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Hello, I have to send a motivation letter as a part of the application for a Master´s program. I am not too sure about the letter, which cvan be found below. This application is really really important to me and I was wondering if someone could please take some spare time and review the...

Hello, i want to apply to university and have to hand in a letter of motivation. I have been working on this first version for a while. I started with some brainstorming and wrote down all the things that interested me, what i have done before, what i want to achieve and also asked my friends to...