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Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Fandorin — Tue, 22 Jan 2008 20:30:23 GMT

Hampeh wrote:
Fandorin wrote:

Actually I have, but since my employer did not paid my salary for three months, I just consider myself as jobless.

What is it? New form of past tense?

ok...so how it should be?

Ups... How could I make such terrible mistake? It wasn't I.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Altarex — Thu, 10 Jan 2008 05:13:30 GMT

its fairly hard to write a book so you must first understand the meaning of english an writeing before you start i suggested in seekn some help from a professor

..... or one of us

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Hummingbird — Tue, 08 Jan 2008 16:31:28 GMT

Good for you, Hampeh, keep working on your flaws,,

I hope you make it as a novelist, in no time......You know, maybe I should follow your lead, I too have this dream, I've always had it.

I've got one question:

[after I graduated from University]

Does this sound better???

Thanks to you and Mr. Micawber. : )

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Mister Micawber — Tue, 08 Jan 2008 06:26:26 GMT

Oops-- yes, I missed that one, Hampeh. It should read has not paid or did not pay. Perhaps you'd better post a final revised copy just to double-check everything, if you have time.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Hampeh — Mon, 07 Jan 2008 14:04:05 GMT

Fandorin wrote:
Actually I have, but since my employer did not paid my salary for three months, I just consider myself as jobless.

What is it? New form of past tense?

ok...so how it should be?

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Fandorin — Fri, 04 Jan 2008 11:01:47 GMT

Actually I have, but since my employer did not paid my salary for three months, I just consider myself as jobless.

What is it? New form of past tense?

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Mister Micawber — Thu, 03 Jan 2008 09:13:24 GMT

Excellent work, Hampeh. Here's the last one fixed properly:

...thatâs the reason the employer wants to keep you in the company.

Happy New Year.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Hampeh — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 14:40:06 GMT

Thank you sensei . I think I know where is my mistake. Itâs a past tense.

~~Actually I have, but since my employer did not pay my salary for three months ago, I just consider myself as jobless.~~

Actually I have, but since my employer did not paid my salary for three months, I just consider myself as jobless.

~~Finding a job seems like more difficult nowadays.~~

Finding a job seems more difficult nowadays.

~~For 5 years, after I was graduated from the university, I studied a lot of computer stuff, reading a lot of books, manuals, articles etc.~~

For 5 years, after I graduated from the university, I studied a lot of computer stuff, reading a lot of books, manuals, articles etc.

Sometimes, Iâm really tired being in this industry because you need to know more, to learn new things for every single day to make sure you are good enough and thatâs the reason why the employer want to kept you in the company.

Sometimes, Iâm really tired being in this industry because you need to know more, to learn new things every single day to make sure you are good enough and thatâs the reason why the employer keep you in the company.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Mister Micawber — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 13:25:57 GMT

Isn't this fun? I have underlined the remaining problem areas (note that you have created a couple of new problems with your adjustments... and maybe I missed one before):

I donât know what to do. My girlfriend just left me, I donât have enough money, but I have a lot of debts to pay, and I donât have a job. Actually I have, but since my employer did not pay my salary for three months ago, I just consider myself as jobless. Finding a job seems like more difficult nowadays. I sent a lot of email and my resume everywhere but the response was not as expected.

For 5 years, after I was graduated from the university, I studied a lot of computer stuff, reading a lot of books, manuals, articles etc. Sometimes, Iâm really tired being in this industry because you need to know more, to learn new things for every single day to make sure you are good enough and thatâs the reason why the employer want to kept you in the company.

Now it's my bedtime.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Hampeh — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 12:57:51 GMT

Thank you teacher

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Mister Micawber — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 12:45:16 GMT

Much better! I've underlined some problem areas again:

I donât know what to do. My girlfriend just left me, I donât having money, but I have a lot of debts to pay, and I donât have a job. Actually I have, but since my employer did not pay my salary for past three months. I just consider myself as jobless. Finding a job seems like hard stuff nowadays. I sent a lot of email and my resume everywhere but the response was not as expected.

For 5 years, after graduated from the university, I studied a lot of computer stuff, reading a lot of books, manuals, articles etc. Sometimes, Iâm really tired being in this industry because you need to know more, to learn new things for every single day to make sure you are good enough and thatâs the reason why the employer want kept you in the company.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Hampeh — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 12:25:16 GMT

Thanks for your prompt reply. I really appreciate it. I'm not really good in English especially in grammar, but i try my best to make a correction for the problems as stated.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Mister Micawber — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 11:58:20 GMT

I've underlined some problem areas:

Iâm jobless.

I donât know what else to do. My girlfriend just left me, I donât have money but I have lot of debts to pay, and I donât have job. Actually I have but since my employer didnât pay my salary for 3 months, so I just consider myself as a jobless. Finding a job seems like a hard stuff nowadays. I sent a lot of email and broadcast my resume everywhere but the response was not as expected.

Since past 5 years, after graduate from the university, I study a lot of computer stuff. Read a lot of books, manuals, articles etc. sometimes, Iâm really tired being in this industry. I.T. industries because you need to know more, to learn new things everyday to make sure you are good enough and thatâs the reason why the employer want keep you in the company.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Hampeh — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 11:22:18 GMT

Heheâ¦of course I know that . I still need to learn more from you guys. mmm, any correction for that because i don't think it is perfect.

Actually, Iâm trying to practice writing but Iâm not sure whether it is correct or not. So I think here is the best place to check it.

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

Mister Micawber — Sun, 30 Dec 2007 10:33:04 GMT

I don't think you're ready to start that novel yet.