http://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayReportCompositionWriting/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment, or just read for fun.enXMOD (Build: 3614.32638)http://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htm#48815Fri, 24 Apr 2009 01:53:11 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:48815anon10http://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htm#48815http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-48815.xmlsunnyberny, If you are still here, I have a slight revision. During my recently completed academic year at Berkeley, I found the conditions excellent not only to pursue my studies but also to improve my knowledge of the English language. I want to keep the symmetry. "...not only to..., but also to..." Sorry I didn't catch that the first time. MountainHikerhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htm#48765Tue, 24 Mar 2009 02:53:11 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:48765sunnyberny1http://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htm#48765http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-48765.xmlThis seems to be a great forum. Thank you for your answer MountainHiker, it really helped me a lot. Thanks. sunnybernyhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htm#48652Sat, 24 Jan 2009 02:53:11 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:48652anon12http://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htm#48652http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-48652.xmlsunnyberny, Welcome to English Forums. You are obviously a very bright guy, so I won't comment on the content. You can decide yourself what you want to write about and how it is written. Rather I will simply focus on the grammar portion. I shall in the following briefly describe my accomplishments since my graduation from high school in 2001. First of all I want to point out that all the grades indicated in the text below are based on the French grading system. After graduating from high school I was awarded a prize for my high school thesis in math from the Mathematical Department of the University of Limoges. Also, because of my accomplishments at High School (GPA of 18) I was allowed to participate at a test for high...http://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htmFri, 24 Apr 2009 01:53:11 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:48646sunnyberny3http://www.englishforums.com/English/TwoShortEssaysApplication/jpzj/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-48646.xmlHi, I am a student in France and I want to apply for an American investment company. Therefore I have to write two short essays. The topics of the essays are not really important, but they should be written in correct English. If anyone would have the time to read the essays and send my a reply about possible errors I would be very glad. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Here is the first essay: I shall in the following briefly describe my accomplishments since my graduation from high school in 2001. First of all I want to point out that all the grades indicated in the text below are based on the French grading system. After graduating from high school I was awarded a...