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Re: Which is better & why?

OrcaDeen — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 19:15:14 GMT

Hi,

Thank you so much for your nice complements. It is due to your continuous support

But I really mean it, for sometimes i feel my Englis is Arabian English ..hehe

Orca

Re: Which is better & why?

Clive — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 18:54:51 GMT

Hi,

You're not. Your English is pretty good.

Clive

Re: Which is better & why?

OrcaDeen — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 18:28:32 GMT

Well, you lefted up my spirit

thanks a million for it

But I find it a problem sometimes when I have more than one way of arranging the sentence and at the end I come to the conclusion that I'm failure

Re: Which is better & why?

Clive — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 15:58:05 GMT

Hi,

Where did you find these? They all sound pretty archaic in terms of syntax and vocabulary. Do you want us to update them?

Why bother?

Clive

Which is better & why?

OrcaDeen — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 10:51:06 GMT

Please comment on the following sentences by determining which is better and why

1-A-"I paced forward and greeted him, then, in return, he interlocked our arms and suggested we walk together along the watercourse. "

B-"Pacing forward and greeting him, he interlocked our arms and suggested we walk together along the watercourse"

2-A-"After we walked a short distance, he said :".."

B-"After a short distance walk, he said : "......"

C-"After walking for a short distance , he said: ".."

3-A-"I marvel that a man gives distress half a chance to eat away at his heart and the hunger for vengeance to deprive him from a wink of sleep although he can cast both aside by praying."

B-" I marvel that a man allows distress to eat away at his heart and the hunger for vengeance deprive him from a wink of sleep while/although he can cast both aside by praying"

Thanks in advance