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Hi everyone.My name's Chris, Im 16 yo guy from Poland, learning in the High School in Wroclaw.My English teacher wanted us to write an e-mail to a girl who wanted to know something about a friend who is expected to come to her house in England for a holiday time.Have to have it written corretly...

As a teacher of English I have taught my students the following way to build an English letter. Lately there have been remarks from people that the arrangement below is not correct. Please tell me if and where I am wrong and what needs changing Every item aligns to the...