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Re: Spirng Awakening half-page

Mister Micawber — Sun, 18 May 2008 00:25:26 GMT

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I have underlined some problem areas:

For the on-campus workshop that I was required to do, is I went to one of the performing art show on May 15, 2008. The name of the show is Springs Awakening. The show started at 8:00 pm and ended at 10:45 pm including a fifteen minutes intermission. There were not a whole lot of people watching the show only about one-fourth of the seats in the theater was occupied. The show was good but not that great. The reason why I said it was good and not great is because some of the language that they used in the show was hard for me to understand. The show is about a girl named Wendla; she is fourteen years old and wanted her mom to tell her where baby comes from. Her mom didnât want to tell her. She met a guy name Melchior. They had sex. Wendla got sick, but didnât know that she is pregnant until her mom told her so. The reason why Wendla didnât know that she is pregnant is because her mom never told her the truth of how baby was made. She didnât know that sex could make you pregnant; she thought it was only if you love someone so much. She later died of anemia. Melchior knew of Wendla dead when he stumbled across a grave with her name on it. All in all, there is more to the show but I decided to only sum up the main point of the show or else this paper could be several pages long.

Spirng Awakening half-page

Anonymous — Sat, 17 May 2008 23:58:57 GMT

Hi there, can anyone check if I have any error? Thank you a lot to whoever help me.

For the on-campus workshop that I was required to do, is I went to one of the performing art show on May 15, 2008. The name of the show is Springs Awakening. The show started at 8:00pm and ended at 10:45pm including a fifteen minutes intermission. There were not a whole lot of people watching the show only about one-fourth of the seats in the theater was occupied. The show was good but not that great. The reason why I said it was good and not great is because some of the language that they used in the show was hard for me to understand. The show is about a girl named Wendla; she is fourteen years old and wanted her mom to tell her where baby comes from. Her mom didnât want to tell her. She met a guy name Melchior. They had sex. Wendla got sick, but didnât know that she is pregnant until her mom told her so. The reason why Wendla didnât know that she is pregnant is because her mom never told her the truth of how baby was made. She didnât know that sex could make you pregnant; she thought it was only if you love someone so much. She later died of anemia. Melchior knew of Wendla dead when he stumbled across a grave with her name on it. All in all, there is more to the show but I decided to only sum up the main point of the show or else this paper could be several pages long.