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Re: Please correct my mistakes

Anonymous — Thu, 12 Jun 2008 15:23:11 GMT

Thank you for correcting my writing. Now I think I get more understanding about grammar usage.

Re: Please correct my mistakes

Grammar Geek — Thu, 12 Jun 2008 02:09:54 GMT

Hi Frank,

Welcome to the forums. Your main problem seems to be tense.

Today my friends and I ~~have~~ visited Grouse Mountain, in Vancouver, Canada. Usually with a specific day, use simple past. Present perfect is possible, but I think simple past is better here.

We planned to visit it last week. Does this mean you meant to go last week, but something changed your plans? Or do you mean "Last week we planned our visit."?

In the morning, we made an appointment at New Westminster at 8.00 am. Okay, I think. I'm not sure if you made the appointment for a later time?

We took the skytrain to the Waterfront station, got on the seabus to another bank- wrong word here and took the number 236 bus to Grouse Mountain.

We arrived there at around 10.00 am. Almost okay. Either We arrived there at 10 or We arrived there around 10, but not both.

We were ~~almost~~ shocked that we had to pay $35 for a ticket, but after visiting, everybody was satisafied with the visit, because they had never seen ~~the~~ snow.

Please correct my mistakes

franklifetravel — Wed, 11 Jun 2008 22:51:45 GMT

Visiting Grouse Mountain

Today my friends and I have visited Grouse Mountain, Vancouver, Canada (see http://www.britishcolumbia.com/attractions/?id=27). We planned to visit it last week. In the morning, we made an appointment at New Westminster at 8.00 am. We took the skytrain to the Waterfront station, getting on the seabus to another bank and taking the bus no.236 to Grouse Mountain. We arrived there at around 10.00 am. We were almost chocked if we had to pay for the ticket $35, but after visiting, everybody was satisafied to visit it because they, except me, have never seen the snow.