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.I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics. I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words:My computer, the caretaker of my studies, lies over the...

Hello Guys! Please check my paragraph for mistakes and wrong wordings.And tell me, metaphor i used in opening line, can we use like this in topic sentences?Thanks! The computer, the caretaker of my studies, lies over the flat table at the other side of my desk. Although it serves as a machine...

Thanks GG!Well yes I used so many metaphors to discover new ones. Can you point out beside of "A two audio speakers", where i use wrong articles? The word apprently i use to say that people see computer as machine but infact its like a home teacher or supporter. In this sense i use...

Cute, I don't want to be discouraging, but you have WAY too many metaphors in here, and some things that are just incomprehensivel. A rolling hang, balmy trees, a lake side, central nerve center, and a ship captain -- too many! Here are some problem phrases, and you need to find new ways to...

Hey guys now please check my paragraph again for mistakes and some suggestions to add good metaphors or improvements. Thanks ! The computer lies over the wooden table against the mid-wall of my room. Its gradual help in my studies supported me like caretaker. Usually my spelling and grammar...

Ecstasy you can't escape This doesn't sound like something I'd want. "You can't escape" is usually used for things you do want to escape from. A lifetime of moments where even the wind and the sun, the stars and the sky, are humbly awaiting your command. This...

First of all I am very thankful to you because I need these opinions, believe me this is my first try in descriptive writing. And I am so confuse. The biggest problem i am facing at this moment is Lacking Words.I am ok in speaking but writing is far from speaking. My mind think feel but i...

Ignore my comment about the giant. I was just trying to think of a metaphor for you. I didn't mean giant, the adjective, but giant, the noun. Your computer is a giant in its power - it's just a small size. My light brown table supports the intelligent computer system at the opposite side...

You meant like this: Is this ok ?My tall Off-white in color, right wall gracefully hold the blue , wide window . Today, In these pleasent evening colors streaming in through this open window, I feel much relaxed --light as fur, the dark clouds of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.Or i...