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Re: crimes committed by young poeple - please specify mistales!

Anonymous — Thu, 10 Jul 2008 05:24:52 GMT

Hi, Julielai,

I appreciate your attention!

When I write an essay, I tried to write what I thought/experienced because I thought it would make the essay more vivid and basically fun to write that way.

Write an essay based on experience would able lead the theory more realistic, though, I might really bad at doing it.

I think I put too much of my feeling, not my opinion.

I just write what I thought, which is not an essay.

I noticed that because of you, so thank you very much!

Re: crimes committed by young poeple - please specify mistales!

julielai — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 18:28:26 GMT

You need to work on your arguments for your point of view. See the bolded parts.

Anonymous

I totally agree with the opinion that severe punishment should be applied for young to protect from the heavy crime by themselves.

With becoming the society becoming more complex, adults does not know how to survive in changing society, which makes young generation more unsecure and confused what to do to prepare for the future. In my opinion, this is the one of the causes of the recent crime increase of young generation.

A series of random killer crimes conducted by young generation are badly cruel, cold blooded and so-selfish. Some criminal mentioned he knows he will not be received death penalty because of his age that is why he committed to kill the neighbor because he just wanted to have âexperience of human killingâ. This makes me feel chilled in my spine. I recall he was 17 years old, the age I think should take his responsibility for what they have done. I even think the crime picture showing his face should be placed on news paper and he deserved to receive severe punishment even if he was seven years old who killed someone, which has done in America. (why?)

Some criminal says he committed murder because he did not like everything, the society, company he worked for, no friend, no girl friend, even the way his parents educated him, all of which are definitely, can not be any reason to kill anyone. In this era, young generation has difficulty to expect bright future any worry to become âlooserâ of the society, tend to be desperate and effected easily. To prevent any more crime, tough measures and strict punishments are necessary. I personally think death penalty should be applied even for young generation. Important to let them know you will be killed by law if you kill someone to prevent any severe crime.

Some of lawyer has different opinion saying no one able to sentence fatal penalty. ~~I was wondering if their family has killed by street killer, they can still keep their logic?~~ I definitely believe fatal penalty and discloser of the criminal face even young generation are necessary.

crimes committed by young poeple - please specify mistales!

Anonymous — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 05:41:25 GMT

In recent years, many countries have become extremely concerned about the increase in crimes committed by young poeple.
Tough measures and strict punishments are necessary to stop youths
from re-offending.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

I totally agree with the opinion that severe punishment should be applied for young to protect from the heavy crime by themselves.

With becoming the society more complex, adults does not know how to survive in changing society, which makes young generation more unsecure and confused what to do to prepare for the future. In my opinion, this is the one of the causes of the recent crime increase of young generation.

A series of random killer crimes conducted by young generation are badly cruel, cold blooded and so-selfish. Some criminal mentioned he knows he will not be received death penalty because of his age that is why he committed to kill the neighbor because he just wanted to have âexperience of human killingâ. This makes me feel chilled in my spine. I recall he was 17 years old, the age I think should take his responsibility for what they have done. I even think the crime picture showing his face should be placed on news paper and he deserved to receive severe punishment even if he was seven years old who killed someone, which has done in America.

Some criminal says he committed murder because he did not like everything, the society, company he worked for, no friend, no girl friend, even the way his parents educated him, all of which are definitely, can not be any reason to kill anyone. In this era, young generation has difficulty to expect bright future any worry to become âlooserâ of the society, tend to be desperate and effected easily. To prevent any more crime, tough measures and strict punishments are necessary. I personally think death penalty should be applied even for young generation. Important to let them know you will be killed by law if you kill someone to prevent any severe crime.

Some of lawyer has different opinion saying no one able to sentence fatal penalty. I was wondering if their family has killed by street killer, they can still keep their logic? I definitely believe fatal penalty and discloser of the criminal face even young generation are necessary.