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Re: Hi. Could anyone proofread this for me?

Mister Micawber — Sat, 29 Dec 2007 01:03:44 GMT

Drawing pens will remind you of this amazingly artistic person. He may not be his class genius, but when it comes to handling things, complicated or not, he is at the top of the list. Occasionally, he gets annoyed, but every deed has a reason. If you have a problem, consult this fellow, and he may lend you a hand, may guide you the right way, and may afterwards bring you laughter; he never fails to amuse. He is sensitive towards others. <name of a person> honours his companions not only as friends, but also as a part of his life.

Re: Hi. Could anyone proofread this for me?

Anonymous — Fri, 28 Dec 2007 10:30:48 GMT

Drawing pens, if seen, will remind you of this amazing person who possesses good talent in art. He may not be the genius in the class, but when it comes to handling things, whether complicated or not, he may be the first on the list. Ocasionally, he gets annoyed at things, but seemingly every deed has a reason. If you have a problem, you'd better consult this guy since he may lend you a hand, may guide you through the right way, and may afterwards give you laughter. When somebody goes jolly, this guy will never fail to amuse. His only difference is his sensitivity towards others. Giving praise, <name of a person> accepts his companions not only as friends, but also as a part of his life

I don't know if I'm on the right track. I'm having a hard time already. But thanks for the help.

Re: Hi. Could anyone proofread this for me?

Mister Micawber — Thu, 27 Dec 2007 13:59:48 GMT

You'd better start again on most of them. Here are some hints:

posesses -- spelling
talents -- number (should be singular)
the heart of the class -- word choice; your correction is OK, but 'the genius'
untroublesome, -- word choice; your correction is OK
in -- wrong preposition; your correction is correct.
. Ocassionally,-- spelling
deeds -- number
every -- wrong word
problems -- word choice
give you satisfaction. -- wrong phrase
diverting, -- wrong word
bothering -- wrong word
praises,-- number
fellowship.-- word choice

Re: Hi. Could anyone proofread this for me?

Anonymous — Thu, 27 Dec 2007 11:38:13 GMT

Drawing pens, if seen, will remind you of this amazing person who carries good capability in art. He may not be genius in the class, but when it comes to handling things, whether complicated or not, he may be the first on the list. Ocasionally, he gets annoyed at things, but seemingly every deeds has every reason. In times of problems, he may lend you a hand, may guide you through the right way, and may give you laughter. When somebody goes jolly, this guy will never fail to amuse. His only difference is his sensitivity towards others. Giving kindness, <name of a person> accepts his companions not only as friends, but also as fellowships.

Thank you, Mister Micawber. I already corrected some of the problems you pointed out, but I'm not sure if they're correct. Could you be more specific?

I'm not sure what to do with these problems:

1. Ocasionally, he gets annoyed at things, but seemingly every deeds has every reason.
2. In times of problems, he may lend you a hand, may guide you through the right way, and may give you laughter.

Re: Hi. Could anyone proofread this for me?

Mister Micawber — Thu, 27 Dec 2007 09:41:16 GMT

I have underlined some problem areas:

Drawing pens, if seen, will remind you of this amazing person who posesses good talents in art. He may not be the heart of the class, but when it comes to handling things, whether complicated or untroublesome, he may be the first in the list. Ocassionally, he gets annoyed at things, but seemingly every deeds has every reason. In times of problems, he may lend you a hand, may guide you through the right way, and may give you satisfaction. When somebody goes diverting, this guy will never fail to amuse. The only thing that seems bothering is his sensitivity towards others. Giving praises, <name of a person> accepts his companions not only as friends, but also as fellowship.

Hi. Could anyone proofread this for me?

Anonymous — Thu, 27 Dec 2007 07:03:45 GMT

I wrote this for my friend. I would appreciate if anyone of you would proofread this. Thanks.

Drawing pens, if seen, will remind you of this amazing person who posesses good talents in art. He may not be the heart of the class, but when it comes to handling things, whether complicated or untroublesome, he may be the first in the list. Ocassionally, he gets annoyed at things, but seemingly every deeds has every reason. In times of problems, he may lend you a hand, may guide you through the right way, and may give you satisfaction. When somebody goes diverting, this guy will never fail to amuse. The only thing that seems bothering is his sensitivity towards others. Giving praises, <name of a person> accepts his companions not only as friends, but also as fellowship.