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Cute572 — Fri, 11 Jul 2008 23:24:35 GMT

Please check the tenses and verb as well i have used here.

The wide-screen TV, high up on the shelf by the wall, was showing some action movie scene and making the walls shake with its loud volume. I sat quietly on the sofa below and furiously muted its volume with a remote control [comma we applied?] which was placed on nearby the small table, and settled my eyes on wall clock.

Thanks Guys!

Re: Paragraph Suggestions

Mister Micawber — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 08:10:14 GMT

Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies.-- The computer assists, not the versatility; 'adept' is for people.

And wrought mean shaped, so why its wrong here ? -- It is the wrong tense.

connected is wrong word? -- The verb should be passive in aspect.

wavy mean twisted cables , thats not sutibale as well? -- 'Wavy' is for hair; it is a pleasant image, unlike 'twisted'.

central is lined because i used capital C? -- 'Unit' is a singular countable noun, and the sentence is a comma splice (you need a conjunction).

shelf of the table please do explain why its wrong as well. -- Tables don't normally have shelves; desks may. Also, objects would have to go on a shelf, not at it.

Re: Grammar Suggestion

Mr Wordy — Tue, 17 Jun 2008 20:47:10 GMT

Hi Cute572

1. Sitting at my writing desk and working on my assignment, I become captivated by the soft evening rays, pouring in through the side window and gently covering my sheet in their yellow and orange shades.

"Become" is fine (if you've decided that you want to write the sentence in the present tense).

2. The evening rays, entering through the window, casting a gradient colors [or look?] to my smooth carpet.

The commas are OK, but there is no main verb, and this is not a proper sentence. The prepositions in the last part of the sentence also need fixing. You might say:

The evening rays, entering through the window, cast a gradient of colors on my smooth carpet.

Now "cast" is the main verb.

Re: Plz Correct me !

Cute572 — Sun, 15 Jun 2008 21:09:26 GMT

Hello Feeb!

Well I want to ask one past sentence question.

1. ~~At top surface of the table,~~On the table top I see a round vase holding [verb is appropriate? fine] the red roses with leaves, [comma we use?] and give [or use continous participal tense: giving?better to use this] an elegant look to my table.

After correct at suggestions:

On the table top I see a round vase holding the red roses with leaves , and giving an elegant look to my table.

Here we use comma or no need to use and say the sentence without conjunction "And"?

Re: Plz Correct me !

Cute572 — Thu, 12 Jun 2008 06:09:19 GMT

Thanks Goodman!

Could anyone tell me, in descriptive writing what tense usually writer choose.

And Guys please reply my 2nd post last two sentenses as well. And explain we can separate verb and subject i.e mirror and curtain, by using comma for emphasis like Feebs did?

Third sentence, I have made some changes. Please check this as well.

The soft curtain hanging and swinging [I am not using comma because it will separate both curtain Subject and hanging Verb] over the rood with moving winds and touching my chair [or desk] unintentionally. [This adverb is appropriate fits?]

Or following structure seemed less congested

The soft curtain hanging over a rood, and swinging with moving [can use melodious or rythemetic or some word instead of moving?] winds; [semicolon used here or comma ?] somehow, [comma is ok here?] unintentionally touches my chair at constant intervals. [puntucation is correct ?]

And what about this similar sentence grammar?

Above window, long rood holds the curtain from the upper edge of window. Is it ok to use and we would this underline part direct object ?

I request to explain each of these three versions with punctuation i used

Thanks !

Re: Plz Correct me !

Feebs11 — Wed, 11 Jun 2008 19:53:16 GMT

Cute572
Thanks Feebs!
I have few more sentences like this. Could you check whether they agree in subject-verb and tenses?

1. ~~At top surface of the table,~~On the table top I see a round vase holding [verb is appropriate? fine] the red roses with leaves, [comma we use?] and give [or use continous participal tense: giving?better to use this] an elegant look to my table.

2. ~~Reflecting Mirror giving my room, an excess glow from sunrays, entering through the window.~~The mirror, reflecting the sun's rays as they come through the window, made my room glow.
3. The curtain, hanging over a long rod,~~and swinging over with winds passing by~~ moves in the breeze,~~and unintentionally~~ touching my chair.
Tell me, is there any mistakes ? or puntuation errors as well .

Re: Plz Correct me !

Cute572 — Wed, 11 Jun 2008 10:16:21 GMT

Thanks Feebs!

I have few more sentences like this. Could you check whether they agree in subject-verb and tenses?

1. At top surface of the table, I see, a round vase holding [verb is appropriate?] the red roses with leaves, [comma we use?] and give [or use continous participal tense: giving?] an elegant look to my table.

2. Reflecting Mirror giving my room, an excess glow from sunrays, entering through the window.

3. The Curtain hanging and swinging over long rod with winds passing by and unintentionally touching my chair.

Tell me, is there any mistakes ? or puntuation errors as well .

Re: tenses

Newguest — Tue, 27 May 2008 19:11:54 GMT

Grammar Geek

As it is, the original has a comma splice - an incorrect joining of two independent clauses with a comma.

I would also keep the tenses consistent. I've never had my own flat. I've always rented rooms, and that's what I'm still doing.

If you remove that comma before "and" you will have THREE independent clauses joined by commas - two comma splice errors in the same "sentence."

So, you suggest GG that it's best to write it in two sentences (like you did it) instead of in one.

You wrote: I've always rented..... Was my version: I've been renting.. worse? I only wanted to stress that I'm still doing this, and using the present perfect would imply (if I didn't add: I'm still doing this) that I do not do it any more?

Re: tenses

Grammar Geek — Tue, 27 May 2008 18:49:28 GMT

As it is, the original has a comma splice - an incorrect joining of two independent clauses with a comma.

I would also keep the tenses consistent. I've never had my own flat. I've always rented rooms, and that's what I'm still doing.

If you remove that comma before "and" you will have THREE independent clauses joined by commas - two comma splice errors in the same "sentence."

Re: grammar questions!

Clive — Mon, 19 May 2008 22:05:24 GMT

Hi,

Generally speaking, it's not great grammar to start a sentence with 'so' like this. However, people sometimes do it.

(1) So all too often, we find in situations of conflict that religion, instead of encouraging people to move beyond their own trauma and own fears, tends not only to support it, but even to exacerbate it and feed on in it.

So, all too often, we find in situations of conflict that religion, instead of encouraging people to move beyond their own trauma and own fears, tends not only to support it, but even to exacerbate it and feed in it.

The it's seem to refer to conflict. I think you should say 'them', and refer to the trauma and fears.

Please check comma usage.

(2) So, in the final analysis in this rather long, convoluted response to your question, I have no other answer other than the great gift that the Almighty have given us.

Should it be Almighty have or has? Please check S-V agreement. Say 'the Almighty has'.

(3) So, food is the biggest thing, and as human beings started living in the caves or whatever we have, << say this some other way in society as human beings [it is for food that they] then come out and then they go. So the world is constantly reappearing the way it is now.

Actually, this whole sentence needs rewording. I don't know what it means.

Please check comma usage.

(4) We begin to understand the being because the being is alive because it's craving for food.

Can "and" added before " and because it's craving for food." Please advise. Yes, you need 'and'. What does 'the being' mean?

(5) ~~And~~ monks in India ~~were~~ had no pockets at all. No keeping for tomorrow.<<< This is a phrase, not a sentence. Add a verb, etc. No food can be saved or stored for tomorrow.

Check your tenes. Do you want tu use all present tense?

Should it be wore rather than were? You don't 'wear'pockets.

(6) Other religions might advocate kindness to animals, either because they also are creatures of God, according to their theology, as some theistic religions might <<< might what?, or because they are the embodiment of the same spirit as us human beings, as Vedantins might explain, that all life is coming from the same source. You need to make this last part a separate sentence. You have too much information crammed into one sentence, and the grammar is getting messed up.

Can "as us" be substituted with "like us"? No. Please clarify.

(7) When you are to look at the number of cattle that ~~are were~~ slaughtered mercilessly in the wake of the Mad Cow Disease, or Mad Man Disease, whatever you call it, and nobody shed a tear about them. They were raised to die anyway.

'When' introduces a subordinate clause, but you have no main clause.

Should it be "They were raised"? If you want to talk about the past, yes.

(8) Sometimes we have been animals too, or even worse. For this reason, a being who today is an animal might once have been a human being, or by exercising moral powers, that some animal may be reborn in the future as a human being. You need to make this last part a separate sentence, and say it in a more understandable way.

Technically speaking, aren't people animals?

Should it be "that same animal"? Yes.

(9) You can think of a story here which you can be seen <<< what does this mean? on TV. A beautiful story about an elephant, narrated in the Jaina scriptures, illustrates the moral capacity ascribed to higher animals by the Jains.

Should it be "which you can see it on the TV's" Still wrong. perhaps you mean 'which you can see on TV'?

(10) ~~And~~ this is a story which is based on the sacred texts. ~~And in~~ this story appears in the canonical Bhagavati Sutra, which purports to preserve the words of the last tirthakara Mahavira

Should it be " And this story appears"

(11) There, Mahavira is asked about the war between the king of Magadha and some independent kings, which it is now agreed was a historical event, a war in which 48,000 people died.

Should it be "which is now agreed" Yes

(12) Thanks you very much or Thank you very much

Please advise which one is correct (~~Thanks~~ or Thank).

Best wishes, Clive