Please correct my essay for grammar and punctuation. Smoking in public Seeing people smoke is disgusting. It is common to drive by any place of business and see the employees enjoying a cigarette. To non-smokers this is a slight victory after

it's my second draft. please give me any advice. i want it to be natural to read. expression,grammar(especially, pronoun is difficult), punctuation marks etc.. this is my first trial of english composition.