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Re: organize a trip

Mr Wordy — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 23:00:17 GMT

You have problems with spacing around punctuation, and you have spurious double spaces in a number of places. I have corrected these below.

The other changes that I made to the date formats are not because what you had was wrong, but just to make them all consistent.

Dear colleagues,

This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees to Mui Ne Beach, about 200 km ~~away~~ ["away" is not necessarily wrong, but I think the sentence reads better without it] from the city center. Those who would like to join the trip should register with Miss Perry by February 15, 2008.

The trip is scheduled to leave for Mui Ne Beach [comma deleted] on July 15, 2008 and ~~come back~~ return ["come back" is not wrong, but I think "return" is better] to the city on March 5, 2008. [The return date is earlier than the departure date!]

Thank you in advance.

Re: punctuation

Mr Wordy — Thu, 12 Jun 2008 22:58:51 GMT

I just spotted a couple of typos (probably), one double space, and a couple of places where I'd use commas.

I was expecting your email, Jane; I am glad to receive it. I have one question though: did you decide on your wedding date? Are you marrying the dashing fellow you were with at our high school reunion a few weeks ago? If that's him, you are a lucky girl. He looked so nice and, on top of that, he looked so gentlemanly. Please let me know the details. Bye.

Proper punctuation in emails is to be commended, and you should punctuate them just as you would any other piece of text. For dashes I often use two hyphens (--), as you have. (Not only are proper dashes a pain to enter, but I'm never entirely confident that they will be rendered correctly in whatever system the recipient is using.)

Many "-ly" words are adverbs, but "gentlemanly" is an adjective. The way you've used it is fine -- just as "he looked so handsome" is fine. What you can't say is something like "he looked at me gentlemanly" (intended to mean "in the manner of a gentleman") because this sentence needs an adverb (as in "he looked at me cautiously").

punctuation

Anonymous — Thu, 12 Jun 2008 22:18:16 GMT

Hi,
Could I be able to use what I call "elaborate" punctuation in emails, like using semicolons and dashes?? Can you correct this?

eg,
I was expecting your email, Jane; I am glad to receive it. I have one question though: did you decide on your wedding date? Are you marrying the dashing fellow you were with at our high shool reunion few weeks ago? If that's him -- you are a lucky girl. He looked so nice and on top of that, he looked so gentlemanly (when and how can we use this "-ly" words??). Please let me know the details. Bye.

Re: can someone please check my job application

Anonymous — Sun, 23 Mar 2008 23:43:55 GMT

Hi All,

Many thanks for replying.I have now amended my application and would really appreciate it if someone could check it for spelling, grammar and punctuation.This application is really important to me and i would appreciate any help at all:

Question 1 - Done

Working with people of different backgrounds, ages, or gender Please describe a situation where you have interacted with people who are different from you in terms of background, age or gender: What was the situation:It seemed a new colleague was having difficulty settling in at work. He chose to sit by himself and appeared reluctant to join in with group activities. What role did you play:During general conversation, he mentioned he is homosexual and finds it difficult interacting with people in case they judge him on his sexuality. I encouraged him to talk to the other colleagues as they were friendly and I drew him into conversations by asking for his opinions and showing an interest in his replies. I made sure that he was fairly treated and was not unconsciously ignored by some members of the team. What happened as a result: He soon became settled and felt comfortable enough to take part in group activities. It has also given him much more confidence in dealing with people. He has now become a valued member of the team and has brought new viewpoints and new skills to the team.QuoteEnd>

Question 2 - Done Please describe a situation where you have had to work closely with others as part of a team: What was the situation:As a team of sales advisors, we are set targets by senior management that we are required to achieve. On this occasion, some team members were absent due to illness, and as a result, our individual target was increased to compensate for the sheared workload. What role did you play:I suggested we have a meeting to examine how best to cope with the additional workloads. I said I would look at sales opportunities to generate leads, as this is one of my strengths, other team members agreed to concentrate on existing customers. I also suggested working late one evening a week, we then discussed who would do each evening and I offered to take the first shift. What happened as a result:The team exceeded the sales target and my manager was so pleased with our efforts that our strategy has been used as an example of good practice for other teams when short staffed. I was praised for setting up the team meetings and my ideas and have learned the benefits of working with team members to solve problems.

Question 3 - Done Please describe a situation where you have taken steps to improve your skills and / or learn new things: What was the situation:I made a decision to start a website design company. I felt confident of my skills and knowledge of website design, but I had limited skills and experience in business marketing and consequently found it difficult establishing a customer base. What role did you play:I researched marketing techniques on the internet and managed to teach myself the basics, but I decided I would benefit from further tuition. I decided to contact my local chamber of commerce who arranged for me to attend a business marketing course. A key marketing techniques I learned was to contact potential customers directly, rather than expecting them to contact me. I decided to contact my local chamber of commerce who arranged for me to attend a business marketing course. I made notes of all suggestions and idea that was discussed. A particular suggestion I liked was to contact potential customers directly, rather than expecting them to contact me. What happened as a result: I contacted a local surveying company to arrange a sales meeting and the result of a successful presentation, I managed to secure a sale. Using my newly acquired skills, I built relationships with new customers and further developed my business. I learned that asking questions is a key element of learning. Question 4 - Done

Please describe a situation where you have had to remain calm and controlled in a stressful situation: What was the situation:Whilst driving home from work at rush hour, I witnessed a cyclist get his front tyre caught in a tram track resulting in him being thrown from his bike. The cyclist had landed in a dangerous position and could potentially be further injured. What role did you play:I pulled my car over to a safe location and I assessed the situation. I managed to stop traffic in both directions with my own safety being of main concern. I phoned for an ambulance and checked the welfare of the man. I was under pressure from inpatient drivers who were sounding their horns and wanted us to move. I blocked this distraction and refused to move the patient to prevent further injury. What happened as a result:Because of my prompt response and refusal to allow anyone to move the man off the road, I prevented any further injury being caused. An ambulance came and took the man away by structure.

Question 5 - Done

Please describe a situation where you have had to work on your own in accordance with guidelines: What was the situation:

During the purchase of my family home, I received a letter from our solicitors stating that a previous loft conversion did not meet current fire regulations. Our solicitor said we can still go ahead with the purchase, providing that relevant alterations are made. What role did you play:The project involved installing a new loft window which required me to research and follow strict guidelines set by the City Council. I was under pressure to complete this project as a surveyor was scheduled to assess the work on a particular date. I found myself working evenings and weekends on my own to compensate for this tight deadline. What happened as a result:

The work passed the evaluation and I now live in the house with my family and in peace of mind that the house is fully compliant with all safety regulations.

Question 6 - Done

Please describe a situation where you have had to change the way you do something following a change imposed by someone in authority: What was the situation:At my current employment, I am required to sell products to customers. A business decision was made to change my job role from inbound sales to outbound sales. What role did you play:I conducted research about my new role by asking people in my organisation who do a similar role for there views and day to day working life. I found that it is more beneficial to contact customers directly and up sell a product that they may not currently be aware of. I adjusted my existing sales techniques to adapt my new job role. I shared my research with sceptical colleagues and I helped them see the benefits of the change. What happened as a result:I was given an opportunity to develop my skills and progress my career. The hand over of job roles was successful and I am now achieving a much bigger volume of sales.

Re: Need help to CORRECT SENTENCE STYLE, WORD CHOICE, GRAMMATICAL SENTENCE and PUNCTUATION ERRORS

Clive — Mon, 11 Feb 2008 19:30:41 GMT

Hi,

CORRECT THE FOLLOWING SENTENCES THAT HAVE SENTENCE STYLE, WORD CHOICE, GRAMMATICAL SENTENCE and PUNCTUATION ERRORS, AND TELL WHAT RULE OF WRITING YOU ARE ADDRESSING. (The first one is done for you.)

1. Police dogs are used for finding lost children, tracking criminals, and the detection of bombs and illegal drugs. detecting (parallel structure)

2. It is easier to sustain an exercise program than starting one. . . . than to start one. (not parallel)

3. The old Marlboro ads depicted a man on a horse smoking a cigarette. (the horse was not smoking. )
The old Marlboro ads depicted a man smoking a cigarette on a horse.

The old Marlboro ads depicted a man on a horse, smoking a cigarette. (adding a comma would be OK, too.)

Maybe call it an incorrectly paced modifier?

4. Dyslexia is ~~when people have~~ a learning disorder that impairs reading ability.This seems reasonably acceptable to me. But 'when people have' is probably redundant.

5. The first basic, important, essential law that governs the field of economics is self-interest. (Redundancies)

6. A strange sound was made in the willow tree by the monkey that had escaped from the zoo. This seems reasonably acceptable to me. 'Had' may not be necessary, depending on the context. A more active form is better style, ie The monkey made a strange sound in the willow tree after it escaped from the zoo.

The monkey escaped from the zoo and is in the willow tree making a strange sound. No, you are putting the 'making' into the present, but the original does not do this.

7. Passengers should endeavor to finalize the customs declaration form prior to exiting the aircraft. complete (Appropriate/pretentious language)

8. Many people take for granite that public libraries half up-to-date networked computer systems. granted; have (?)

9. Shelters for teenage runaways (offer/offers) a wide variety of services.

10. Our church has all the latest technology, ~~even~~ a close-circuit television. including (?)

11. Every presidential candidate must appeal to a wide variety of ethnic and social groups if ~~they~~ he or she wants to win the election.

12. Listening to the CD her sister had sent her, Mia was overcome with a mix of emotions: happiness, homesickness and nostalgia.

~~Mia was overcome with a mix of emotions: happiness, homesickness, and nostalgia, as she listened to the CD her sister had sent her.~~

13. Wind power for the home is a supplementary source of energy, it can be combined with electricity, gas, or solar energy.

~~A supplemental source of energy for the home is wind power; it can be combined with electricity, gas, or solar energy.~~
Wind power is a supplementary source of energy for the home, which can be combined with electricity, gas or solar energy.

14. Although she was not in combat, Mary Walker, then in her (thirties / thirtyâs), served in the Union army. She became the first woman to receive the Medal of Honor, the (militaryâs/ militarysâ) highest-ranking medal. She fought for a constitutional amendment to allow women to vote. Congress finally passed the Nineteenth Amendment in 1920. Unfortunately, Mary Walker died before (its / itâs) adoption.

Thirty year old Mary Walker served in the Union Army, but she was never in combat. She was the first woman to receive the militaryâs highest ranking Medal of Honor. She fought for a constitutional amendment to allow women to vote. Unfortunately, Mary Walker died before Congress passed the Nineteenth Amendment in 1920.

In her thirties, Mary Walker served in the Union Army, although not in combat. She became the first woman to receive the Medal of Honor, the (militaryâs/ militarysâ) highest-ranking medal. In addition, she fought for a constitutional amendment to allow women to vote, which was finally passed by Congress in 1920 as the Nineteenth Amendment. Unfortunately, Mary Walker died before (its / itâs) adoption.

Any help will be appriciated!

Best wishes, Clive

Need help to CORRECT SENTENCE STYLE, WORD CHOICE, GRAMMATICAL SENTENCE and PUNCTUATION ERRORS

Anonymous — Mon, 11 Feb 2008 18:30:10 GMT

1. Police dogs are used for finding lost children, tracking criminals, and the detection of bombs and illegal drugs. detecting (parallel structure)

2. It is easier to sustain an exercise program than starting one.

3. The old Marlboro ads depicted a man on a horse smoking a cigarette. (

4. Dyslexia is when people have a learning disorder that impairs reading ability.

5. The first basic, important, essential law that governs the field of economics is self-interest. (Redundancies)

6. A strange sound was made in the willow tree by the monkey that had escaped from the zoo.

The monkey escaped from the zoo and is in the willow tree making a strange sound.

7. Passengers should endeavor to finalize the customs declaration form prior to exiting the aircraft. complete (Appropriate/pretentious language)

8. Many people take for granite that public libraries half up-to-date networked computer systems. granted; have (?)

9. Shelters for teenage runaways (offer/offers) a wide variety of services.

10. Our church has all the latest technology, ~~even~~ a close-circuit television. including (?)

11. Every presidential candidate must appeal to a wide variety of ethnic and social groups if they want to win the election.

12. Listening to the CD her sister had sent her, Mia was overcome with a mix of emotions. Happiness, homesickness, nostalgia.

Mia was overcome with a mix of emotions: happiness, homesickness, and nostalgia, as she listened to the CD her sister had sent her.

13. Wind power for the home is a supplementary source of energy, it can be combined with electricity, gas, or solar energy.

A supplemental source of energy for the home is wind power; it can be combined with electricity, gas, or solar energy.

Re: Can someone check my abstract for grammar and punctuation

Feebs11 — Mon, 17 Dec 2007 19:57:44 GMT

Anonymous wrote:
Hello. I am a danish student writing a big paper about babylonian mathematic and the first page has to be an abstract in english.
So i would really like if someone would check from grammar, punctuation, phrases or words which should be changed. Every help and criticism is appreciated. The words in brackets is because I would like to know which one to use.

Our first knowledge of mankindâs use of mathematics dates back to the Babylonians, a ~~cultural~~ cultured nation occupying southeastern Mesopotamia. Most people only know of the Babylonians because of the legendary Hanging Gardens of Babylon and the Tower of Babel but the Babylonians are also considered the developers of algebraic methods of solving equations. Numerous clay tablets, which clearly indicate that the Babylonians had a solid knowledge of almost all aspects of elementary arithmetic, have been excavated. This paper will explain how the Babylonian numeral system, known as the sexagesimal system, functioned. It will also examine the history behind the origin of the system and how it was used to carry out advanced mathematical calculations, in particularly quadratic equations. ~~A scrutinization~~ Scrutiny of some of the problems from ~~the~~ tablet BM 13901 ~~will be adduced along~~ (in conjunction? or "together" - both will fit) with a comparison of modern mathematical methods~~, to see~~ will show how the Babylonian techniques (procedures, methods?) can be related ~~(associated)~~ to those we use today. As the studies will show, the Babylonians were extremely skilled ~~(experienced?)~~ in solving a wide range of mathematical problems, which helped them to establish an ~~excessively~~ extremely/exceedingly efficient civilization. For example, the Babylonians used their skills in mathematics to achieve maximum productivity when digging canals, something they were very famous ~~(well-known?)~~ for. Even though we today make use of a base-10 numeral system, we still see the legacy of their base-60 system in the form of degrees, minutes, and seconds in trigonometry. The abacus is also an invention of the Babylonians, ~~which was made~~ developed as a calculating tool to aid their merchants.

Can someone check my abstract for grammar and punctuation

Anonymous — Mon, 17 Dec 2007 04:07:35 GMT

Hello. I am a danish student writing a big paper about babylonian mathematic and the first page has to be an abstract in english.
So i would really like if someone would check from grammar, punctuation, phrases or words which should be changed. Every help and criticism is appreciated. The words in brackets is because I would like to know which one to use.

Our first knowledge we have regarding mankindâs use of mathematics date back to the Babylonians, a cultural nation occupying southeastern Mesopotamia. Most people only know Babylonian because of the legendary Hanging Gardens of Babylon and the Tower of Babel but the Babylonians is also considered the developers of algebraic methods of solving equations. Numerous clay tablets, which clearly indicate that the Babylonians had a solid knowledge of almost all aspects of elementary arithmetic, have been excavated. This paper will explain how the Babylonian numeral system, known as the sexagesimal system, functioned. It will also examine the history behind the origin of the system and how it was used to carry out advanced mathematical calculations, in particularly quadratic equations. A scrutinization of some of the problems from the tablet BM 13901 will be adduced along (in conjunction?) with a comparison of modern mathematic, to see how the Babylonian techniques (procedures, methods?) can be related (associated) to those we use today. As the studies will show, the Babylonians were extremely skilled (experienced?) in solving a wide range of mathematical problems, which helped them to establish an excessively efficient civilization. For example, the Babylonians used their skills in mathematic to achieve maximum productivity when digging canals, something they were very famous (well-known?) for. Even though we today make use of a base-10 numeral system, we still see the legacy of their base-60 system in the form of degrees, minutes, and seconds in trigonometry. The abacus is also an invention of the Babylonians, which was made as a calculating tool in aid of their merchants.

Re: dates

Feebs11 — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 12:42:17 GMT

You do not need to spell out dates in this context: October 7, 2007 OR 7 October 2007 is fine.

With large numbers, the punctuation is:

1000
10,000
100,000
1,000,000

So your number would appear as: 1,000,345 [one million, three hundred and forty-five]

Re: These / Those

Philip — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 05:26:46 GMT

Zenguo wrote:
Thanks for that, so can I say like the following way "At this point, I have updated the excel sheet and divided it into three parts, for those which already have an IP address, I will update or insert the IP's into our database. I will remove those which have not been physically installed."

Correct use of 'those'. (There are some punctuation concerns here, but that isn't your question, so I will leave them.)