In Clauses^x, Letter of motivation^x

dear lil´ruby rose, thank you for your reply and the correction of my letter of motivation! I have tried to write clear but I am not certain if it works. I have got my doubts about it... So I may ask you for another review to make sure whats behind all this. (or forgotten) It would be...

Looks good to me - just a couple more suggestions: and working environment. But I hope to improve - delete 'But'. ZZZ provides the opportunity to achieve the goals I expect from a stay abroad - more natural to say something like 'ZZZ will allow me to fulfill my goals in studying abroad'. You...