http://www.englishforums.com/English/EslEssayWritingWorld/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment or just read for fun.enCSMOD (Build: 3260.39585)http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/gnngv/Post.htm#568858Sun, 21 Sep 2008 21:23:39 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:568858Anonymous18http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/gnngv/Post.htm#568858http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-568858.xmlDoodle is not murdered, or struck by lightning. He doesn&#39;t even trip and fall to his death. First off, the point is now how he dies, but the fact that he does. His brother pushed him too hard, and while Doodle had overcome many of his previous physical disabilities, his heart problems remained dormant and came out when he tried to sprint through the rain to his brother. This overexertion is what defeats him in the end.<div style="clear:both;"></div>http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/dkjzv/Post.htm#302383Sun, 10 Dec 2006 05:48:43 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:302383Anonymous21http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/dkjzv/Post.htm#302383http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-302383.xml<P>So, in the story, It doesn't explain how Doodle dies. Was he murdered, struck by lightening, what?</P> <P>Help!</P><div style="clear:both;"></div>http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/dzvnx/Post.htm#276519Thu, 05 Oct 2006 15:30:42 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:276519Anonymous22http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/dzvnx/Post.htm#276519http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-276519.xmlhi,I need your help too,ı have a presentation about the scarler ıbis,ıt should be something really creative,ıt will include summary and dicsussion questions but they all have to be creative,ı mean the teacher does not want us to summary the story ın a classical way,so could please show me the way how can ı make it more interesting and creative<div style="clear:both;"></div>http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/bnrxj/Post.htm#147637Fri, 14 Oct 2005 00:08:47 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:147637Anonymous23http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/bnrxj/Post.htm#147637http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-147637.xml<FONT size=6>i need help restating my thesis statement</FONT><div style="clear:both;"></div>http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/nqrl/Post.htm#68504Wed, 19 Jan 2005 02:37:26 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:68504phu534http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/nqrl/Post.htm#68504http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-68504.xmlWOOOHOOO, i got a 2 out of 3...my teacher said i did good out of my previous essay ! <br />Yay! now to do one more essay! Thanks guys!http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/ndwd/Post.htm#64875Mon, 03 Jan 2005 02:18:33 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64875Mister Micawber5http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/ndwd/Post.htm#64875http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64875.xml<br />Me too! Good luck, Phu. <br /> <br />http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/ndwb/Post.htm#64873Mon, 03 Jan 2005 01:45:36 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64873phu536http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/ndwb/Post.htm#64873http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64873.xmlok, my essay is gonna be do on january 3rd. I hope to get a good grade! =)http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/nbnc/Post.htm#64381Fri, 31 Dec 2004 00:54:59 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64381phu537http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/3/nbnc/Post.htm#64381http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64381.xmlOh, ok!http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nblg/Post.htm#64351Thu, 30 Dec 2004 20:46:47 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64351anon18http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nblg/Post.htm#64351http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64351.xmlI have business stuff to read--magazines, newspapers, and books. I am swamped. <br /> <br />MountainHikerhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nblc/Post.htm#64347Thu, 30 Dec 2004 20:18:41 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64347phu539http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nblc/Post.htm#64347http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64347.xmlI have too much of my own reading to do.....I thought that means you are like a teacher or something. <img src="/emoticons/emotion-3.gif" alt="Surprise [:O]" />http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nblr/Post.htm#64345Thu, 30 Dec 2004 20:15:26 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64345anon110http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nblr/Post.htm#64345http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64345.xmlNope, neither one. <img src="/emoticons/emotion-1.gif" alt="Smile [:)]" />http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nbkp/Post.htm#64343Thu, 30 Dec 2004 20:11:58 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64343phu5311http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nbkp/Post.htm#64343http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64343.xmlHey MountainHiker are you a teacher or something?http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nbdn/Post.htm#64222Thu, 30 Dec 2004 06:49:49 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64222anon112http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nbdn/Post.htm#64222http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64222.xmlphu53, <br /> <br />Sorry, you got to read the story yourself. In all honesty, I have too much of my own reading to do. I am sure if you read it slowly, the answers will be there. <br /> <br />MountainHikerhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nbdk/Post.htm#64219Thu, 30 Dec 2004 06:45:43 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:64219phu5313http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nbdk/Post.htm#64219http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-64219.xmlCan u help me find another reason why it is the narrator's fault for the outcome of the story? <br /> <br /> <br />I need 3 reason to do this essay correctly. My second paragraph is incorrect for reason. The others are correct. I just need one more good reason why it is the narrator's fault. But first, is there anyone with the time to read the whole story?http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nrbq/Post.htm#63902Tue, 28 Dec 2004 23:07:23 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:63902anon114http://www.englishforums.com/English/ReallyEditingEssayStructurally-Grammatically/2/nrbq/Post.htm#63902http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-63902.xml<BLOCKQUOTE><table width="85%"><tr><td class="quoteTable"><table width="100%"><tr><td width="100%" valign="top" class="txt4">The 2) I was embarrassed at having a brother : is part of my quote so even though it shows repition of embarrarssment it is suppose to relate to my reason. My reason was about 1) The narrator’s embarrassment of having an invalid brother. So then shouldn't it relate to embarrassment. I'm thinking if I have to put a topic about embarrassment then I should have examples about embarrassment.</td></tr></table></td></tr></table></BLOCKQUOTE> <br /> <br />I am not sure I followed what you are trying to say. <br /> <br />I don't have the time nor the interest to read that long story. You need to cut down the repetition. If that means you don't provide a direct quote, then you don't provide a direct quote. You need to be direct. If that means a very short paragraph, then you have a very short paragraph. Your original essay is overly repetitious and overly wordy. <br /> <br />Good luck. <br /> <br />MountainHiker