By Paragraphs, Translation

Dear MountainHiker: hope to be safe and sound. I tried to make it better. Please review it one more time and tell me what is your idea specially about the last paragraph: I have a strong...does it cover what the university asked to:what you expect from your studies at XXX? Thank you so very much...

Dear MountainHiker: I made a few changes wherever I thought might be confusing...Could you please review it one more time especially the Eighth paragraph with more careful consideration... This time I am afraid of posing lots of questions;) Best regards, Jay...

Dear MountainHiker: Without any exaggeration, I love your artistic writing. Thank you 1)In the fourth paragraph, so you think whatever I mentioned in the lat version(Posted: 01-07-2005 01:01 PM) was not neccessary? Got no idea. I am just going to work with what is below. 3)Sixth...

Dear MountainHiker: Without any exaggeration, I love your artistic writing. 1)In the fourth paragraph, so you think whatever I mentioned in the lat version(Posted: 01-07-2005 01:01 PM) was not neccessary? 3)Sixth paragraph:refers to my computer abilites and skills...It's better to keep it,...

I’ve made subtle changes here and there. Look it over and see what you think. I think your overall essay is coming along very nicely. It is looking structured and focused. I think you’re hihglighting your skills, experience and dedication much better. Let me know what you...

Dear MountainHiker: Hope to be safe and sound. 1)I corrected the capitalization. 2)In the third paragraph, Although made it very long paragraph, I tried to expalin enough. 3)you asked me to add the information in the Sixth paragraph to the fifth one...don't you think it would make the fifth...

By just briefly looking over it and not being much of an editor I found these: 1. "The TOEFL test is a test that measures the ability in English for both nonnative and native speakers who attend the university." -- You don't need "is a test that" because we know it's a test because you just...

JayT, More work is required. But it is definitely taking shape. MountainHiker Dear Sir or Madam: I am writing to apply for the Master’s programme in e-Commerce. After completing the master's programme, I plan to continue my education and obtain a Ph.D. in Information Technology. My...

Dear MountainHiker: I think I did better. 1)I know the Third Paragraph is too wordy 2) I tried to use less the mumbo-jumbo words..but I left the rest because I thought it was necessary. If you think it's better to reduce more, I would do it. 3)The Aim: in the first paragraph: did I put it in...

Hi, I quickly scanned your letter. You didn't follow the instructions. In the 4th paragraph, I FINALLY learn that you have a degree in English translation. Get all your stuff at the front. And you are still overloading me with a bunch of technical mumbo jumbo (e-crm, e-strategies, html,...