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I won't do the whole letter, but I will do an edit of the first paragraph (including the salutation). Here's my edit.To The Selection Committee:I recently graduated from the Universidad Autonoma de Yucatan with a ___degree in __ __. The past few years I have been working on different...

We have arranged for the surveyor to inspect these goods in November (or do you mean, on 7th November). After that: your paragraph sounds like it is part of a formal letter to a client or customer, so that "after that" is slightly too informal. You could say, "Following this inspection, they will...

I'd just like to point out that this isn't grammar - this is "style." And different style guides will tell you different things. American: Colons after the salutation in a business letter, comma after the closing. Do NOT indent the paragraphs in a business letter. Save that for letters...

I'd place more emphasis on what you can do for them rather than what they can do for you - so re-think your first paragraph. Address - it is not correct to refer to a woman as 'Madam name....' Only use madam if you do not know the woman's name. You need to use 'Miss/Mrs/Ms name .....' as...

Dear Mr. Ericson! Do not end a salutation with an exclamation mark. In US English use a colon :, in British English use either a comma or nothing.As you are already aware, Football Club “Shahter”(Donetsk) is about to build a new 5-star stadium, which meets all official UEFA requirements and will...

Looks good to me apart from a few word choices in the second paragraph. Business letters are not supposed to sound 'emotional'. collaboration - equals collaborate, employers and employees don't collaborate. roughly - either cut out entirely or use 'basically'. complex but straightforward -...

Letterhead should be white or perhaps a very light cream, but white is more common. Paragraphs should be singled spaced, with a blank like between paragraphs. You can sign in black or blue ink. If you google something like format business letter, you will find online resources. Here is just one...

Is a business letter ususally written on white letter head and signed in black ink? Also are the body of paragraphs singled and doubled spaced? We're in a little discussion and would like a little insight.. Thanks

To me, it is a good business letter. I like it. It is like those letters sometimes I read from adverstiment or soliciting. It is our company GOAL to work hard towards providing the best quality of product S to the customers' entire satisfaction. As a token of appreciation, we are giving you...

I suggest you not just translating the Chinese version into English. The Chinese version is already too explicit to me. For the English version of this letter, you'd better keep the letter short and be sincere and polite. Don't overuse adjectives and adverbs nor use those which are too...