http://www.englishforums.com/English/EslEssayWritingWorld/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment or just read for fun.enCSMOD (Build: 3260.39585)http://www.englishforums.com/English/HelloHelpIsNeeded/knbh/post.htmSun, 31 Oct 2004 09:17:34 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:52911Valantinoo0http://www.englishforums.com/English/HelloHelpIsNeeded/knbh/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-52911.xmlHi Everyone... How you are doing??? <br /> <br />Would anyone help me showing Ned as blood thirsty, murder, hooligan an so on... I also needs help on the structure grammer and ((showing rather than telling)) Please its urgent... Thanks alot... <br /> <br /> <br />The doors and the windows were closing and being locked carefully. Soon the town streets were left empty as they had been for a long time. “Thank goodness, no one seems to be here or they are going to face what others did...,” Dan exclaimed before being pushed sideways and silenced by Ned. “What’s wrong with you? Huh?” Dan continued furiously. <br /> <br />Ned flashed his bloodshot eyes at Dan and replied, “You are an imbecile Dan, are you blind? Couldn’t you see the officer Fitzpatrick and his men coming toward us? Huh? Listen to me. This is your last chance. So stop your irresponsible actions...” <br /> <br />Dan broke in with a laugh, “Are you trying to be funny?” <br /> <br />There were a few moments of silence after this conversation before Hart turned up and gave them a steady gaze. “We can move on now, we are safe, they are gone,” he whispered as though he doubted. <br /> <br />Before making any move, Ned called the gangs for a quick conversation. “We have been observing the bank staff and their routine over several weeks and it’s the right time for a robbery. So be careful of every single move you make, otherwise you are going to lose your heads or be arrested by the police.” Having laid out their plan, the four fugitives, mounted marvellous horses, which had been stolen from a nearby paddock, they rode towards the Euroa Bank with all the aspects of the robbery worked out in advance. <br /> <br />It was four o’clock. With nothing to stop them from robbing the bank, Ned burst through the bank doors first according to plan, “I’m Ned Kelly!” Ned shouted. “I am an outlaw, and my orders must be obeyed. Make no noise. Raise no alarm. Keep your hands up and stand against the wall.” As soon as Ned finished his talking, two men attempted to shoot him after getting their revolvers from their suits, but regrettably they failed to strike him and he was quick indeed and unfortunately he shot both of them senselessly and seconds later they were dead. <br /> <br />After this aspect people started screaming and crying. Ned was afraid that he would be scandalled, so he started shooting anyone in his way, including innocent people, women, and even children. The sound of gunshots and the people crying and screaming was the only thing that anyone would hear at that time. Soon the bank was silent and still. Everybody was killed now. <br /> <br />Ned shouted to the others, who were observing the bank doors from the outside, in a rush, “You two (pointing at Dan and Hart) collect whatever you find in these people’s pockets. Joe and I will go looking for the bank coffers.” <br /> <br />“Ned, what the hell have you done? You’ve killed everyone in the bank… that’s not what we had planned for.” Joe shouted. <br /> <br />“They forced me to do that, so shut the hell up and do what I told you to do.” Ned asserted. <br /> <br />“But Why? You were better leave the bank than killing these innocent people!!” Hart raged. <br /> <br />Ned thundered “We have been planning for this over the several weeks; I wouldn’t like to ruin everything for not killing these animals. Move it now, collect any valuable things you find, the police will be here soon.” <br /> <br />Ned found the bank coffers and filled a big sugar bag with silver and gold coins, bank notes and nearly 31 ounces of unminted gold. The incursion had barely taken half an hour with a total haul of £2000, and soon they were out of the town. <br /> <br /> <br />PLEASE HELP ME AS SOON AS POSSIBLE!!!! <br />