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Re: Yours truly, Jane Doe

Jackson6612 — Tue, 18 Sep 2007 21:12:11 GMT

Feebs11 wrote:
Jackson6612 wrote:
Please make corrections/edits to the following application/letter. There are also some questions in superscipt position, please answer them.

To,

                   The Vice Chancellor,

                   University of Chandrapore,

                   Chandrapore.

Subject:       APPLICATION FOR THE POST OF LECTURER (PHYSICS)

Respected Sir,   [Is this a normal method of greeting in your culture? Here the accepted norm would be "Dear Vice Chancellor"; It would not be usual for the Vice Chancellor to be recruiting new staff] Yes, you are correct that Vice Chancellor won't recruiting new staff himslf or reading this application. But whom should I address this application to then?

                 I came to know through the reliable recourses ^{Can't I use resources here instead of recourses?} [what do you mean by this? Advertisements? The grapevine?] ^{I just mean any source of information}.that you have some vacancies [there is only one post indicated = "Lecturer (Physics)]. ~~for service of above mention post. As such~~ I qualify for this Grade [position] and would like to ~~I offer my service~~s apply for this post. ~~My experience and qualification will fit the position of this required post.~~



                       ~~I am capable of accepting new challenges in ever changing environment.~~

          ~~So I shall be grateful to you if you give me a chance for the service of above~~

          ~~mention post.~~



                       My CV and other documents are enclosed herewith for your ~~kind~~ consideration. ~~and favourable response please.~~ I hope that you will consider my application and shall look forward to hearing from you.

                                                                                                          Yours ~~truly,~~faithfully ^{Should there be a comma between Yours and faithfully?}

                                                                                                          Jane Doe

                                                     ^{1: Is it correct to write date here?} Dated: 18th Aug, 2006

Address:

             C/O^2: ^{what does C/O mean here?}. Mr. John Doe (Late)   "care of" [nb "Late" indicates that Mr John Doe is dead, so he cannot be used as someone to whom correspondence is sent. I know C/O means ''care of'' but what is the purpose of using it here?

             Malgudi, Street #17^3: ^{Can I write I just Street 17?},Malgudi Road, Chandrapore. [This must be a local term - you will have to decide]

Contact No:
          Res. (091)-454-5435  Cell. (359)-335-3554                                                                   

Hi Feebs,

My comments are appearing in yellowgreen in the above post. I know it's hard to answer such a thing, especially when the

width of text doesn't fit on screen.

Re: [URGENT] GREAT BRITAIN: job application in London - cover letter

nona the brit — Fri, 02 Mar 2007 11:46:54 GMT

corrections in bold and other areas you need to look at are highlighted for you. Watch out for the length of your sentences. You tend to run on and try to connect too many ideas and are not using enough commas.

Dear Sir or Madam (US uses colon, UK uses comma or nothing after salutation)

This letter is to express my interest in the ZZZZ/YYYY position within your GGGG/HHHH Team listed on http://www.YYYYYYYY.co.uk (Recruiter Ref: YYYYYY). I earned an Economics Masterâs degree in September 2006 from the the YYYYYYYY University, Berlin. I graduated within the top 10 of my class and last year this university won the title 'Elite University' in a German-wide excellence initiative. The department of economics is ranked 5^th in Europe and 2^nd in Germany.

The advertisement said you seek someone who is passionate about the fixed income market and is able to work independently to produce accurate, detailed materials while meeting tight deadlines. Analyzing the events that influence the world economy as well as the fixed income market is my passion. Due to my stock market activities, mainly on the French small and mid-cap market primarily using fundamental analysis combined with technical analysis, I was able to finance my entire studies. In 2005, as well as in 2006, I generated an after-tax return of about 60% per year.

During my studies I gained placement experience in several well-known companies, where I often did accurate and self-reliant research and analysis work and prepared exact decision memos (?). My academic focus on empirical economic research and on transition economics helped me a lot in developing strong analytical and quantitative skills by using the right tools.

My work experience and extracurricular activities as a member of the stock market group of the University of Berlin are the best proof that I am quick to learn, a strong team player, and also able to work effectively alone. I am eager to learn more about the position at Johnnyâs Bank & Co., and I look forward to meeting with you. My curriculum vitae is enclosed.

Thank you for taking the time to review my application.

Yours sincerely,

Johnny Cash

Re: I need help with the grammar, especially with commas :)

Feebs11 — Fri, 24 Nov 2006 19:49:46 GMT

Anonymous wrote:
Hi,

tomorrow I must hand in my cover letter to my lecturer. Our task was to write a cover letter and a curriculum vitae. It was not very difficult to write there is maybe a problem with my grammar. I want to ask you whether you could check my grammar. Pleaseeeeeeeee

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Subject: Internship Marketing

Dear Sir/Madam (unless you have a name),

An employee of Berliner Flughaefen GmbH (Berlin Airports Association) told me that you offer an internship in the marketing department. As you can see in my CV I am a student at the International University of Applied Sciences *** , working toward my bachelorâs degree in ***.

My university allows me the possibility to connect my theoretical knowledge with practical experience in the fifth semester. I would like to take the chance to perform my internship at the Berlin airports which I have used for many years to travel to and from my home district . I also would like to understand in practice the individual processes at the âSystem Airportâ.

Thanks to my part-time job as waiter at the state theatre ***, I have learned how to concentrate and focus on goals, but also that teamwork, thoroughness and commitment are important key elements for all kinds of work. Accordingly I see myself as a person who very highly values organisational skills and teamwork, and I believe that I fulfil tasks which are given to me very accurately.

The enclosed curriculum vitae provides more details about my experiences and skills. If you consider that I would be a positive addition to your team, please feel free to call me or write me an email. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Soeren ***

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Thanks a lot to everyone who will help me Thanks!!!!!

Greeting

Soeren

I need help with the grammar, especially with commas :)

Anonymous — Thu, 23 Nov 2006 20:38:13 GMT

Hi,

tomorrow I must hand in my cover letter to my lecturer. Our task was to write a cover letter and a curriculum vitae. It was not very difficult to write there is maybe a problem with my grammar. I want to ask you whether you could check my grammar. Pleaseeeeeeeee

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Subject: Internship Marketing

Dear recruiter,

An employee of Berliner Flughaefen GmbH (Berlin Airports Association) told me that you offer an internship in the marketing department. As you can see in my CV I am a student at the International University of Applied Sciences *** , working toward my bachelorâs degree in ***.

My university provide me the possibility to connect my theoretical knowledge with practical experience in the fifth semester. Therefore I want to grab the chance to perform my internship at the Berlin airports which I also connect for many years with my region *** . I also would like to understand in practise the individual processes at the âSystem Airportâ.

Thanks to my part-time job as waiter at the state theatre *** I have learned how to concentrate and focus on goals, but also that teamwork, thoroughness and commitment are important key elements for all kinds of work. Accordingly I see myself as a person who very highly values organisation skills and teamwork, and fulfil tasks which are given to me very accurately.

The enclosed curriculum vitae provide more details about my experiences and skills. If you affirm that I would be a positive addition in your team, please feel free to call me or write me an email. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Soeren ***

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Thanks a lot to everyone who will help me Thanks!!!!!

Greeting

Soeren

Re: Second try, Please help it is URGENT

nona the brit — Tue, 02 May 2006 08:09:43 GMT

Dear (delete comma) Sirs,

I would like to apply for the masterÂ´s programme in Comparative Labour and Organisation Studies. (end sentence)Please let me explain my motivation in a few words.

I am a student in communication science and I am also taking a minor in labour studies.

Last year I participated in a bachelor seminar at the ISHSS (delete comma) and working (delete word)with international students turned out to be a great learning experience. I was very delighted to discover that the ISHSS offers (different to what) masters programmes. (apostrophes not used in plurals! Removed throughout your letter. This is a very bad habit of yours) Since I was already taking an elective course in the field of labour and organisation studies at that time (at what time - when you were on the seminar? make that clear), the COLOS programme immediately draw my attention. For this masters programme, sufficient knowledge in the field of labour and organisation studies is required. Therefore I enrolled in the specialised programme 'Labour Studies' at the Amsterdam Institute for Advanced Labour Studies in September last year. Besides learning more about the field of labour and organisation studies, this programme offered me the opportunity to find out whether I would like to continue my studies within this field. After attending the mini lectures and programme meetings at ISHSS this year and my learning experience within the labour studies programme, I was even more convinced that the answer to (typo) this question is yes.

During my studies I have also been working for a television production company in its department of communications. The company was faced with a fast changing market and in order to maintain their competitive advantage (singular), they had to reorganize its organizational structure. I found this part of my work experience the most interesting. I was a member of the task force that was responsible for presenting a proposal for a new organizational structure. Although I was responsible for a small part of the whole organizational change process, the professional consultants with whom I was working gave me an inside look at the complete process. Through this experience I realized I was eager to learn more on this topic. Organizational change involves much more then presenting a new structure and strategy on paper. It involves redesigning jobs, the training of employees and sometimes the firing of employees. This also increased my interest in matters involving the labour market. I decided to complete my bachelors degree in communication science, taking as many courses as possible in business and communication and switch to a different masters programme that would fit my interest in labour and organisation better.

The COLOS programme offers an exciting interdisciplinary scenario, in which I will have the opportunity to expand my knowledge in the field of labour and organisation studies and to learn from recognized scientists from different disciplines. Studying with both national and international students adds a special element to the programme, which I highly appreciate. Studying at the ISHSS within the COLOS masters programme would enable me to develop a strong background of knowledge and improve my English language skills. This would make it possible for me to pursue a career as an advisor for labour organisations.

Considering my qualifications and interests outlined above and in my CV, I very much hope that you will consider me for the COLOS masters programme.

Yours faithfully, (sincerely only if letter addressed to named person, a dear 'sir' etc letter must finish with faithfully.)

Please help me with my Motivation Letter - the deadline is near

Alhd — Mon, 29 Aug 2005 06:18:39 GMT

<>Please, could you help me with my motivation letter?

Just to fill you in, Iâm from Brazil and Iâm applying for an exchange program with German universities. The deadline is 31^st August (this Wednesday), at 23h in Brazil (that is, if I'm not mistaken, 3.00 am in London). I know itâs a little close to the deadline (but Iâve just got to know this forum) so I would greatly appreciate if you could help me. Even if you donât manage to answer soon enough (i.e., you only manage to answer this post after the 31^st), please do answer because I will be able to try another exchange program soon and I want to have a good model. I will be very thankful!

I know that more than one person will read the letter and I donât know who will read this. Also, the letter is to be sent via an Internet form, so I wrote âdear sir or madamâ.

By the way, I have learned that following that phrase should come a comma â,â, but I saw in this forum you suggesting it should be a colon â:â. What should I do?

We are advised to write between 1 and 2 pages â I wrote 1,5 pages, so, although it may seem, it is not too big. People in the past years who have written less than one page were criticized for not having written âenoughâ.

We are evaluated for the letter, CV and grades in the university. If I am approved, I will be called to an interview, which will decide if I will go or not.

I took out my personal details but Iâll post here so that itâll be easier for you to understand.>>

Engenharia MecatrÃ´nica: mechatronical engineering
Aaa: my university
Bbb: another engineering university

Also:
Aaa offers opportunity for students to learn German. And those students, like me, are preferred to enter the program.

By the way, should I sign with my initial, i. e, "J. S." if my name was "John Smith", or should I sign "John Smith" after the "Enthusiastically"?
Other doubt: is it OK to use the "Enthusiastically"?

Thanks to all those who help me.

Now starts the letter:
_______

My city, 28th August 2005.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a third year student of Engenharia MecatrÃ´nica at aaa. Since I am interested in mechanical engineering and Germany is considered a reference country in that field, I am writing to apply for the Graduation Exchange with German Universities.

At the end of 2002 I have enrolled in two entrance exams (Vestibulares): one for Aaa and another for bbb, the latter being known for having the most difficult entrance exam in Engineering among the Brazilian ones. Having passed both exams, I started attending classes at BBB, as they started one month earlier. I lived on my own in BBBâs accommodations for this month, but decided at last to move to Aaa. Among the reasons, at Aaa I would have the opportunity to enter an exchange program. Then, at the end of 2004, I started the German classes offered by Aaa in order to be able to take part in this program.

The reasons for me to have chosen this exchange are many. Firstly, I want to further improve my strong technical skills, which can be achieved by studying in Germany, a country worldwide known for having very good Engineering Universities and Industries in mechanical engineering. Secondly, we live in a very dynamic world, which requires flexibility and creativity, and, in these modern times of Globalization and the Internet, it is also important for people to get in touch with other languages and cultures, not to mention networking. On an exchange program, I will meet different kinds of people and cultures that will give me different points of view, hence contributing for flexibility and creativity, besides the cultural gains. Thirdly, it is crucial to have a deep and solid education in order to solve the most diverse types of technical problems, to be able to pass on ideas, and to have a critical understanding of problems and solutions. This solid education will be certainly obtained through the analytical and abstraction abilities gained while attending classes in the exchange program, as qualities that are generally associated with German people are Methodology, Logical Reasoning and Abstraction Abilities. Last but not least, by entering this program, it will be easier to enter German and multinational enterprises, as the German Universities are reputable.

Moreover, I will be able to achieve personal development by dealing with some of my shortcomings and improving some of my qualities. One of the flaws I intend to handle is that I should learn to pay attention to what other people say, as this is something I sometimes fail to do. As I will be in a place with a different culture and language, I will need to pay more attention to the others, as they will be able to help me in the little problems I shall have. Besides that, when I was studying at BBB, living in another town, I improved my self-knowledge and learned to live independently. This time, in a longer experience and now that I am older, my personal gains will be much higher. Among the qualities I want to develop are Persistence and Responsibility. I already am persistent and responsible as I finish activities I have started, struggle for the things I want and rarely give up. Even then, there is always room for improvement and studying in Germany will be of great importance to improve myself as I will be living on my own, face adverse situations, make decisions for which I will be held responsible, and I will experience freedom that, combined with responsibility, will provide personal development.

I have always liked Engineering. I like problem solving and figuring things out. When younger, I used to take toys apart and then put them together again to understand how they worked. Nowadays I still like fixing broken things. I have always done well in math and sciences since these subjects fascinate me. Besides that, I am curious and have initiative, and I used to do chemical experiments on my own. I also played a lot of sports as a kid. I learned the values of teamwork, how to create strategies, how to work hard, how to focus and concentrate, and how to balance my time and priorities. In addition, communication and languages are two areas of knowledge that attract me. I now speak seven languages and do not want to stop learning new ones. The reason why I chose Engenharia MecatrÃ´nica is because I have always had a special fascination for robots, mechanical devices and electronics and I have always liked building things and creating devices, specially those that were similar to simple robots, for example, I created a presence alarm and I motorized a car when I was younger. After I graduate, I intend to pursue my career in Engineering and work as a Project Engineer in a multinational automation or mechanical industry. Then, after some years, I have the intention to do a masterâs in a subject relationed with my future work.

To sum up, I consider my qualifications and interests, as exposed above, to be sufficient to enable me to make a good course at one of the German Universities from the Exchange program and make good use of all the knowledge I gather throughout this program in the future and later career. At the same time, having this opportunity would mean very much to me, as it would be the result of three years of work.

I look forward to your positive response.

Enthusiastically,

alhd