Re: could you help me with essay?

julielai — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 14:32:33 GMT

You need to fix the parts in red.

Anonymous

~~In our life, weâve encountered a lot of respectable people that we should admire the way they live.~~ ~~And~~ itâs supposed that parents are the best ~~and respectful~~ teachers due to the fact that they are the closest people ______ (try wording it differently) their children. On top of that the children undoubtedly absorb lessons from their parents. However, parents are not always the best teacher ~~on account of their quality that has bad influence on their children.~~
Firstly, some parents are not properly educated or donât care anything about their children (these are two different reasons). They could be so neglectful that the children canât learn important things to live our life such as how to get along and communicate with others. Providing that they are not able to learn these vital things for life, they will have hard time and could blame their parents for giving their birth when their age reaches the age of adult. (You need to talk about how parents don't always know how to handle their children.)
Secondly, In modern society, ~~the speed of the change is too fast for people to keep up with it. And this fact gives rise for~~ parents ~~to the lack of~~ do not have time to spend with their children. ~~Itâs been so long that~~ money became the most priority for them. ~~In comparison with money, children have left behind from their interest since~~ they believe that money can do everything including providing a good education for their kids. You could imagine that the kid who are alone in their room. A child problem such as taking drugs and drinking can be put down to feeling cut off.

Finally, ~~Iâm in the opinion that~~ those parents who had committed crimes ~~such as bumping off or stealing someoneâs belongings~~ are not eligible to teach their children. ~~Assuming that they spoke abusive language and beat up their children.~~ Would you believe that you just let them teach their son and daughter? I donât think that they canât be grown with normal life that their friends have for sure. (Talk about the examples these parents set)

To sum up, for all these reasons, ~~I have come to conclusion that~~ parents are not the best teacher. Some parents are not properly qualified to teach their children because they have some problems themselves ~~such as lack of time to spend with their children, their personality and the background of what theyâve done wrong in their life.~~

could you help me with essay?

Anonymous — Sat, 22 Mar 2008 13:29:03 GMT

hi all. my name is ko and this is my essay .

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In our life, weâve encountered a lot of respectable people that we should admire the way they live. And itâs supposed that parents are the best and respectful teachers due to the fact that they are the closest people that can easily approach their children. On top of that the children undoubtedly absorb lessons from their parents. However, parents are not the best teacher on account of their quality that has bad influence on their children.

Firstly, some parents are not properly educated or donât care anything about their children. They could be so neglectful that the children canât learn important things to live our life such as how to get along and communicate with others. Providing that they are not able to learn these vital things for life, they will have hard time and could blame their parents for giving their birth when their age reaches the age of adult.

Secondly, In modern society, the speed of the change is too fast for people to keep up with it. And this fact gives rise for parents to the lack of time to spend with their children. Itâs been so long that money became the most priority for them. In comparison with money, children have left behind from their interest since they believe that money can do everything including education. You could imagine that the kid who are alone in their room. A child problem such as taking drugs and drinking can be put down to feeling cut off.

Finally, Iâm in the opinion that those parents who had committed crime such as bumping off or stealing someoneâs belongings are not eligible to teach their children. Assuming that they spoke abusive language and beat up their children. Would you believe that you just let them teach their son and daughter? I donât think that they canât be grown with normal life that their friends have for sure.

To sum up, for all these reasons, I have come to conclusion that parents are not the best teacher. Some parents are not properly qualified to teach their children because they have some problems such as lack of time to spend with their children, their personality and the background of what theyâve done wrong in their life.

i have difficulty writing essay. sometimes it makes me feel frustrated. but im going to stick at this unitil i can have good command in englsih. and

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