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Re: Tobacco

flash2008 — Wed, 11 Jun 2008 00:12:02 GMT

thank you Miss julielai it was very helpful ,

Re: Tobacco

julielai — Tue, 10 Jun 2008 10:00:23 GMT

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flash2008

Is this life quite long, so there is a need to shrink it? Most people donât think so. However a great deal of people does bad habits that harms their life and health. ~~Nowadays~~ many researches have confirmed the strong link between tobacco and cancers, but the number of smokers is still very high. The proportion of the male adult global population smokers almost half OâConnel (2006, 105).Although, the link between cancer and smoking, many teens worldwide smoke, it is around one in five OâConnel (2006, 105).However, the cigarettes factories and tobacco companies have different opinion about smoking. ~~They have large business and great deal of consumers.~~ This essay will talk about the advantages and disadvantages of smoking.
The first motivation of smoking is that smoking is a life style choice, or in other words it is fashionable. So many people smoke in the first place to be stylish. The movies used to show actors smoke in many occasions, Moreover a number of popular people smoke in public. The pleasure could be seen as advantage of smoking. People some time smoke to feel happy. Using smoking to relax is another reason ~~for smoking which is very popular advantage as the smokers says~~. Finally, the most important thing about smoking is making business. The tobacco business is very huge and there are many tobacco factories. In result, many people work in that field .~~moreover, Tobacco is the main product of some countries and especially the poor countries~~. Also, tobacco trade gives a great deal of tax to governments which make it a respectable business.
On the other hand, the tobacco (the act, not the product) has countless of disadvantages. Firstly, it causes diseases .The first time smoking was linked to cancer was in 1951 OâConnel (2006, 105).It cause several type of cancer such as lung cancer, oral cavity cancer and laryngeal cancer besides emphysema, chronic bronchitis .The cigarette contains 4000 toxic chemicals with over 40 of them being known as carcinogens. After all of these diseases what does not make people quit? ~~The~~ addiction ~~is the thing~~. Actually addiction is very complicated ~~point of smoking especially between tobacco companies and society organizations~~. Addiction guarantees long term business for tobacco companies ~~and great deal of consumers~~. In fact, tobacco companies did not admit the smoking is addictive. However, is ~~the~~ smoking harm the smokers only?, Unfortunately, no. ~~Every day there is a new disadvantage of smoking.~~ Passive smoking is ~~breathing in of air that contains other people's smoke which~~ harms nonsmokers too. As a result of that many cities banned smoking in public places. ~~The most annoyed issue is recruit young people .it is very harmful for community and it should be banned.~~
In conclusion, smoking does not have advantage as much as disadvantages. Many countries have banned smoking in public places which is a good move. In anotherâs opinion, banning smoking in most places is the best way to reduce the number of smokers and that can be done by banning smoking in all closed places. Moreover prevent selling cigarettes to young people could reduce smokers number in the future. Bibliography:OâConnel (2006).focus on IELTS, Pearson Longman.

Tobacco

flash2008 — Thu, 05 Jun 2008 20:56:15 GMT

Is this life quite long, so there is a need to shrink it? Most people donât think so. However a great deal of people does bad habits harms their life and health. Nowadays many researches have confirmed the strong link between tobacco and cancers, but the number of smokers still very high. The proportion of the male adult global population smokers almost half OâConnel (2006, 105).Although, the link between cancer and smoking, many teens worldwide smoke, it is around one in five OâConnel (2006, 105).However, the cigarettes factories and tobacco companies have different opinion about smoking. They have large business and great deal of consumers. This essay will talk about advantages and disadvantages of smoking.

The first motivation of smoking is that smoking is a life style choice or in other words it is fashionable. So many people smoke in the first place to be stylish. The movies used to show actors smoke in many occasions, Moreover a number of popular people smoke in public. The pleasure could be seen as advantage of smoking. People some time smoke to feel happy. Feeling relax is another reason for smoking which is very popular advantage as the smokers says. Finally, the most important thing about smoking is making business. The smoking business is very huge and there are many tobacco factories. In result, many people work in that field .moreover, Tobacco is the main product of some countries and especially the poor countries. Also, tobacco trade gives a great deal of tax to governments which make it respectable business.

On the other hand, the tobacco has countless of disadvantages. Firstly, it causes diseases .The first time smoking was linked to cancer was in 1951 OâConnel (2006, 105).It cause several type of cancer such as lung cancer, oral cavity cancer and laryngeal cancer besides emphysema, chronic bronchitis .The cigarette contains 4000 toxic chemicals with over 40 of them being known carcinogens. After all of these diseases what does not make people quit? The addiction is that thing. Actually addiction is very complicated point of smoking especially between tobacco companies and society organizations. Addiction guarantees long term business for companies and great deal of consumers. In fact, tobacco companies did not admit the smoking is addictive. However, is the smoking harm the smokers only?, Unfortunately, no. Every day there is a new disadvantage of smoking. Passive smoking is breathing in of air that contains other people's smoke which harms nonsmokers too. As result of that many cities banned smoking in public places. The most annoyed issue is recruit young people .it is very harmful for community and it should be banned.

In conclusion, smoking does not have advantage as much as disadvantages. Many countries have banned smoking in public places which is a good move. In anotherâs opinion, banning smoking in most places is the best way to reduce number of smokers and that can be done by banning smoking in all closed places. Moreover prevent selling cigarettes to young people could reduce smokers number in the future. Bibliography:OâConnel (2006).focus on IELTS, Pearson Longman.