By Application letters, Nouns

First, capitalize the word I and other proper nouns, and then rewrite this without using abbreviations, and spell August correctly - then we can worry about grammar and syntax.

Jessmac, Be sure to thank Howard Cheung for providing some initial thoughts. The one paragraph that concerns me slightly is the following: In addition to academic achievement, we have provided opportunities for XX to better develop her other abilities and talents. She has participated in...