I think there a lot of mistakes, but I don't know where.

franklifetravel — Thu, 12 Jun 2008 22:40:59 GMT

I don't know how much it is correct, but I do my best. If anybody sees mistakes, please kindly help me. Thank you.
On the second of May, 2008
At 12.30 pm, I left my mansion to Suwannabhumi Airport (Thailand's international airport) with Ajarn Phunet (the driver), Ajarn Saen, Taweesak , Ajarn Tip and her sister. After I arrived at the airport at around 1.30 pm, I checked in at Terminal R where EVAAIR is located and got two boarding Pass Cards ; one in Bangkok and another in Taipei. I got inside the lounge and waited for the flight at Gate E10. At 16.25, I got on the plane and the plane took off
at 17.00 pm, about 35 minutes delay.

I flew to Taipei at 21.30 (Taipei time). It took three hours and half there. The difference between Thailand and Taipei is one hour. I transfered to Vancouver there. I waited for the time to Vancouver for two hours and half.
Then I flew to Vancouver at 23.55 pm. While flying to Vancouver, I had a friend who is a Canadian and now he is an English teacher at Sasasas School in Bang Bua Thong, Nonthaburi.
His name is Joey. And his hometown is (I forgot the name). We talked a lot about Thailand and English teaching. I arrived in Vancouver at 20.13 (Canada's time), but it's still light not dark.While I was checking out, the official asked me a few questions such as 'What is your purpose to come to Canada?', 'Do you have letter from the college?', How much money do you bring to Canada?'. After checking out, I went outside the airport and saw Khun Melanie Yip waiting for my friends and me. She said 'Welcome to Vancouver!' and hired a car to take us and our luggages to New Westminster. While traveling the driver was very talkative. He talked a lot, non-stop talking until we reached the college. I saw Mrs. Cecilia there. She was contacting the home-stay hosts to pick us up. At that time Mrs. Melanie picked two Thai students up and said ' See you on Monday.' My home-stay hosts are Mr. Mitch & Mrs. Kim Gibson. After I came to the home-stay, greeted Mrs. Kim and went to bed immediately because I was very exhausted..

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I think there a lot of mistakes, but I don't know where.