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Re: Could someone also review my motivation letter, please? (its urgent...)

Lil' Ruby Rose — Mon, 26 Mar 2007 15:24:04 GMT

[Through the description of the sculpture program of your university I found out that the program bases on the knowledge of traditional art and opens itself for new ideas] I was struck by the description of the sculpture program at your university: based on traditional foundations, but open to new ideas. I think this [is also reflected by the country Bulgaria through the] also reflects Bulgaria as a country, in the political decision to become a member of the European Union. I am fascinated by the [alteration] changes the country has made and I think it is open [for] to new ideas. [For me it is in] To me, it seems there is a great forward movement to develop new aims [wrong word?] and that makes [it] [what do you mean - Bulgaria, or being in Bulgaria at this time of change?] attractive. My ideas are very different, ~~likewise~~ as are my projects. ~~Therefore~~ I often change my materials to find ~~out~~ the right one for each idea. [This multifarious aspects are] This multi-dimensional approach is also shown by my portfolio which I have [composed] put together to provide an insight into my [doing] [work? craft? working methods? creative process?]. I [should be glad] would be thrilled if you gave me the opportunity to learn from the skills of your Professors as well as the chance for an [interchange] [wrong word] with Bulgarian people.

[I am enthused about] I am impressed by the descriptions of your program, and [since I am attracted from the topic of] as I am particularly interested in fine arts, I ~~have~~ found the following highly interesting: âsculpture, composition, drawing, history of art, working in material, aspects of modern sculpture, photography, aesthetics and foreign languages.â [it doesn't seem quite right to be quoting their own prospectus back at them - is this sentence necessary?] I would like to [visit] take / study these courses [no comma] because they will enrich my knowledge and help~~ing~~ me [put it to] apply it at a higher standard. It would be a great pleasure for me to study in Bulgaria, not [only] least because of the course variety. I am eager to [meet] learn about such a distant culture and [take the best] make the most of the time I will spend there.

I hope you will consider my application and can regard me as a well motivated candidate to this program.

Yours faithfully,

Re: another e- mail

Mister Micawber — Sun, 04 Feb 2007 01:45:35 GMT

Commas are always needed to clarify statements and set out the structure of more complex utterances. They are appropriately used in this email.

Yours faithfully is traditionally used in business correspondence when the name of the addressee (as in Dear Sir) is unknown. It is also appropriate here.

I hope this helps.

Re: another e- mail

Anonymous — Sat, 03 Feb 2007 16:51:59 GMT

To Mister Micawber

I understand what you mean but I wonder if it wasnÂ´t better not use any commas in the e- mail or instead of " Yours faithfully" "Yours sincerely".

p.s. It would help me improve my writing.

Re: Grammar in formal letters

Cool Breeze — Wed, 10 Jan 2007 17:41:32 GMT

Hi Anon

You can by all means have a lot of intent in your letter but no indention is necessary these days. (Just referring to a previous reply.)
I have got(ten) the impression from my British friends' letters that commas are out of style in British English. (However, I don't know your nationality at all.)

In BE most up-to-date people don't use commas after Dear Sir and Yours faithfully. They don't even use commas in dates nowadays: January 10 2007. Americans are another breed. They want you to put a comma after Mr in Mr. Smith.

It's a free world (at least to an extent). Take your pick.

Cheers
CB

Grammar in formal letters

Anonymous — Wed, 10 Jan 2007 16:24:04 GMT

Hi everyone

I'm doing a cover letter for a resume, however I'm not sure about:

1. Whether to indent at the start of each paragraph

2. Whether to put a comma after 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours faithfully'

What is the formal way to do this?

Cheers

Cover letter - few questions

Anonymous — Wed, 10 Jan 2007 11:45:04 GMT

Hi everyone

I'm doing a cover letter for a resume, however I'm not sure about:

1. Whether to indent at the start of each paragraph

2. Whether to put a comma after 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours faithfully'

What is the formal way to do this?

Cheers

Re: I need help with the grammar, especially with commas :)

Feebs11 — Fri, 24 Nov 2006 19:49:46 GMT

Anonymous wrote:
Hi,

tomorrow I must hand in my cover letter to my lecturer. Our task was to write a cover letter and a curriculum vitae. It was not very difficult to write there is maybe a problem with my grammar. I want to ask you whether you could check my grammar. Pleaseeeeeeeee

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Subject: Internship Marketing

Dear Sir/Madam (unless you have a name),

An employee of Berliner Flughaefen GmbH (Berlin Airports Association) told me that you offer an internship in the marketing department. As you can see in my CV I am a student at the International University of Applied Sciences *** , working toward my bachelorâs degree in ***.

My university allows me the possibility to connect my theoretical knowledge with practical experience in the fifth semester. I would like to take the chance to perform my internship at the Berlin airports which I have used for many years to travel to and from my home district . I also would like to understand in practice the individual processes at the âSystem Airportâ.

Thanks to my part-time job as waiter at the state theatre ***, I have learned how to concentrate and focus on goals, but also that teamwork, thoroughness and commitment are important key elements for all kinds of work. Accordingly I see myself as a person who very highly values organisational skills and teamwork, and I believe that I fulfil tasks which are given to me very accurately.

The enclosed curriculum vitae provides more details about my experiences and skills. If you consider that I would be a positive addition to your team, please feel free to call me or write me an email. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Soeren ***

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Thanks a lot to everyone who will help me Thanks!!!!!

Greeting

Soeren

Re: Need help pls for Motivatio letter

nona the brit — Tue, 23 May 2006 16:07:38 GMT

Dear Sir,

I have read the internal list of vacant positions within *** send to me by Mr ***. After carefully reading it, I believe I could contribute to the success of the company, (delete comma) within the above position and that it would be a positive step towards building my career.

I have worked in the IT field for eight years. My duties include tendering, site co-ordination, management, and the implementation and maintenance of hardware and software.

Last year, I gained some Scripting experience which I believe could be useful in the position of Test Engineer.

Iâ(delete apostrophe) am enthusiastic, capable of adapting to new situations and eager to learn,
and always seeking to improve. I have a good team spirit as well as a sense for initiatives (still makes no sense, sorry. What do you mean by initiatives?).
Please find enclosed my resume, which outlines my experience and other relevant information.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Re: Second try, Please help it is URGENT

nona the brit — Tue, 02 May 2006 08:09:43 GMT

Dear (delete comma) Sirs,

I would like to apply for the masterÂ´s programme in Comparative Labour and Organisation Studies. (end sentence)Please let me explain my motivation in a few words.

I am a student in communication science and I am also taking a minor in labour studies.

Last year I participated in a bachelor seminar at the ISHSS (delete comma) and working (delete word)with international students turned out to be a great learning experience. I was very delighted to discover that the ISHSS offers (different to what) masters programmes. (apostrophes not used in plurals! Removed throughout your letter. This is a very bad habit of yours) Since I was already taking an elective course in the field of labour and organisation studies at that time (at what time - when you were on the seminar? make that clear), the COLOS programme immediately draw my attention. For this masters programme, sufficient knowledge in the field of labour and organisation studies is required. Therefore I enrolled in the specialised programme 'Labour Studies' at the Amsterdam Institute for Advanced Labour Studies in September last year. Besides learning more about the field of labour and organisation studies, this programme offered me the opportunity to find out whether I would like to continue my studies within this field. After attending the mini lectures and programme meetings at ISHSS this year and my learning experience within the labour studies programme, I was even more convinced that the answer to (typo) this question is yes.

During my studies I have also been working for a television production company in its department of communications. The company was faced with a fast changing market and in order to maintain their competitive advantage (singular), they had to reorganize its organizational structure. I found this part of my work experience the most interesting. I was a member of the task force that was responsible for presenting a proposal for a new organizational structure. Although I was responsible for a small part of the whole organizational change process, the professional consultants with whom I was working gave me an inside look at the complete process. Through this experience I realized I was eager to learn more on this topic. Organizational change involves much more then presenting a new structure and strategy on paper. It involves redesigning jobs, the training of employees and sometimes the firing of employees. This also increased my interest in matters involving the labour market. I decided to complete my bachelors degree in communication science, taking as many courses as possible in business and communication and switch to a different masters programme that would fit my interest in labour and organisation better.

The COLOS programme offers an exciting interdisciplinary scenario, in which I will have the opportunity to expand my knowledge in the field of labour and organisation studies and to learn from recognized scientists from different disciplines. Studying with both national and international students adds a special element to the programme, which I highly appreciate. Studying at the ISHSS within the COLOS masters programme would enable me to develop a strong background of knowledge and improve my English language skills. This would make it possible for me to pursue a career as an advisor for labour organisations.

Considering my qualifications and interests outlined above and in my CV, I very much hope that you will consider me for the COLOS masters programme.

Yours faithfully, (sincerely only if letter addressed to named person, a dear 'sir' etc letter must finish with faithfully.)

Re: HELP! I wish feedback on my motivation letter

Philologist — Fri, 06 Jan 2006 19:03:49 GMT

Hi Emilia,

I am glad to hear that my suggestions have been useful!

Good luck

Emilia wrote:

...broadening the international point-of-view. Should be "point of view" without hyphenation

... the multifaceted experience of living and studying at a large campus university. Should be "university campus".
...since I have decided on to write it in English. You should remove the "on"
I am an active person with a lot of energy and a big passion for nature and outdoor sports, so the region of Z, with its magnificent nature, comma is an ideal place.

Sincerely yours, I still favour using "Yours faithfully," as you do not know the full name of the recipient, but in American English this might be acceptable, too.