http://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayReportCompositionWriting/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment, or just read for fun.enXMOD (Build: 3598.39794)http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseWouldProofreadTextPart-One/hbbmn/post.htm#590663Wed, 08 Apr 2009 13:56:17 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:590663Bassim0http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseWouldProofreadTextPart-One/hbbmn/post.htm#590663http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-590663.xmlHello Nona, Thank you very much for helping me with my text. I only have a few questions. Instead of saying, "True, it will give it a few days of respite could I say , "it will give nature a few days of respite?" Maybe I should write, "Instead of gazing yearningly at women men are careful about where they put their own shoes and boots. Nobody wants to slip over on the ice and brake his leg." Also I do not understand what was wrong with the sentence, "There is a little river and a path which goes all the way close to it which I have slowly paced.." Best wishes.http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseWouldProofreadTextPart-One/hbbmn/post.htm#590622Sun, 08 Feb 2009 14:56:17 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:590622nona the brit1http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseWouldProofreadTextPart-One/hbbmn/post.htm#590622http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-590622.xmlHi Bassim - this is a really evocative piece of writing, well done. I've underlined the parts you need to take another look at. One thing that makes your writing a little unclear in parts is where you are using pronouns and it isn't obvious who/what it refers to. In the sentence about 'instead of gazing yearingly at them (women) I'm not sure whether the men watch women to see where women put their shoes, or if the men are careful about where they put their own shoes, and whether the 'his' is correct (if it is the men being careful) or incorrect (if it is the women who should be careful). Again there is a bit of confusion caused initially by using 'it' for both winter and nature in the same sentence. You...http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseWouldProofreadTextPart-One/hbbmn/post.htmThu, 08 Jan 2009 14:56:17 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:590066Bassim2http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseWouldProofreadTextPart-One/hbbmn/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-590066.xmlDear people Is there anyone around who could proofread my text? WINTER Winter is here again. Like a powerful predator it has dug its claws in nature and it will not let it loose until the end of March and the first sunny days. True, it will give it a few days of brief respite when sun appears on a horizon for some minutes, but winter is merciless in this part of the world. In the summer women walk in short skirts and tight dresses leaving men drooling over their bodies, but now they are wrapped up warmly in thick jackets and long shawls. Instead of gazing yearningly at them, men usually watch over where they put their shoes and boots; nobody wants to slip over on the ice and break his leg. When I was younger...