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Re: Can someone check the gammar, please?

Pjlusk83 — Wed, 24 Sep 2008 23:57:43 GMT

Hello,
I am going to put my suggestions and corrections next to your words, but they will be in bold, in paraenthese, and on the right side of the word(s) so you know which word and what my suggestion is. Is that ok with you? Tell me what you think. Also, in case you did not notice, you seem to writing an article, so this needs to be kept in second or third person. I will not correct but a few tenses of first to second or third because I feel you would understand better if you studied that better yourself, and I am not an English major and am afraid of leading the wrong path, but I will do what I know without hesitation. I hope this helps you out with whatever you are doing.
Penny

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Health is indisputably(eminently) important to all of us (most individual instead of "all of us" using "all of us" is considered wordy). Good health enables us(people) to carry out our(their) daily routine with a positive view of life. There are many ways we can do to keep good health(a number of ways to keep in good health).

First, we should practise(practice) good eating habits and do not overeat.(take out and do not over eat, instead write something like: First, we should practice good eating habits, such as eating in moderation/ or watching our food intake) We must drink lots of water so that we will not get exhaustion easily(here is an idea:Second, drink plenty of water to prevent dehydration and early exhaustion) Drinking water does not mean we need to drink eight glasses a day.(remove the period, add a semicolon ;) It depends on how much we need to spend our energy on things that we do. Besides, it is advisable to drink fruit and vegetable juices.(remove the period, add a semicolon ;) These juices provide essential nutrients such as vitamins and minerals. As a result, our immune systems will strengthen too(remove too) and our bodies can resist many diseases.

Another way to (suggestion: remove "Another way to" and replace with: Third,)maintain our healthy bodies is exercise regularly. Exercise is very important to keep us fit. Aside from burning off fat, exercise helps make(remove make) our blood circulation (circulate)better. (This small paragraph is completely out of place, you are jumping from eating and drinking, to exercise then back to eating and drinking. Move this paragraph under your paragraph about smoking because it fits nicely with your last sentences.)

There are things that we must avoid when it comes to food. Do not take food that have(suggestion: ...when it comes to food. Try not to ingest a lot of food that is high in...) high fat, sugar and salt content such as fried chicken, junk food, carbonated (adding the word beverages will make more sense here). Taking too (Ingesting too)much of unhealthy food can lead to diseases like(such as) heart disease and diabetes. (add this paragraph just after the final sentence of your second paragraph: As a result, our immune systems will become stronger and our bodies can resist many diseases)

(suggestion: Finally, avoid...)Avoid smoking because it contains nothing but harmful nicotine.(remove nothing but harmul nicotine, in this place put something like: because it contains over a hundred harmful chemicals) This property(habit) can destroy our lungs and even worse causes(remove the 's') cancer. Not only, smoking produces bad effects to smokers, but also harms non-smokers who are near them. (suggestion: ...cancer; smoking is also nearly as harmful to non-smokers through second hand smoke because the non-smokers catch half of the chemicals and also produce negative results to the non-smoker's body)

Healthy people can have longer lives and are more energetic (suggestion: Healthy people can live longer, more energetic lives). If we(you) really love ourselves(yourself), we should start change our eating habits and take exercise right now before it is too late. (then watch your habits for any need of change and begin living health today!) (suggestion, a quote about living healthy by anyone famous, try this google search http://www.google.com/search?source=ig&hl=en&rlz=1G1GGLQ_ENUS288&q=famous+health+quotes

Thanks

Memos show Clinton turmoil

Jackson6612 — Wed, 13 Aug 2008 15:05:10 GMT

Memos show Clinton turmoil

Question: I would have written ''Clinton's turmoil''. Why didn't the author use apostrophe?

BY CRAIG GORDON AND TOM BRUNE | <email addresses removed by mod.>
August 13, 2008

Question: Why is semicolon used instead of comma to separate the email addresses above?

WASHINGTON - In a fresh postmortem (=an examination of a plan or event that failed, done to discover why it failed, =autopsy) on Hillary Rodham Clinton's presidential bid (=attempt to obtain or do something), newly published staff memos (=a short official note to another person in the same company or organization) and e-mails reveal a campaign hobbled (=to hobble something or someone means to make it more difficult for them to be successful or to achieve what they want) by internal rivalries (=a situation in which two or more people, teams, or companies are competing for something), faulty planning, bloated (=more than needed, =excessive) spending - and perhaps most important, Clinton's own failure to make the hard decisions.

Clinton offered herself to voters as a hyper-competent (=extra competent) executive ready to be president from day one. But atop (=on top of something) her own campaign, she was a hesitant leader, who allowed bitter infighting (=when members of the same group or organization argue, or compete with each other in an unfriendly way) to fester (=If an argument or bad feeling festers, it continues so that feelings of hate or dissatisfaction increase) among staffers over whether to go negative against Barack Obama, according to the Atlantic magazine.

The most bare-knuckled (=characterized by disorderly action and disregard for rules) lines of attack came from Clinton's chief strategist, Mark Penn, who urged Clinton to highlight Obama's "lack of American roots" due to his upbringing in Indonesia and Hawaii - saying he could only win if he faced Attila the Hun ((?406-453 AD) a king of the Huns (=an ancient people from Asia) who attacked and took control of large parts of the Roman Empire. He is famous for being violent and cruel).

But Clinton didn't embrace Penn's flag-waving (=the expression of strong national feelings, especially when these feelings seem too extreme) approach (=way of doing something), which campaign aides (=someone whose job is to help someone who has an important job, especially a politician) insist was never seriously considered.

Question: Clinton didn't embrace Penn's approach because she did not consider it seriously. Therefore, what campaign aides were saying is redundant.

The article also says that Clinton at times grew frustrated and short-tempered - including on the morning after her stunning third-place finish in Iowa in January, when aides on a call were silent. Clinton's camp dismissed the story as "inside-the-Beltway gossip" and "old news." And former campaign aides sharply disputed the notion of Clinton as an indecisive leader, with one campaign veteran saying, "Nobody seems to want to remember the fact that we had so many successes and come-from-behind victories in this campaign ... and they are due in large part to Senator Clinton's leadership."

Question: What does the line including on the morning...when aides on a call were silent mean? If she finished third place, then why would the author describe it as stunning? What does call mean in when aides on a call were silent?

Question: What does the phrase inside-the-Beltway gossip mean?

Question: What does the line Nobody seems to want to remember...to Senator Clinton's leadership'' mean?

But the e-mails and memos offer vivid (=very clear and detailed) new details about what had long been reported - that Clinton's headquarters was beset (=to make someone experience serious problems or dangers) by caustic (=bitter) internal battles involving Penn and former President Bill Clinton, who wanted to forcefully attack Obama, and others who wanted the New York senator to take a more positive tack (=method, =way of doing something). At one point, it was Bill Clinton - and not Hillary - who approved the famed 3 a.m. phone call ad.

Question: what had long been reported is passive past perfect tense. Am I right?

Question: I think headquarters should take plural verb. What do you say?

Question: Why are the hyphens used in -and not Hillary-? I believe commas would do instead?

Adding to the turmoil was the fact that the campaign had little strategy and no money left to seriously compete in the post-Super Tuesday contests - having (=the form having with a past participle can be used to introduce a clause in which you mention an action which had already happened before another action began) burned through $106 million before Iowa. That allowed Obama to win 12 straight contests and effectively wrap up (=to finish a job, meeting etc) the nomination.

Question: What does burned through mean?

In the end, the campaign's strategy came to reflect some of the internal turmoil, as Clinton veered (=changed course) from attacking Obama to emphasizing her personal side.

Question: What does her personal side mean?

Penn did offer some advice in March 2007 that proved on the mark - Clinton's path to victory lay with women and lower- and working-class voters.

Question: What does proved on the mark mean? I couldn't find it in the dictionary.

But by the time Clinton finally settled on that strategy to win the later primaries, it was too late.

Excerpts from the memos

"All of these articles about his boyhood in Indonesia and his life in Hawaii are geared towards showing his background is diverse, multicultural and putting that in a new light ... It also exposes a very strong weakness for him - his roots to basic American values and culture are at best (=even when considered in the most positive way) limited. I cannot imagine America electing a president during a time of war who is not at his center fundamentally American in his thinking and in his values." Strategist Mark Penn, from a March 19, 2007, memo to Hillary Rodham Clinton advising her to attack Barack Obama for his "lack of American roots."

Question: What does centre mean in the above context?

"The right knows Obama is unelectable except perhaps against Attila the Hun, and a third party would come in then anyway." Penn, from the same memo.

Question: Does right refer to right wing in the above context?

"This has been a very instructive call, talking to myself." Clinton, before angrily hanging up on a staff conference call the day after coming in third in Iowa in January. "She complained of being outmaneuvered (=to gain an advantage over someone by using cleverer or more skilful plans or methods) in Iowa and being painted as the establishment candidate," according to the Atlantic - but was met with near-silence.

Question: I would have written This has been..., talking to me. Why did she use myself?

Question: What is a conference call? Is it some kind of telephone call which address many poeple?

Question: Why is in used in coming in third?

"STOP IT!! I have help my tongue for weeks. After this morning's WP story, no longer. This makes me sick. This circular firing squad that is occurring is unattractive, unprofessional, unconscionable, and unacceptable ... It must stop." Robert Barnett, a Clinton lawyer and Washington insider, from a March 6, 2008, e-mail to campaign staff after a Washington Post story detailed the infighting.

Question: What does I have help my tongue for weeks mean?

Question: What does This circular firing squad mean?

Question: Were the comments in the last paragraph made by Robert Barnett?

vet

T509 — Wed, 27 Feb 2008 01:53:32 GMT

Hi, everyone.

I found the title of an article on newspaper.

War exacts top toll on bottom echelons: vet

What does it mean, "vet" in this case?

And how does the colon function?

Thanks in advance.

Writing title to a seminar/article

Believer — Sat, 02 Feb 2008 03:59:51 GMT

Hi,

How do we write the title to an article, seminar or conference? I think the colon mark is used to separate two portions of a title if that is the form a person chooses to use. Then, how do we go about writing the former portion versus the later portion? Are we going from a general statement part to one that shows the detail (or expand from the general part)?

eg,

Keeping abreast of the progress: Students learning the latest technology

Re: I need to know if I am using my commas semi-colons, and colons right.

Clive — Mon, 01 Oct 2007 05:31:47 GMT

Hi,

Don't use '&' in an essay. Instead, write 'and'.

Generally speaking, my advice to you is to avoid using colons and semi-colons. Most learners who start to use them tend to over-use them as well as to use them when they are not necessary. I've revised some of your sentences to show how you can make them better without semi-colons and colons. Your commas are fine.

To illustrate, two fictional characters will be used. Meet Jack and Mary, who are in their twenties and have been dating since high school. Jack works in a factory, and is a tall, slim, and humble man. Mary is a part-time massage therapist, who loves shopping and partying. She enjoys arguing and being right. Jack and Mary agree itâs time to move out of their parentsâ homes and share a New York City apartment. Mary suggests splitting rent, utilities, and all other expenses in half.

It has a window, with a great view, which happens to be about as wide as Jackâs room. In addition to paying for rent and utilities, costs of food and household articles can be difficult to distribute as well.

He isnât thrilled with the contents of the cart but, nevertheless, he still pays his half.

Best wishes, Clive

I need to know if I am using my commas semi-colons, and colons right.

Anonymous — Mon, 01 Oct 2007 02:46:19 GMT

I need to know if I am using my commas semi-colons, and colons right. Additionally, it would be greatly appreciated if anyone would like to comment on the essay!

When two friends or a couple decide to become roommates they may think that the transition will be smooth because they have always gotten along. What they might not realize is that money can easily ruin a good relationship. Money is a universal cause of friction between two roommates. The following paper will discuss splitting the costs of bills and food & home articles.

To illustrate, two fictional characters will be used: Meet Jack and Mary; they are in their twenties and have been dating since high school. Jack works in a factory, and is a tall, slim, and humble man. Mary is a part-time massage therapist; she loves shopping and partying. She enjoys arguing and being right. Jack and Mary agree itâs time to move out of their parentsâ homes and share a New York City apartment. Mary suggests splitting rent, utilities, and all other expenses in half.

While splitting the price of rent and utility bills in half may seem like a simple solution, 50/50 isnât always even, as different people have different lifestyles. Bedrooms arenât always the same size, and each of the two parties doesnât necessarily use the same amount of electricity, either. Dividing the costs of rent and utilities plays a big role in the friction of two roommates.

Jack and Mary move into their apartment. Mary makes sure she gets the room with the closet, which happens to be the master bedroom. It has a window with a great view; her window happens to be about as wide as Jackâs room. Being a humble man, Jack wonât make a big deal of it and unpack in the smaller room. This obviously isnât fair. Mary should have to pay more for she has the better room.
Later on that week, as he arrives home from his 9-5 work shift, Jack opens the door to a screaming stereo system and two televisions without an audience. He looks for Mary and finds her taking her second shower of the day. Jack doesnât like the idea that Maryâs selfishness is going to be projected onto the electricity bill, but he chalks it up and says nothing.

In addition to paying for rent & utilities, costs of food &house articles can be difficult to distribute as well:

The two roommates decide to go out shopping. They walk into the IKEA furniture store and Mary gets overly excited about couch sets. Mary tugs Jackâs arm and easily reels him into approving the purchase of the pink retro couch. She also gets the matching loveseat and carpet. Mary spends another hour in the store shopping for furniture and decorative items that agree with her personality.

Jack, who is fed up with shopping, walks towards the magazine stand. Meanwhile Mary heads to the bathroom accessory aisle for some more shopping. As she stuffs her cart with redundant items, Jack takes a second look at the ten âDo-Notâsâ in a menâs magazine. Number one reads âNever give your credit card to a woman.â He is amused. He puts the magazine down, and goes to see whatâs in the cart. He recognizes toilet paper and a bunch of cleaning products. He isnât thrilled with the contents of the cart; nevertheless, he still pays his half.

The coupleâs next stop is the food market, where Mary begins her grocery rampage. She the basket up with low carb, high in anti-oxidants, and trans-fat free foods. They get home and unload everything. Jack doesnât think he should have to pay for stuff that he wonât be using or consuming. He shouldnât. If they would have talked about it earlier Jack could have avoided a money related argument with Mary.
Before roommates get an apartment, they should decide how they are going to split the costs when paying for rent & utilities and shopping together.

Clearly, it is unfair for someone to pay for something that he/she wonât be using. With this in mind, before a party decides to sign a lease, they should discuss and establish their own contract. A contract doesnât have to be formal; as long as itâs on paper and has both partiesâ signatures itâs legally binding. This contract will state any rules of which the two parties have agreed upon. Ideally, it will help avoid arguments and drama about money between roommates, which optimally, will help preserve their friendship.

thanks, any help is greatly appreciated

Could you help me to proof this essay?

Cheese1987 — Sun, 30 Sep 2007 18:28:50 GMT

Analyse the formality of the article in SCMP

It is indispensable for us to use an appropriate style when writing. There is no doubt that formal style should be practiced for newspaper as objectivity and impersonality are important. South China Morning Post is one of the most prevalent newspapers in Hong Kong. It is believed that the language style of its article is formal. There is an analysis of the formality of a newspaper article in the SCMP.

High Formality can be revealed when looking at the articleâs choice of vocabulary. Instead of using âa lot ofâ or âlots ofâ, the writer used âthe number ofâ and âmanyâ. âjustâ is also replaced by âonlyâ. However, some informal words can also be found in the article. For instance, âjobâ and âgetâ are less formal words. In order to be formal, âpositionâ and âacquireâ should be used insteadâ. Somehow it is reasonable to use these less- formal words because these words are used in the conversation. In this article, two-word verbs and words from old English are not used. Therefore, It is clearly that SCMP has high formality.

Complete sentences, complex sentences and passive constructions should be used when writing in a formal English style. In this article, every sentence is written in complete sentences. Take the second paragraph as an example. â The study results, released by Oxfam yesterday, showed about one in eight workers made less than HK$5000 a month last year.â this sentence is completed. It is also a complicated sentence because it included complementary meaning. Passive construction is used in the paragraph. Hence, high formality of the article can be seen from its sentences and constructions.

The formality can also be shown by the use of transitional words, phrases and the use of punctuation. . Some of the words such as âmoreoverâ, âwhileâ, âdue toâ, âasâ are often used in a formal article. However, only âbutâ can be found in this article. Also, no semicolons are in it. Although there is only a few âformalâ words or punctuations used in the article, the âinformalâ punctuation such as dashes and parentheses are nowhere to be found too. From this point of view, it is believed that it is a semi-formal article.

Abbreviations and short forms are informal. To write a formal article, they should be avoided. Indeed, there are no abbreviations and short forms in this article. Hence, this article should not be treated as low formality. Instead, it should be seem as semi-formal or highly formal.

In conclusion, South China Morning Post is written in a formal style to a large extent. Its high formality can be shown when looking at its choice of vocabulary, sentence, construction, transitional words, phrases and the use of punctuation. Formal style should be used in the newspaper. SCMP does it well in this aspect it is a good newspaper and worth reading.

Part of speech identification

Eagerlearner — Wed, 12 Sep 2007 20:22:31 GMT

Hello, this is my first post here, I like to know these words
kilometer
centimeter

Are those words noun if they are standing alone ? if it's, what kind of noun it's, proper noun or abstract noun or etc ?

After that, I want to indentify the part of speech of the following sentence by using the stanford parser at http://nlp.stanford.edu:8080/parser/index.jsp
if you input,
convert kilometer to centimeter
it gives convert/VB kilometer/NN to/TO centimeter/VB

if you input,
convert 2 kilometers to centimeter
it gives convert/VB 2/CD kilometers/NNS to/TO centimeter/NN

You can refer to the tagset below, my question is, is the first input grammatically correct ? if it's correct the part of speech given by the program seems to be incorrect because
the centimeter should be noun instead of Verb, or am I wrong ? If you add the "2" as the second input the program gives the correct part of speech tagging,
is it because my first input grammar is incorrect ? Thank you.

Reference
1. CC Coordinating conjunction 25.TO to
2. CD Cardinal number           26.UH Interjection
3. DT Determiner                27.VB Verb, base form
4. EX Existential there     28.VBD Verb, past tense
5. FW Foreign word              29.VBG Verb, gerund/present participle
6. IN Preposition/subord.     30.VBN Verb, past participle
218z     conjunction
7. JJ Adjective                 31.VBP Verb, non-3rd ps. sing. present
8. JJR Adjective, comparative    32.VBZ Verb, 3rd ps. sing. present
9. JJS Adjective, superlative    33.WDT wh-determiner
10.LS List item marker          34.WP wh-pronoun
11.MD Modal                     35.WP Possessive wh-pronoun
12.NN Noun, singular or mass    36.WRB wh-adverb
13.NNS Noun, plural              37. # Pound sign
14.NNP Proper noun, singular     38. $ Dollar sign
15.NNPS Proper noun, plural      39. . Sentence-final punctuation
16.PDT Predeterminer             40. , Comma
17.POS Possessive ending         41. : Colon, semi-colon
18.PRP Personal pronoun          42. ( Left bracket character
19.PP Possessive pronoun        43. ) Right bracket character
20.RB Adverb                    44. " Straight double quote
21.RBR Adverb, comparative       45. ` Left open single quote
22.RBS Adverb, superlative       46. " Left open double quote
23.RP Particle                  47. ' Right close single quote
24.SYM Symbol             48. " Right close double quote

Part of Speech identification

Anonymous — Wed, 12 Sep 2007 20:16:08 GMT

if you input,
convert 2 kilometers to centimeter
it gives convert/VB 2/CD kilometers/NNS to/TO centimeter/NN

You can refer to the tagset below, my question is, is the first input setence correct ? if it's correct the part of speech given by the program seems to be incorrect because
the centimeter should be noun instead of Verb, or am I wrong ? If you add the "2" as the second input the program gives the correct part of speech tagging,
it it because my first input grammar is incorrect ? Thank you.

Reference

1. CC  Coordinating conjunction  25.TO  to 
2. CD  Cardinal number           26.UH  Interjection 
3. DT  Determiner                27.VB  Verb, base form 
4. EX  Existential there   28.VBD Verb, past tense 
5. FW  Foreign word              29.VBG Verb, gerund/present participle 
6. IN  Preposition/subord.   30.VBN Verb, past participle 
218z     conjunction 
7. JJ  Adjective                 31.VBP Verb, non-3rd ps. sing. present 
8. JJR Adjective, comparative    32.VBZ Verb, 3rd ps. sing. present 
9. JJS Adjective, superlative    33.WDT wh-determiner 
10.LS  List item marker          34.WP  wh-pronoun 
11.MD  Modal                     35.WP  Possessive wh-pronoun 
12.NN  Noun, singular or mass    36.WRB wh-adverb 
13.NNS Noun, plural              37. #  Pound sign 
14.NNP Proper noun, singular     38. $  Dollar sign 
15.NNPS Proper noun, plural      39. .  Sentence-final punctuation 
16.PDT Predeterminer             40. ,  Comma 
17.POS Possessive ending         41. :  Colon, semi-colon 
18.PRP Personal pronoun          42. (  Left bracket character 
19.PP  Possessive pronoun        43. )  Right bracket character 
20.RB  Adverb                    44. "  Straight double quote 
21.RBR Adverb, comparative       45. `  Left open single quote 
22.RBS Adverb, superlative       46. "  Left open double quote 
23.RP  Particle                  47. '  Right close single quote 
24.SYM Symbol  48. "  Right close double quote

Re: compare and contrast essay

Rmontez — Tue, 11 Sep 2007 08:59:48 GMT

Hyena wrote:
Rmontez wrote:

Almost everyone is being manipulated at one point of the day in their lives. Whether they are driving on the highway, reading the newspaper, or watching T.V. the U.S. population is constantly having information thrown at them to sway them to an idea or action. For the most part people donât want to be manipulated. Most people think that if they avoid certain programs they can avoid most advertising and manipulation. It isnât true. Many of the U.S. population have fallen into the reality television craze, preferring it over syndicated television and many still continue to view ~~the~~ news broadcasts. What ever the case, manipulation in the U.S. is a way of life. Manipulation is used in both reality television and in the news to portray a certain point of view or idea.

Reality television has taken over media; more and more of the U.S population have grown tired of syndicated television and want to view ârealâ people (no comma here use colon): not actresses or actors. But these shows are hardly ever true reality. Shows use technology to present footage in a certain light. In James Poniewozik âs How Reality Fakes TV It, you can see that reality show producers may use a technique called Franken biting, to cut out or add certain words or phrases to someoneâs dialogue to portray what they, reality show producers, want or need. A contestant on the show The Dating Experiment disliked one of her suitors, but the producers thought it would make a better show if she did, so they sat her down for an interview and asked her who her favorite actor was; she replied, âI really love Adam Sandler.â Afterward they spliced out Sandlerâs name and added the name of the male contestant. Dating games also portray the producerâs vision and not what really happened. Theyâll place scenes out of order, to liven up a date or create a sense of hostility or even boredom that isnât there. It is also said that the queen of all reality shows, Laguna Beach, a reality series about rich teens in Orange County, Calif., is manipulated. Members of the cast have said that no love triangle existed between L.C., Kristin, and Stephen; in fact L.C. and Stephen were platonic friends (P1). The term âreality TVâ is loosely-based, with all the Franken biting and cutting, one cannot think its better than regular syndicated drama. Newscasters and journalist also deliver manipulated information, although the public is led to believe that it is unbiased truth.

The majority of people do not think they have to view the news or read the newspaper with a discerning eye. News casters and journalists are supposed to give unbiased facts, but almost everything that is said or written in these publications, ~~have~~ has a slant. I bet most people donât realize that only 5 corporations own most media in the U.S.. Ben Bagdikian tells us in The New Media Monopoly that those corporations are Time Warner, Disney, Murdoch's News Corporation, Bertelsmann of Germany, and Viacom (formerly CBS){Tell us why it is important that there are only 5 corporations - just one sentence will work}. News caster donât use Franken biting to manipulate the public{This sentence seems out of place so also tell us why it is important that news casters don't use franken biting - is it illegal?}. In his article, Share the Wealth, Chris Gupta describes a technique that is used from board rooms to the government:

"â¦ the job of the facilitator is to be a neutral, non-directing helper to see that the meeting flows smoothly. Actually, he or she is there for exactly the opposite reason: to see that the conclusions reached during the meeting are in accord with a plan already decided upon by those who called the meeting. The process used to "facilitate" the meeting is called the Delphi Technique.â (Gupta, par. 4-5)

This technique can also be applied to coporations' use of the media.       âUsing the âdivide and conquerâ principle, they manipulate one opinion against another, making those who [donât agree with their point of view] appear âridiculous, unknowledgeable, inarticulate, or dogmatic.ââ (Gupta, par. 1) When writing or speaking about a peace of news newscasters and journalists use certain terms and words to invoke feeling in their viewers, swaying them toward on side or the other. For instance, if a news broadcaster wanted the audience to feel outrage toward an event{no comma use colon}: they might reference another event {no comma} which greatly influenced the audience before. Corporat~~ions~~ {Corporate} agendas get through before the news is told. This manipulation has a definite effect on society.

            Although reality TV shows and the news use different tools to manipulate, they both have manipulation in common. Both forms of manipulation have an affect on society. The most common form of manipulation is suppression by omission. Viewers never see the whole story to make make-up their own mind. Society thinks they are getting the truth,{no comma} but they are being lied to,{no comma, colon} skewing their views on relationships and life. The manipulation sways viewerâs opinion so corporations almost always have their own personal views and opinions perceived as societyâs views and opinions. Society is never without influence from outside sources. Society is lied to by t.v. producers and indirectly influenced by the news, but there is something the community can do to stop it.{This last sentence is out of place - maybe it would make a good statement to open a paragraph}

            This manipulation has produced a coarse and vulgar culture that celebrates the worst characteristics of human nature â greed, deceit, and cheating as a legitimate way to win (Bagdikian 35). Letâs demand for reality shows to show us the reality, not the cut and edited version.   According to experts in the fireld we must decentralize our media sector, to let our press truly become free. Then, one can say that his or her views and opinions are not swayed by anyone but themselves {need a colon here or move "safely" to "Then one can safely say ...} safely.

I don't have the greatest command of grammer but I hope I helped.

Thank you what of the essay though/