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Re: Japan, not safely country now?

Mister Micawber — Sun, 11 May 2008 12:37:21 GMT

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I have underlined some problem areas:

So many days we hear the news of murder, not safety enough to let our child playing around themselves now days. This is so much different from the days of my childhood. This is one of the reason why some marriage couples hesitate to have ~~their~~ children. Still, better if compare to US safety level, too much murder that is why not all the cases are on the new. Whole the world is getting worse and worse? Some places have war problem, things are much different in such area. Society getting complicated, increasing the number of mental health patient and suicide. Things are much simple in 20 years ago, you just keep working at the same company and doing same job, normally, you do not have to worry about anything. Society changed, you have to keep yourself winner in ~~winners - losers~~ battle field. I was kind of shocked when I watch the movie âfight clubâ and âthe beachâ. As for my recognition, Hollywood starts never play the role in these ~~little~~ complicated/confused movies before. These are definitely not horror movies, but generally little ~~creasy~~ ones? Who can say he/she is creasy since almost all of us are sort of creasy?

Japan, not safely country now?

Anonymous — Sun, 11 May 2008 10:53:41 GMT

Would you please point out my errors. Thank you. So many days we hear the news of murder, not safety enough to let our child playing around themselves now days. This is so much different from the days of my childhood. This is one of the reason why some marriage couples hesitate to have their children. Still, better if compare to US safety level, too much murder that is why not all the cases are on the new. Whole the world is getting worse and worse? Some places have war problem, things are much different in such area. Society getting complicated, increasing the number of mental health patient and suicide. Things are much simple in 20 years ago, you just keep working at the same company and doing same job, normally, you do not have to worry about anything. Society changed, you have to keep yourself winner in winners - losers battle field. I was kind of shocked when I watch the movie âfight clubâ and âthe beachâ. As for my recognition, Hollywood starts never play the role in these little complicated/confused movies before. These are definitely not horror movies, but generally little creasy ones? Who can say he/she is creasy since almost all of us are sort of creasy?