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Re: Please check for me this discursive essay !

Grammar Geek — Tue, 29 Apr 2008 13:01:14 GMT

Hello redneon,
Highlights show potential problems. Remember to leave a space after a period or comma. English-speaking country, with a hyphen. You need some articles here and there.

Topic: Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying English in an English-speaking country

Bilions of people around the world study English as their foreign language. Many of them attribute a fluent English learner to living in an English speaking country, whereas others believe that there are many obstacles when studying overseas. Therefore,this essay will discuss about the benefits and negatives of studying English in an English-speaking country.

The first argument in favor of studying English in an English-speaking country is that students can enhance all their English skills with the support of good facilities. Firstly, surrounding environment with full-time speaking English wherever students go may help them improve speaking and listening dramatically. Furthermore, they have enormous oppotunities to approach a new culture and the modern living style in most English speaking countries. Those lead to the deeper understanding in English and indirectly make students' reading and writing skills become better. In brief, English skills will rise up when students live in an English speaking country.

Although there are some advantages, studying English in an English speaking country still have some disadvantages.

The primary negative for studying English in an English speaking country is that there are various obstacles when living alone in the new country. Many students who have not left their home before feel shocked with the new culture and they usually find difficult to live independently because of the lack of family support. --That was a very well-written sentence! In addition, most English speaking countries are developed. As a consequence, many students may encounter with the lure of the fashionable and luxurious society and they plunge themselves into that society without concious thinking. This needs a bit of development. Are you saying that will fall into the hedonistic lifestyle of the decadent Americans? What are the real dangers you're talking about?

Another disadvantage of studying English in an English speaking country is the financial problems. Living overseas for many years in order to studying may cost a large amount of money. For example, the aggregate of living cost and tuition fees for one year study in Australia may cost around 30,000 dollars. Moreover, the cost can increase each year as a result of inflation all over the world and that can be a burden for students' family finance.

In conclusion, this essay has identified both positive and negative aspects of studying English in an English speaking country. Despite the advantages to improve all English skills, it still have a pressure for students and their family. Consequently, students should think carefully about studying overseas to make sure that they can adapt easily to new environment. You list only "adapt" but you mention the financial aspect too. I think you should add something about that to your final sentence.

Re: hyphens, dashes etc.

Tanit — Wed, 15 Nov 2006 18:46:42 GMT

Nona The Brit wrote:

They are quite long with complex structures, so they are only suitable for a formal context.

Thank you, Nona. These are two paragraphs for a PG essay I'm writing, so I think a formal register is appropriate.

Mister Micawber wrote:

3-- the South Korean GDP
no comma after dramatically changed
no the after Despite
so-called is hyphenated
I would capitalize Tigers
I like the period outside the quotation marks: 'Asian Tigers'.

Thank you, too, MM. I've put your corrections into my essay ... except the last one! Even though I agree with you (and it also would be more natural for me, since this is how I'd write it in my own language !), this is how they want us to write here.

Re: Evaluative/Review Essay-Please help!

Castellano — Mon, 23 Oct 2006 00:46:23 GMT

Extreme Makeover: Home Edition is a (truly is a hollow adjective here) superb reality show that first aired on December 3, 2003. Each 60 minute episode features a team of designers, contractors and several hundred workers who must race against time: (you could subsititute the colon with a semicolon or a hyphen if you want) they only have a week to rebuild a house, a task that would normally take 4 months to do. Each episode begins with host Ty Pennington's famous "Good morning!" wake-up call, when he, along with the other designers surprise the unsuspecting family that their home would be redesigned. The families then get to go on a seven day vacation until the renovation has completed. When the family returns from their vacation in a tinted limo, they see a bus blocking their view of their new home. Now, Ty and the family tell the bus driver to âmove that bus!" so the family can be amazed at the renovation. The show ends when Ty gives the keys to this lucky family.

(Start a new paragraph here because you are talking about something new.) Extreme Makeover: Home Edition a winner of two Emmy Awards as Best Reality Program (non-competitive), is entering its 4th season on ABC and is watched by millions. In its second season, it was one of the ten most popular shows on American television but it has become less popular now. The show is a by-product of Extreme Makeover; provides medical operations, weight loss programs and other beauty help to people who want to look better. Both programs are produced by Endemol USA, a division of Endemol Holding. (I am confused by the bold sentenecs. Are you trying to say that the Home Edition of Extreme Makeover also provides medical operations, weight loss programs, etc... ?)

The show has helped a rainbow of families, those who have financial problems, and those who have lost loved ones. (Could you possibly say from what these people have unfortunately died?) Evidently, families benefit enormously from this show. They have a new lease on life and are given that second chance that many of us are not fortunate enough to receive. (I don't think this is what you mean, perhaps you should write that their homes are now much more elegant, etc...) But are all problems solved after receiving such a gift? What would studies show post-Extreme Makeover: Home Edition? Are the creators of Extreme Makeover: Home Edition applying the golden rule or are they endorsing tax evasion?

Notes:

- Alert: you are introducing ideas and thoughts in your last paragraph. The last paragraph must merely restate your thesis and arguments, it must not introduce anything new, at all! You have some excellent arguments against the show, but you need to put the arguments in the beginning of your critical essay, not at the end. This I won't do for you, try it yourself!

- Your essay is quite informative; I wouldn't consider it technical. If you want your essay to flow more smoothly, proofread the sentences yourself and change accordingly. Make sure you write good sentences, which should reiterate information and should introduce new information to the reader. Further, don't introduce things too quickly or too abruptly, or you will wind up with choppy sentences.

Remember to come back if you need more proofreading and help! Very good start!

Should I do away with 'is'?

EnglishNoGood — Mon, 26 Sep 2005 15:01:11 GMT

Hello Guys,

I am new here. I would appreciate your help in assisting me to improve my english. Here is an excerpt of my short essay:

" Cesar Pelli (b.1926) [ , ] or [ is ] a widely acclaimed American architects known for designing some of the tallest buildings in the world. He is also the architect of the worldâs tallest twin towers [ â ] the Petronas Towers in Kuala Lumpur. Rising 452 metres, the Petronas Twin Tower is Malaysiaâs most significant urban landmark. In 2004, the Petronas Twin Tower has been named as one of the seven winners of the Aga Khan award for architecture. "

Should I do away with the 'is' and replace it with comma? Is the hyphen sign appropriately used in this context?

Thank you. I look forward to your comment.

Regards,

EnglishNoGood

Re: I am rusty after 25 years. I need essay(argument) correction

Mister Micawber — Thu, 14 Jul 2005 14:36:00 GMT

This is generally fine. There are a few things that need repair:

learning it (comma)
gang related (hyphen)
hips allowing (comma)
shirt and (comma)
where the focus is (delete all except 'focus')
News âA (punctuate or restructure the clause)
comment, (no comma here or at the other end)
show (shows)
styles that accentuates
code there (comma)
child sense
Parents would find most parents (huh??)
the cage with a lion (a lion's cage)
means, to (no comma)
decisions, about (no comma)
decisions of (on)
by ways of
students choice (apostrophe)
based own
on by studying
what is issue (a misquote?)
if the decision of what to wear to school was cut (were)
Stated on BlueSuitMom.com... (this sentence is not a sentence)
peer approved (hyphen)
defiantly (wrong word)
out weigh (one word)
in who has the best clothes (of who-- and add a comma)
be able to focus (delete all except 'focus')
students (apostrophe)
TheEducation
Beach California comma)
uniforms since (semicolon)
percent; (comma)

Hyphens?!

Guest — Sat, 19 Jun 2004 23:10:54 GMT

Hi,

I want to use the phrase "crayon-scrawled thank-you notes" in an essay. Are both hyphens correct?

Thank you!