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Re: This is my first writing. Please help check my writing.

Skrej — Sat, 05 Jul 2008 23:12:04 GMT

Hi Neung,

I've made some corrections to your essay. Any corrections I made are now in red letters. If you have any questions about what I mean, or would like a more detailed explanation on why something was incorrect, please ask. We'll try to answer.

Anonymous

My name is Jeerapun Khunsopa and My (don't capitalize 'my') nickname is Nueng. I 'm 22 years old. I was born in Suphan Buri province and move (should be 'moved', since it's in the past) to Bangkok, ~~this is~~ (remove the words 'this is', and add a comma after Bangkok) a big city, (add another comma) with my family when I was nine years old. I graduated from Bangkapi school of fishing. My favorite websites are Google, Yahoo! <... some URLs removed by a mod.> I enjoy visiting tourists attractions and traveling. I also enjoy reading, going to movies and watching TV. I'm very interested in politics. I am following the presidential race in my county. I'm also interested in the global warming crisis and alternative sources of energy, such as solar and wind power. My dream job would be to run a successful Internet company that helped people. I have visited Cambodia,Cannada, (correct spelling is 'Canada', with only 1 'n') Hong kong, (capitalize 'k' in 'Kong') Laos and Mexico. I went to Chiang Mai on my last vacation. It was great! ~~and~~ (remove the word 'and' to avoid a sentence fragment) I do not have any pets, but I wish that I had a dog. My house does not allow pets. I have two brothers and one sister. If I won a million Baht, I would travel around the world. I would really like to visit Japan. My hight (correct spelling is 'height) is 173 and My weight is 64. My blood type is B and My (don't capitalize 'my') hobbies is ('hobbies' is plural, you need the plural verb 'are' instead) Listen (this should be 'listening' instead of 'listen, and don't capitalize it) to the radio, and (since there are only 2 hobbies, remove the comma and add the word 'and') read (this should be 'reading' instead of 'read') catoon. My address is Bangkapi

Neung, I think this was very good work for your first writting attempt. You did have a few very minor mistakes, but you still did quite well.

One more thing to remember, is that when you're typing things on the Internet, always put 2 spaces after a sentence, instead of one, to make them easier to read. This is a very minor thing, but it does make all writing a little easier to read, (even if it's written correctly!)

Can someone tell me if my commas are correct in my essay?

basic2008 — Sun, 29 Jun 2008 13:39:44 GMT

There are two great cliffs located at Lake Nichols Landing in Tuscaloosa. They both can be found just off the winding footpath, through the wooded area as you get to the clearing. Many people do not know the exact location of these cliffs because there arenât any posted signs or visible indication that there are cliffs there. For that very reason, the cliffs are never crowded. A beautiful nature scene greets people as they arrive. Both cliffs share impressive views that skim the horizon, and a calming pool of water, deep enough for jumping, rests at its feet. Despite these similarities, each cliff is quite different.
    To begin with, access to the cliffs can be challenging. The first cliff is directly up a gently sloped hill and is easily accessible. After arriving at the clearing, a person can see the first cliff within minutes. It is a short hike up the straight trail and left at the weather-worn oak tree. In contrast, the other cliff is not as easily accessible, and its view is hidden from unaware people passing by.   One might say that it is a hikerâs delight. A person has to hike farther up the rock-strewn hill, through the dense woods, until they reach a narrow trail. The trail then winds for a good five to seven minutes until they finally reach a patch of brush. The other cliff is just past the dead patch and is a larger well-shaded area that is more secluded than the first cliff.
    Admittedly, jumping off the high cliffs are dangerous, but the drop-off distances appeal to enthusiasts on many levels. Many thrill seekers are still keen on tempting their fate and taking the leap. The first cliff has a 20-foot drop to get to the water. People prefer to jump from this cliff because jumping 20-feet doesnât seem so daunting. A daring individual will stand at the edge of the cliff without being intimidated. There are no obstacles to interfere with the jump, and it is a clean shot to the cool water. Alternatively, the other cliff is much higher with a 30-foot drop. Many people tend to stay away from this cliff because of how high it is. It takes either a very courageous, or a very frivolous, individual to launch themselves off a 30-foot cliff into thin air. They must take a deep breath and a running start to avoid the jagged rocks and trees below. Clearly, this cliff is the more dangerous of the two.
    Lastly, climbing out of the water is not the easiest of tasks. If jumping off the first cliff, a person needs to climb out of the water on the left side of the natural stone. The dirt path is not a difficult climb and is soft on the feet. The smooth rock steps are well formed and easily spotted due to many visitors trampling up and down the route. Consequently, climbing out of the water from the other cliff may require a bit more exertion. A person has to repel up a small overgrown rock trail, while grasping at young branches and trees for support. They trek through a heavily wooded area and murky water. Even on the brightest of days, the soggy path seems dark and damp. It is like walking barefooted through patches of thick mud and leaves. If a person is not careful, they could easily slip on the slimy rocks or even worse â encounter bugs or snakes! It actually is very scary.
    On a final note, the cliffs at Lake Nichols may differ in many ways, but nevertheless, their similarities have one goal in common: to be there for everyone to enjoy. Whichever cliffs people choose, they should be aware that both cliffs have rewards and risks. It all depends on what type of adventure they are looking for.

will someone proofread my essay? need by monday

basic2008 — Sun, 29 Jun 2008 05:14:02 GMT

I just finished a compare and contrast essay and I do not trust my grammar. I do not know if my commas are in the right place and I do not trust my spell check on my computer.

Many thanks!

   There are two great cliffs located at Lake Nichols Landing in Tuscaloosa. They both can be found just off the winding footpath, through the wooded area as you get to the clearing. Many people do not know the exact location of these cliffs because there arenât any posted signs or visible indication that there are cliffs there. For that very reason, the cliffs are never crowded. A beautiful nature scene greets people as they arrive. Both cliffs share impressive views that skim the horizon, and a calming pool of water, deep enough for jumping, rests at its feet. Despite these similarities, each cliff is quite different.
    To begin with, access to the cliffs can be challenging. The first cliff is directly up a gently sloped hill and is easily accessible. After arriving at the clearing, a person can see the first cliff within minutes. It is a short hike up the straight trail and left at the weather-worn oak tree. In contrast, the other cliff is not as easily accessible, and its view is hidden from unaware people passing by.   One might say that it is a hikerâs delight. A person has to hike farther up the rock-strewn hill, through the dense woods, until they reach a narrow trail. The trail then winds for a good five to seven minutes until they finally reach a patch of brush. The other cliff is just past the dead patch and is a larger well-shaded area that is more secluded than the first cliff.
    Admittedly, jumping off the high cliffs are dangerous, but the drop-off distances appeal to enthusiasts on many levels. Many thrill seekers are still keen on tempting their fate and taking the leap. The first cliff has a 20-foot drop to get to the water. People prefer to jump from this cliff because jumping 20-feet doesnât seem so daunting. A daring individual will stand at the edge of the cliff without being intimidated. There are no obstacles to interfere with the jump, and it is a clean shot to the cool water. Alternatively, the other cliff is much higher with a 30-foot drop. Many people tend to stay away from this cliff because of how high it is. It takes either a very courageous, or a very frivolous, individual to launch themselves off a 30-foot cliff into thin air. They must take a deep breath and a running start to avoid the jagged rocks and trees below. Clearly, this cliff is the more dangerous of the two.
    Lastly, climbing out of the water is not the easiest of tasks. If jumping off the first cliff, a person needs to climb out of the water on the left side of the natural stone. The dirt path is not a difficult climb and is soft on the feet. The smooth rock steps are well formed and easily spotted due to many visitors trampling up and down the route. Consequently, climbing out of the water from the other cliff may require a bit more exertion. A person has to repel up a small overgrown rock trail, while grasping at young branches and trees for support. They trek through a heavily wooded area and murky water. Even on the brightest of days, the soggy path seems dark and damp. It is like walking barefooted through patches of thick mud and leaves. If a person is not careful, they could easily slip on the slimy rocks or even worse â encounter bugs or snakes! It actually is very scary.
    On a final note, the cliffs at Lake Nichols may differ in many ways, but nevertheless, their similarities have one goal in common: to be there for everyone to enjoy. Whichever cliffs people choose, they should be aware that both cliffs have rewards and risks. It all depends on what type of adventure they are looking for.

Re: Correct my Compare and Contrast Essay please (Only Intro and Conclusio

RonBee — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 00:28:30 GMT

Re:
     While, Jobs was awarded the National Medal of Technology and was introduced into the California Hall of Fame (Beetz, n.d.), Gates was named CEO of the year (Petechuk, n.d.) and was honored with the KBE Order (Knight Commander of the Most Excellent Order of the British Empire) (Woopidoo, n.d.).

You shouldn't have a comma after While. On the other hand, it shouldn't be there in the first place. Instead, say:
    Jobs was awarded the National Medal of Technology and was introduced into the California Hall of Fame (Beetz, n.d.), and Gates was named CEO of the year (Petechuk, n.d.) and was honored with the KBE Order (Knight Commander of the Most Excellent Order of the British Empire) (Woopidoo, n.d.).

Try:
     Despite the marked similarities between them, both men are very different in many aspects: family background, education, and personality.

Try:

Many people would like to be as successful as Steven Jobs and Bill Gates, but how can it be done?

Try:
For centuries, philosophers and sociologists have tried to find an answer but have been unable to do so. This might be because the one who knows the answer best is the one who asks it. Take a minute and carefully consider it. No matter what your answer is, one truth is that you can't change the wind, but you can adjust your sails.

Re: Please check for me this discursive essay !

Grammar Geek — Tue, 29 Apr 2008 13:01:14 GMT

Hello redneon,
Highlights show potential problems. Remember to leave a space after a period or comma. English-speaking country, with a hyphen. You need some articles here and there.

Topic: Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying English in an English-speaking country

Bilions of people around the world study English as their foreign language. Many of them attribute a fluent English learner to living in an English speaking country, whereas others believe that there are many obstacles when studying overseas. Therefore,this essay will discuss about the benefits and negatives of studying English in an English-speaking country.

The first argument in favor of studying English in an English-speaking country is that students can enhance all their English skills with the support of good facilities. Firstly, surrounding environment with full-time speaking English wherever students go may help them improve speaking and listening dramatically. Furthermore, they have enormous oppotunities to approach a new culture and the modern living style in most English speaking countries. Those lead to the deeper understanding in English and indirectly make students' reading and writing skills become better. In brief, English skills will rise up when students live in an English speaking country.

Although there are some advantages, studying English in an English speaking country still have some disadvantages.

The primary negative for studying English in an English speaking country is that there are various obstacles when living alone in the new country. Many students who have not left their home before feel shocked with the new culture and they usually find difficult to live independently because of the lack of family support. --That was a very well-written sentence! In addition, most English speaking countries are developed. As a consequence, many students may encounter with the lure of the fashionable and luxurious society and they plunge themselves into that society without concious thinking. This needs a bit of development. Are you saying that will fall into the hedonistic lifestyle of the decadent Americans? What are the real dangers you're talking about?

Another disadvantage of studying English in an English speaking country is the financial problems. Living overseas for many years in order to studying may cost a large amount of money. For example, the aggregate of living cost and tuition fees for one year study in Australia may cost around 30,000 dollars. Moreover, the cost can increase each year as a result of inflation all over the world and that can be a burden for students' family finance.

In conclusion, this essay has identified both positive and negative aspects of studying English in an English speaking country. Despite the advantages to improve all English skills, it still have a pressure for students and their family. Consequently, students should think carefully about studying overseas to make sure that they can adapt easily to new environment. You list only "adapt" but you mention the financial aspect too. I think you should add something about that to your final sentence.

Re: My short essay [need a basic check]

Anonymous — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 22:14:36 GMT

Heavy traffic is one of the biggest problems in our days. There were endless arguments made about solutions so far, but none of them has brought results. While few people suggest banning traffic from towns and city centers, others are against this idea.

In my opinion, banning private transport such as cars and motorcycles from the city centers is in theory, [this was added because you make it sound as if banning traffic was the only good idea where in the second paragraph, you list the other side] a good idea [no comma here] because there would not be any congestions anymore. What is more, people and tourists would have safe pedestrian-only zones, so it would help to attract more tourists to visit our city monuments. [Of course, distances are quite long, so deliveries and public transport should be allowed.] This sentence contradicts the rest of your paragraph. I have made changes to the first sentence that incorperates this sentence.

On the other hand, this solution is quite inconvenient and it would take a lot of time to make it popular with people. Instead, I believe that there are some alternative solutions such as charging cars for driving into the city centers. Incoming money could be used to create more car parks [is it a lack of car parks that creates traffic or too many vehicles on the road at once?]. Also cars could be allowed only on alternate days.

To summarise, banning private transport from our citiesâ centres could cause even more inconveniece than it is worth. Thatâs why I personally think that traffic should be reduced only in particular days and during the cities fiests a small charge should be taken. In my opinion it could help to reduce the heavy traffic problem.

[Overall, very well written. I love how you alternate your beginings (of the sentences). That makes the paragraph so much more interesting to read and all the more worthwhile. Keep it up! =D]

Re: Please help me with two grammar points.

Clive — Fri, 11 Apr 2008 21:01:15 GMT

Hi,

Which of the following sentences are correct?

1) The essay ends abruptly without your description on/of your efforts to achieve your vision.

Which preposition is suitable here? Of.

2) There is one or two comma errors in the essay.

Should I replace is with are here? Yes.

Best wishes, Clive

Please help me with two grammar points.

Sooris — Fri, 11 Apr 2008 17:32:01 GMT

Please help me choose the right answers.

Which of the following sentences are correct?

1) The essay ends abruptly without your description on/of your efforts to achieve your vision.

Which preposition is suitable here?

2) There is one or two comma errors in the essay.

Should I replace is with are here?

Kindly reply,

Sureshbabu

Re: Please help me with this paragraph

Mister Micawber — Fri, 14 Mar 2008 03:06:00 GMT

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I have underlined some problem areas. You have not proofread your essay very carefully. Leave a space after commas:

The several things that annoying me is people keep asking about yourlife, such as love life, lifestyle, general, ect. I hate people ask thosequestion it so irritate me. They should know people dont like to sharetheir privacy to other people they didn't know. As for me tehy shouldrepect other privacy. Another technique is when i have a bad hair day.That thing is so annoying me.i hated my hair when it dried and oily.Im sure every girl has a bad hair day.It embarrasing and uncomfortablewhen you have a bad hair day in school or in work. Being lazy is alsoannoying me. I hate to see people lazy not doing anything and they justsit there for other do for them. The last thing is something slowly,such as loading, drive slow, doing slowly ,ect. For example when idownload something in my computer,it said it take 10 to 15 minutes,butsometimes it take like half an hour. I know people have different thingto annoying. i will try my best to control my patience of those things.

Re: help with corrections

Grammar Geek — Tue, 11 Mar 2008 18:13:23 GMT

You need to break your essay down into paragraphs.

Your first "sentence" is missing a verb.

You need commas here and there. For example: Even though it may be a comedy, it does have the human elements that we all go through every day of our lives.