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Re: (Urgent!!!) Please help me with this argumentative essay

julielai — Sun, 08 Jun 2008 14:52:17 GMT

Your ideas and organizatin are basically okay.

Re: (Urgent!!!) Please help me with this argumentative essay

Chibi — Sun, 08 Jun 2008 04:17:35 GMT

Thank you very much for your help!

Could I ask you a question? What you highlighted here are some problems of expression; What do you think about my ideas/ the organization of the ideas for this topic? Are the ideas strong enough and is the organization suitable?

Thank you again!

Re: (Urgent!!!) Please help me with this argumentative essay

julielai — Wed, 04 Jun 2008 01:20:09 GMT

I've highlighted a few thing for you to fix.

Chibi

Hi there,

Please help me to check grammar, expression, word choices and also the content of this essay. I found hard to develop the ideas when dealing with this topic.

By the way, in your opinion, should a nation have the same natinonal curriculum for all their students? And why?

Thank you very much!

Topic 2: A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
There have been many arguments about whether or not a nation should have the national curriculum for all its students till they enter college. The advocates for the national curriculum assert that it ensures the same basic background for all students before essential skills for jobs are trained in colleges. However, it would be better if the nation only maintains the same curriculum in primary and lower-secondary schools and allows upper-secondary schools to determine their own courses on the basis of the national standards.
It is conceded that basic background (spelling, reading, simple calculating, understanding history, geography, simple physic and chemist phenomena) is important to all students. Before being able to attend a more complicated science lessons, they must know how to read, how to spell and how to identify items related to such lessons. Before being able to judge the wrong and the right, they must be taught ~~with~~ some simple models in life. There is little difference to direct studentsâ perception at the age of fifteen and below. Therefore, a national curriculum is necessary and suitable here.
However, from sixteen on, students should leave free to develop their passion in specific fields. Lessons in upper-secondary schools are required to provide them with as much knowledge on such fields as possible. That will prepare them for more practice on skills in college, relating the perceived background of the same fields. In that case, it is wise to let upper-schools design their own specialized programs or lessons which can meet their own studentsâ needs and wants. Moreover, each upper-school must has its strengths; thus, allowing it to determine the possible courses means giving it an opportunity to ~~well~~ develop itself as well as providing students with enriching environment to show off their ability and interest. Nonetheless, it is necessary that these programs or lessons are under a censor of the Education Ministry so that all the schools will ~~not be out of the national control and~~ meet the certain focus. In conclusion, it is necessary to have a national curriculum for all lower-secondary students and under. Moreover, upper-schools should determine valuable courses to ~~well~~ prepare students for college levels according to their own strengths and national standards.

Re: (Urgent!!!) Please help me with this argumentative essay

Chibi — Sun, 01 Jun 2008 09:46:22 GMT

Hi there,

Please help me! I really need it, as soon as possible.

Thanks in advance!

(Urgent!!!) Please help me with this argumentative essay

Chibi — Sun, 01 Jun 2008 01:52:12 GMT

Hi there,

Please help me to check grammar, expression, word choices and also the content of this essay. I found hard to develop the ideas when dealing with this topic.

By the way, in your opinion, should a nation have the same natinonal curriculum for all their students? And why?

Thank you very much!

Topic 2: A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.

There have been many arguments about whether or not a nation should have the national curriculum for all its students till they enter college. The advocates for the national curriculum assert that it ensures the same basic background for all students before essential skills for jobs are trained in colleges. However, it would be better if the nation only maintains the same curriculum in primary and lower-secondary schools and allows upper-secondary schools to determine their own courses on the basis of the national standards.

It is conceded that basic background (spelling, reading, simple calculating, understanding history, geography, simple physic and chemist phenomena) is important to all students. Before being able to attend a more complicated science lessons, they must know how to read, how to spell and how to identify items related to such lessons. Before being able to judge the wrong and the right, they must be taught with some simple models in life. There is little difference to direct studentsâ perception at the age of fifteen and below. Therefore, a national curriculum is necessary and suitable here.

However, from sixteen on, students should leave free to develop their passion in specific fields. Lessons in upper-secondary schools are required to provide them with as much knowledge on such fields as possible. That will prepare them for more practice on skills in college, relating the perceived background of the same fields. In that case, it is wise to let upper-schools design their own specialized programs or lessons which can meet their own studentsâ needs and wants. Moreover, each upper-school must has its strengths; thus, allowing it to determine the possible courses means giving it an opportunity to well develop itself as well as providing students with enriching environment to show off their ability and interest. Nonetheless, it is necessary that these programs or lessons are under a censor of the Education Ministry so that all the schools will not be out of the national control and meet the certain focus.

In conclusion, it is necessary to have a national curriculum for all lower-secondary students and under. Moreover, upper-schools should determine valuable courses to well prepare students for college levels according to their own strengths and national standards.