes fair reporting should provide 'balanced coverage reflecting all sides of an issue.â (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) ~~It is clearly that accuracy is a must.~~ He also believes accurate reporting should be about "getting the facts right and representing a story completely". (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) ~~these three standards.~~

        ~~In the following, there are examples and statistic. They can prove~~ ~~Hong Kong~~ ~~newspapers can not fulfil the above standards and therefore, Hong Kong Journalism is misleading people. (~~no need to repeat)

       ~~It is dismayed that~~ (Transition. Add a sentence here. Say something about whether the media meets the standard of objectivity.) ~~the propensity of~~ the local reporters are far from being objective; in fact, they to often create sensational stories. Kelly ____(last name?), a famous star in Hong Kong, said the media are exaggerating CD selliong reports (what do you want to say?). She even said,â You know what it is - this situation is just blown up.â (Give a full account of the story here. I don't know anything about this.) ~~This example shows~~ ~~Hong Kong~~ ~~journalism have gone in their unscrupulous use of strategies designed to satisfy the publicâs desire for sensationalism. It is regret that~~ this practice is eroding the public's faith in the media.

        Fairness is also an important standard that it should be complied with. Nevertheless, Sunny Wong had expressed his voice in South China Morning Post. He said,â I am worried, however, about our media, which seem to be selective about the facts they reportâ (Sunny Wong,South China Morning Post,EDT16, EDT, Letters) He claimed former chief executive Tung Chee-wah had been awarded an honorary degree in Hong Kong University of Science and Technology ceremony (what ceremony?). A small group of students booed as the degree was conferred. He believed the applause largely had drowned out the booing. But all that the press reported the next day was the booing. Obviously journalists have taken sides. Distortion of reality of the stories is inconsistent with the objectivity. (This paragraph should be about fairness, not objectivity. You need to tie your example to the concept of fairness.)

      ~~Accuracy is something that~~ the reporter should collect facts from as many reliable sources as possible. An event may be reported as a fact if there are two or more independent eyewitnesses to it. ~~It is unlucky that~~ However, unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that ~~71 percent of~~ ~~Hong Kong~~ ~~people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However,~~ 68 percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and ~~it is believed~~ that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers have reported unverified news. The facts of the stories are not right and the stories are not represented completely. This statistic shows Hong Kong newspapers are not accurate in the hearts of most of Hong Kong people. ~~It is no doubt that journalism is misleading people.~~

         Some people argue that some newspapers such as Mingpao, Singtao and Ta Kung Pao are famous for impartial writing. However, this ~~good name~~ is no longer the case ~~suitable for use~~. Mingpao was criticized for giving an incorrect account of incident by Independent Commission Against Corruption on March,2007. (What incident? Elaborate.) Moreover, some scholars said Singtao had concealed the real motive of the incidents now. ~~It seems that~~ we no longer see any objective articles these days ~~in the near future~~.

         To conclude, I believe Hong Kong Newspapers are misleading people. They cannot meet the standards of objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Journalism is about reporting as it is. It is just unethical ~~immoral and inhumane~~ for newspaper (only one?) to mislead people. If the approach of printing incorrect stories is allowed to proliferated, journalism will eventually go down the path of tabloid journalism.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Sun, 28 Oct 2007 11:18:52 GMT

This is my whole passage. I hope someone can proof it. Thanks!

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see stories full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out three standards of being a responsible press, and then show the incorrect stories and consider the arguments of some so-called impartial stories. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers mislead people.

There are three standards define how an ethical press is - objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Columbia University emeritus journalism professor Melvin Mencher claims Objectivity should avoid bias and sensationalism or presenting impartial information. Fairness is also advocated by John V. Pavlik. He says,â fairness, that is, providing balanced coverage reflecting all sides of an issue.â (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) It is clearly that accuracy is a must. As John V. Pavlik says,â accuracy, that is, getting the facts right and representing a story completely. (John V. Pavlik,2001:93) these three standards.

In the following, there are examples and statistic. They can prove Hong Kong newspapers can not fulfil the above standards and therefore, Hong Kong Journalism is misleading people.

It is dismayed that the propensity of the local media to create sensation and stir up sentiment. Kelly, a famous star in Hong Kong, said the media are exaggerating CD selliong reports. She even said,â You know what it is - this situation is just blown up.â This example shows Hong Kong journalism have gone in their unscrupulous use of strategies designed to satisfy the publicâs desire for sensationalism. It is regret that this practice is eroding the public's faith in the media.

Fairness is also an important standard that it should be complied with. Nevertheless, Sunny Wong had expressed his voice in South China Morning Post. He said,â I am worried, however, about our media, which seem to be selective about the facts they reportâ (Sunny Wong,South China Morning Post,EDT16, EDT, Letters) He claimed former chief executive Tung Chee-wah had awarded an honorary degree in Hong Kong University of Science and Technology ceremony. A small group of students booed as the degree was conferred. He believed the applause largely had drowned out the booing. But all that the press reported the next day was the booing. Obviously journalists have taken sides. Distortion of reality of the stories is inconsistent with the objectivity.

Accuracy is something that the reporter should collect facts from as many reliable sources as possible. An event may be reported as a fact if there are two or more independent eyewitnesses to it. It is unlucky that unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However, 68 percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers have reported unverified news. The facts of the stories are not right and the stories are not represented completely. This statistic shows Hong Kong newspapers are not accurate in the hearts of most of Hong Kong people. It is no doubt that journalism is misleading people.

Some people argue that some newspapers such as Mingpao, Singtao and Ta Kung Pao are famous for impartial writing. However, this good name is no longer suitable for use. Mingpao was criticized for giving an incorrect account of incident by Independent Commission Against Corruption on March,2007. Moreover, some scholars said Singtao had concealed the real motive of the incidents now. It seems that we no longer see any objective articles in the near future.

To conclude, I believe Hong Kong Newspapers are misleading people. They cannot fulfil the standards â objectivity, fairness, and accuracy. Journalism is about reporting as it is. It is just immoral and inhumane for newspaper to mislead people. If the approach of printing incorrect stories is allowed proliferated, journalism will eventually go down the path of tabloid journalism.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Sun, 28 Oct 2007 04:50:42 GMT

Grammatically, much better. (Why do you capitalize newspapers?)

One other thing: Avoid using "it is believed that".

Cheese1987 wrote:

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see stories full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out the incorrect stories, and then consider the arguments of some so-called impartial stories. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers mislead people.

Unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However, 68 of percent of Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong Newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong Newspapers __have_reported unverified news. It is believed that Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.

Thank you!

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Sun, 28 Oct 2007 04:35:44 GMT

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see stories full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out the incorrect stories, and then consider the arguments of some so-called impartial stories. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers mislead people.

Unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However, 68 of percent Hong Kong people believed Hong Kong Newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong Newspapers __have_reported unverified news. It is believed that Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.

Thank you!

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Sat, 27 Oct 2007 22:39:47 GMT

You need to go through every part in red again, especially in the second paragraph.

Cheese1987 wrote:

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see ~~the~~ stories ~~they published are~~ full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out ~~the blind entry~~ (What are you trying to say?), and then consider the argument (only one?) of some so-called impartial ~~writing newspapers~~ stories. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers mislead people.

Unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However, 68 percent people (see how you did it the first time) believed Hong Kong Newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong Newspapers __have_reported unverified news. It is believed that Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Sat, 27 Oct 2007 19:19:22 GMT

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see the stories they published are full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out the blind entry, and then consider the argument of some so-called impartial writing newspapers. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers mislead people.

Unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However, 68 percent people believed Hong Kong Newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong Newspapers __have_reported unverified news. It is believed that Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Sat, 27 Oct 2007 18:27:16 GMT

You need to fix everything in red.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Sat, 27 Oct 2007 16:45:30 GMT

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see the stories they published are full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out the contents of the news misleading people, and then consider the argument of some newspapers are famous for impartial writing. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers mislead people.

Unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of press freedom. However, 68 percent people believed Hong Kong Newspapers are abusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the media is irresponsible. Most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong Newspapers __have_reported unverified news. It is believed that Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.

Is it correct?

Thank you for your kindly help.

Actually this assignment is not completed. I have not yet finished it.

so the points I mention in the first paragraph have not shown.

Re: Please help me proof it~thanks

julielai — Sat, 27 Oct 2007 15:29:16 GMT

Please tell us more about your assignment.

You need to fix the parts in red.

Cheese1987 wrote:

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from what it was ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see ~~the words in the newspapers are full of~~ exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out the contents of the news misleading people, and then consider the argument of some newspapers are famous for impartial writing. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers ~~are immoral and inhumane to~~ mislead people.

~~The~~ unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of ~~the~~ press freedom. However, 68 percent citizen believed Hong Kong Newspapers are misusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the press media is irresponsible. ~~This statistic can reflect that~~ most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers ~~are trustless as the~~ ___ (add a verb) unverified news ~~is always to be found~~. ~~It is no doubt that~~ Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.

Please help me proof it~thanks

Cheese1987 — Sat, 27 Oct 2007 15:04:47 GMT

My English is not good. Please help my proof it. Thanks~!

Newspaper journalism today is quite different from ten or twenty years ago. Instead of objective stories with detailed analyses, we now see the words in the newspapers are full of exaggerations. In this essay I will first of all point out the contents of the news misleading people, and then consider the argument of some newspapers are famous for impartial writing. I shall conclude by arguing that Hong Kong newspapers are immoral and inhumane to mislead people.

The unverified news is often published. A survey conducted by Hong Kong University has shown that 71 percent of Hong Kong people are satisfied with the degree of the press freedom. However, 68 percent citizen believed Hong Kong Newspapers are misusing the freedom of the press and it is believed that the press media is irresponsible. This statistic can reflect that most Hong Kong people think Hong Kong newspapers are trustless as the unverified news is always to be found. It is no doubt that Hong Kong newspapers are not objective.