http://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayReportCompositionWriting/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment, or just read for fun.enXMOD (Build: 3607.32596)http://www.englishforums.com/English/CallingFriendsReviewEssayFranklin-MarshallCollege/hlxpp/post.htm#648818Sun, 22 Feb 2009 13:23:52 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:648818ferpectedit0http://www.englishforums.com/English/CallingFriendsReviewEssayFranklin-MarshallCollege/hlxpp/post.htm#648818http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-648818.xmlHello: I work for an online editing and proofreading service. Please see my profile for more info. I won't revise your whole essay here, but I will show you the changes I would make in the first paragraph. I am choosing Franklin & Marshall because I value close relationships with my professors. I am the type of student who wants to fully understand her teacher’s message, who visits teachers’ offices and who can attribute much of her achievement in school to the relationships she has cultivated with teachers. I want to sit with Professor Nicholas Montemarano in the Philadelphia Alumni Writers' House discussing some of his newly published short stories and getting his advice on my essay. Among the top 40 colleges in America,...http://www.englishforums.com/English/CallingFriendsReviewEssayFranklin-MarshallCollege/hlxpp/post.htmFri, 22 May 2009 12:23:52 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:643006Wanning1http://www.englishforums.com/English/CallingFriendsReviewEssayFranklin-MarshallCollege/hlxpp/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-643006.xmlHi, dear friends, Below is my essay to Franklin&Marshall College, with the topic" what lead you to apply Franklin&Marshall College?" Please help me to point out the unclear points or any other problems. I'll appreciate your help and value your suggestions. __ I choose F&M for I value the close relationships with my professors. I am the very student who manages to grasp teacher’s message through tacit eye-contacts, who visits teachers’ offices most frequently, and who always attributes much of the excellence in school to close relationships with teachers. Now I can even imagine the sunny afternoon, when I sit with Professor. Nicholas Montemarano in the exquisite Philadelphia Alumni Writers House interestedly...