http://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayReportCompositionWriting/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment, or just read for fun.enXMOD (Build: 3614.32638)http://www.englishforums.com/English/CanReviseReportIeltsEssay/jkwxl/post.htm#807461Sun, 05 Jul 2009 14:32:57 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:807461cherry88cn0http://www.englishforums.com/English/CanReviseReportIeltsEssay/jkwxl/post.htm#807461http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-807461.xmlThank you so much for your help... It is very useful!!! I can feel your English is advanced!!http://www.englishforums.com/English/CanReviseReportIeltsEssay/jkwxl/post.htm#803469Thu, 02 Jul 2009 20:58:57 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:803469victor_amelkin1http://www.englishforums.com/English/CanReviseReportIeltsEssay/jkwxl/post.htm#803469http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-803469.xmlHi, Here are my thoughts. I'm neither an English teacher nor a native English speaker, but an English learner as you are, so think twice before following any of my suggestions. I hope, native speakers will provide their opinion on your essay (and perhaps my comments) too. * I didn't understand why the expression "believe it or not" is used here. It usually precedes a statement that many people will find arguable, but I believe that most people will agree that the happiness is one of the central concerns in the life. * "concerns of lives" - why the noun "life" is plural here? * "which nationality you belong" - I'd add "to" to the end of this expression. * "it is happiness...http://www.englishforums.com/English/CanReviseReportIeltsEssay/jkwxl/post.htmThu, 02 Jul 2009 17:58:18 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:803380cherry88cn2http://www.englishforums.com/English/CanReviseReportIeltsEssay/jkwxl/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-803380.xmlHappiness is considered very important in our life. Why it is difficult to define? What factors are in achieving happiness? Believe it or not, the majority of people agree that happiness is one of the major concerns of lives. No matter what kind of job you are occupying, how old you are, which nationality you belong, it is happiness you really care about. But why is that? It may be hard to answer while most human beings hold the opinion that everyone want to live happily in the society. Then what is the definition of happiness? Happiness is probably easy to describe yet extremely difficult to define. It may due to the fact that happiness is a magic concept various from person to person. Everyone is...