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Re: Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field - page 2-3 - proof read

Feebs11 — Mon, 26 Nov 2007 23:31:20 GMT

Check with your supervisor, but usually you would put something like " (Source: ADA Risk Management Survey, [date]) under the charts.

In your citation of sources, you need the page number.
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Re: Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field - page 2-3 - proof read

Rakesh219 — Mon, 26 Nov 2007 23:04:59 GMT

How do i mention the sources below the charts? The chart is a pdf file from American Dental Association, with title Risk Management Survey, and page number (3) and do i need to mention the page number for the sentence below

"According to the survey conducted by the ADA this percentage is likely to rise as additional claims are reported and those currently filed are settled."

although it is not word to word i did make use of the word "rise".\

Thanks...

Re: Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field - page 2-3 - proof read

Feebs11 — Mon, 26 Nov 2007 14:06:24 GMT

Rakesh219 wrote:
Hi Feebs11, first of all thanks for your help...but i didnt quite understand the changes you did to this para....the last few lines...

"According to the above table, the incidence of claims that are closed without payment show a fall of roughly 0.04% - 0.28% in a given year while incidence of claims for which payment was made show a fall of approximately 0.10% on a given year. And although the total incidence of claims filed between the year â99 and â03 has fallen from 3.96% to 2.86%, which is a fall of only 1.10% within five years. According to the survey conducted by the ADA this percentage is likely to rise as additional claims are reported and those currently filed are settled."

and the reason the table is in that manner is because it was formated/written in the exact manner in the source document. Changing it in anyway would result to plagarism according to my professor.

#1 Without the comma, it is a awfully long sentence. You could omit that one, but replace it with a comma between "year" and "while".

#2 It was not clear what is the relationship between the statement about the fall in claims and the statement about the percentage change. Making this two sentences gives a better logical structure. However, you probably know if the phrase "according to the survey conducted by the ADA" should be attached to the sentence about the fall in claims or the sentence about the possible rise in percentage of claims.

I take your point about the tables. They will need their source to be given below them.

Re: Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field - page 2-3 - proof read

Rakesh219 — Mon, 26 Nov 2007 11:52:34 GMT

Hi Feebs11, first of all thanks for your help...but i didnt quite understand the changes you did to this para....the last few lines...

"According to the above table, the incidence of claims that are closed without payment show a fall of roughly 0.04% - 0.28% in a given year while incidence of claims for which payment was made show a fall of approximately 0.10% on a given year. And although the total incidence of claims filed between the year â99 and â03 has fallen from 3.96% to 2.86%, which is a fall of only 1.10% within five years. According to the survey conducted by the ADA this percentage is likely to rise as additional claims are reported and those currently filed are settled."

and the reason the table is in that manner is because it was formated/written in the exact manner in the source document. Changing it in anyway would result to plagarism according to my professor.

Re: Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field - page 2-3 - proof read

Feebs11 — Mon, 26 Nov 2007 01:48:57 GMT

Rakesh219 wrote:
Hi i would really appreciate it if you could proof read the page 2 &3 of my report "Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field". I would really appreciate it if you could proof read my report and let me know if there are any mistakes or confusing sentences. Please let me know if i should add a comma or semicolon as i always make mistakes there. Thanks a lot.

P.S. the paranthesis is ment for placing my sources.....

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Trends in Liability Claims

As the rate of insurance increases so would the cost of dental care eventually. Factors like incidence and severity of claims, costs the involved in severity claims, and treatments and allegations involved in paid claims all affect the rate of insurance. For example, as more people file malpractice claims, so more insurance companies will charge for their policies to keep up with the growing cost of indemnity.

Incidents of Claims

These incidence statistics reflect the claims experience of 12 professional liability insurance companies that together insure 97,416 dentists, of whom 85% are general practitioners (______)

                                            Incidence of Claims
Year            Incidence of claims           Incidence of claims         Total Incidence
                    for which                        that were closed                     of claims
                payment was made                without payment
2003             .89%                                    1.97%                                 2.86%
2002             .92%                                    2.25%                                 3.17%
2001               1.00%                                2.37%                               3.37%
2000               1.24%                                2.64%                                 3.88%
1999               1.36%                                2.60%                                 3.96%

According to the above table, the incidence of claims that are closed without payment show a fall of roughly 0.04% - 0.28% in a given year while incidence of claims for which payment was made show a fall of approximately 0.10% on a given year. And although the total incidence of claims filed between the year â99 and â03 has fallen from 3.96% to 2.86%, which is a fall of only 1.10% within five years. According to the survey conducted by the ADA this percentage is likely to rise as additional claims are reported and those currently filed are settled.

Severity of Claims

These severity statistics reflect the claims experience of 13 professional liability insurance companies that together insure 101,144 dentists, of whom, 82% are general practitioners (______)

                                        Severity of Claims
Year                Weighted Average         Highest           Lowest
2003                       $14,458            $30,128          $943
2002                   $17,363                $28,000          $2,839
2001                   $16,550                $37,795            $4,366
2000                   $18,365              $38,688          $2,489
1999                   $17,803              $27,000          $1,219

With reference to the above table one might think that the cost involved in malpractice claims is surprisingly low; yet according to the survey conducted by the ADA, insurance companies often recommend dentists to purchase policies that cover at least $1 million for a single claim. The reason that insurance companies to recommend such policies is on the chances of a claim being extremely severe. It is also important to understand that the cost involved in the above table ~~also~~ includes attorney fees and the claims for which payment was not made. Although the weighted average and lowest cost appears to have lowered from the year 1999 to 2003, it has lowered in a fluctuating manner, therefore it is highly likely that the cost could rise again as additional claims are filed and those currently filed are settled as mentioned in the incidence of claims section. ~~Whereas t~~ It should be noted that the highest cost of severity of claims has increased from $27,000 to $30,000 between the year 1999 and 2003.

Usually chronological tables run from top to bottom [oldest first, newest last]. Is there a particular reason for doing it the way you have?

Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field - page 2-3 - proof read

Rakesh219 — Sun, 25 Nov 2007 18:32:37 GMT

Hi i would really appreciate it if you could proof read the page 2 &3 of my report "Challenges Involved in the Dentistry Field". I would really appreciate it if you could proof read my report and let me know if there are any mistakes or confusing sentences. Please let me know if i should add a comma or semicolon as i always make mistakes there. Thanks a lot.

P.S. the paranthesis is ment for placing my sources.....

----------------------------------
Trends in Liability Claims

As the rate of insurance increases so would the cost of dental care eventually. Factors like incidence and severity of claims, cost involved in severity claims, and treatments and allegations involved in paid claims all affect the rate of insurance. For example, as more people file malpractice claims the more insurance companies will charge for their policies to keep up with the growing cost.

Incidents of Claims

These incidence statistics reflect the claims experience of 12 professional liability insurance companies that together insure 97,416 dentists, of whom, 85% are general practitioners (______)

                                            Incidence of Claims
Year            Incidence of claims           Incidence of claims         Total Incidence
                    for which                        that are closed                     of claims
                payment was made                without payment
2003             .89%                                    1.97%                                 2.86%
2002             .92%                                    2.25%                                 3.17%
2001               1.00%                                2.37%                               3.37%
2000               1.24%                                2.64%                                 3.88%
1999               1.36%                                2.60%                                 3.96%

According to the above table the incidence of claims that are closed without payment show a fall of roughly 0.04% - 0.28% in a given year while incidence of claims for which payment was made show a fall of approximately 0.10% on a given year. And although the total incidence of claims filed between the year â99 and â03 has fallen from 3.96% to 2.86%, which is a fall of only 1.10% within five years, according to the survey conducted by ADA this percentage is likely to rise as additional claims are reported and those currently filed are settled.

Severity of Claims

These severity statistics reflect the claims experience of 13 professional liability insurance companies that together insure 101,144 dentists, of whom, 82% are general practitioners (______)

                                        Severity of Claims
Year                Weighted Average         Highest           Lowest
2003                       $14,458            $30,128          $943
2002                   $17,363                $28,000          $2,839
2001                   $16,550                $37,795            $4,366
2000                   $18,365              $38,688          $2,489
1999                   $17,803              $27,000          $1,219

With reference to the above table one might think that the cost involved in malpractice claims is surprisingly low; yet according to the survey conducted by ADA insurance companies often recommend dentist to purchase policies that cover at lest $1 million for a single claim. The reason for insurance companies to recommend such policies is on the chances of a claim being extremely severe. It is also important to understand that the cost involved in the above table also includes attorney fees and the claims for which payment was not made. Although the weighted average and lowest cost appears to have lowered from the year 1999 to 2003 it has lowered in fluctuating manner, therefore it is highly likely that the cost could rise again as additional claims are filed and those currently filed are settled as mentioned in the incidence of claims section. Whereas the highest cost of severity of claims has increased from $27,000 to $30,000 between the year 1999 and 2003.