By Adverbs, Essays

Well, my main comment is that the author is far too verbose. To make it into an acceptable English essay, it needs to be hacked down by about 50%, eliminating most of the adjectives and adverbs. Otherwise, the reader will not have the patience to finish reading it unless s/he is starving to death.

My take.....It was a "poorly- written" eassy. - past participle used with an adverb to form a coompound adjective. The essay was poorly written. -simple passive voice When a past participle used in conjuction with an adverb in front of a noun, then it becomes a COMPOUND...

In these different constructions, different types of things are ellipted.1) My father bought me a cell phone which is as small as a mouse. . Fish is the direct object of caught. Many is an adjective modifying fish, and the first as is an adverb modifying many. Again, the second as is a...

Hi Nick, thank very much for your revision. There are many things to comment on. Could you explain some points? - 'This is not to mention the price of parking and fuel....' Is it possible to write down just 'Not to mention...'? I saw it written in an article some days ago. Maybe 'This is' is...

Hello Anon (MN?) and YoHF, YoHF’s re-draft is excellent, with a very good style. You should try and follow the style and rhythm of the English. In case you look at it too closely, there are a couple of minor errors in it which I show below. As no-one else has replied to you regarding your...

Hello! I hope this is helpful! When saying, "a lot of reasons that leads women" change the leads to lead. "lake of professional training" change to lack.. lake is a body of water. "there pimps" change to their. There is referring to a place. Their is a possessive. their pimps. when writing...

I would not go as far as to give you three out of twenty. You may need to give details about the required length of this essay, what course it is writtten for, the general attitude of the person who marked it, etc. For me, this piece of writing is very good but a bit too short to be called a...

Hello s/h Having read a number of books in my time. ] This clause doesn't make a sentence on its own. none have accomplished ] Some examiners would expect 'none has' here. The tale is written in the first-person narrative] 'narrative' is unnecessary. an ordinary girl placed under...

bright, For a non-native English speaker, you write well. That said, there are several areas you need to strengthen. Your opening sentence needs to be strengthened. I am an undergraduate from Beijing Jiaotong University in Mainland of China writing in response to the position you posted...