http://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayReportCompositionWriting/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment, or just read for fun.enXMOD (Build: 3715.30106)http://www.englishforums.com/English/CorrectionOfAnEssay/grjpw/post.htm#504050Tue, 22 Sep 2009 10:52:19 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:504050Clive0http://www.englishforums.com/English/CorrectionOfAnEssay/grjpw/post.htm#504050http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-504050.xmlHi, Before it is worth looking at your grammar, you need to consider and completely revise your organization. You have too many very, very short paragraphs. It's totally inappropriate. Each paragraph should identify and discuss one of your main points. Furthermore, in an essay you don't have numbered sections. Best wishes, Clivehttp://www.englishforums.com/English/CorrectionOfAnEssay/grjpw/post.htmTue, 22 Sep 2009 10:52:19 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:503990learner_of_english1http://www.englishforums.com/English/CorrectionOfAnEssay/grjpw/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-503990.xmlHello, I'm trying to write Essays to improve my English level cause I want to study in the United Kingdom. But I always have some problems in grammar. So I would like a kind English speaker correct the big mistakes in the grammar of my sentences (not the content). I'll be very grateful if you can help me Thanks a lot ! The topic is : " According to press articles, the US is a more masculine country than France. To what extent do you believe this is true ? " Through History, we’ve seen that American people are proud and want to manage the world. Meanwhile, French people know how to live and they have a more collectivism mentality. According to several studies, the US is a more “masculine” country than France....