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IELTS practice- please comment on my poor essay!

Anonymous — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 12:11:32 GMT

Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist
audience on the following topic.

The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom of movement. Moreover,the automobile has become a status symbol.
Yet the use of private motor vehivles has contributed to some od today's most serious problems.

How can the use of private motor vehicles be reduced?

You should write at least 250 words.

To reduce the usage of private motor vehicles, I think promotion of the usage of train and political plan to make train/bus friendly town are necessary.

The average life style of the people lives in country side has changed from my childhood. I live in the middle population city and near the station. My neighborhood used to be so crowded with the people who come to shopping and eating, it was sometimes even difficult to walk though the main street because of the crowed. However, things has changed a lot since then, the main street is not crowded anymore and able to go though by bicycle, not the few shops closed and the shutter never opened again, which makes the street less attractive. People moved to a big shopping mole with large parking space for shopping and dinning out. Once they obtained private vehicle, they go where parking fee is free and easy to drive to. Even the public hospital, library has moved to out side of city centre, sometimes unable to reach there by train, which helped the motor vehicle society progress.

It is, for some reason, feels uncomfortable to say I do not own a car to someone. First time I drove to Kobe by myself with friend, I felt like I am an adult, car was like a wing to me because I thought I can go anywhere I want to. I do not deny the convenience and advantages of the car but this is one of the cause of global warming, city congestion, and air pollution.

If the car owner calculate the whole fee for fuel, insurance, parking, vehicle body and compensatory payment from the accident you killed someone, this might be the best way to reduce the private car usage.

Correction of an Essay

learner_of_english — Tue, 22 Apr 2008 21:05:57 GMT

Through History, weâve seen that American people are proud and want to manage the world. Meanwhile, French people know how to live and they have a more collectivism mentality. According to several studies, the US is a more âmasculineâ country than France. Weâre about to study if this is a reality or not.

1Â°/ First, we can compare educational values between these two countries.

The American people educational values are rather funded on individualism.

Each person must show his value to be recognized, the merit is more important than the link formed (relationship) with others. Pupils and students have to be independent, self-confident, their teacher assists them in work but they donât give solutions. They also have to be competitive.

For instance, intercollegiate sporting events are promoted in American football and basketball. These competitions attract not only young people but all sport fans.

In France, educational values are rather funded on collectivism.

The ties between people are privileged, it doesnât matter if a person undergoes many failures his family and his friends will always support him. Devotion in relationships is essential because people donât stand to be alone.

As students, weâre used to partying several times by week, we enter in student associations to share our ideals with others and we think that is the victory of groups which is the more important.

For example, in soccer games, one player goal is the equip goal. (but 1 joueur est le but de lâÃ©quipe)

According to Geert Hofstede (a press article writer), these points show that the US is a more masculine country than France. I think we can reveal there is another aspect of this topic with gender ideas.

2Â°/ The power that is a more masculine idea can be illustrated by American will to possess big things.

Indeed, American cars are big like 4x4 or pick up, they like to eat big burgers.

They use an amazing budget for their movies with many special effects and they often contain fights like Rambo, Terminator or Rocky. Each time, we have the feeling that American glory is bet and itâs always American people who win.

Then, American comics imply heroes with a super strength and a nice physical appearance like Superman or Hulk.

On the contrary, French culture hires the small things and products are adapted to family which is a more feminine idea.

There are small French cars for young people the Twingo, the Clio or the Smart and weâre used to taking a little break with a small cup of coffee.

In France, there are often humoristic or romantic movies like movie of the moment âBienvenue chez les châtisâ which is the best French humoristic movie of the year.

Weâre also used to reading comics like âAstÃ©rixâ or âTintinâ who are not really superheroes.

As we see through all these examples America owns more masculine ideas than France and we really saw a gap between these two mentalities.

3Â°/ However, the feminine culture in France is limited.

We also have a competitive policy as we se through a job or college interview. The selection is tough, there are some oral or written exams and many people are refused.

The vision of soccer as a âsweetâ sport is far from reality because many players are hurt during the games.

Furthermore, there are French action movies like âLes riviÃ¨res pourpresâ, âNikitaâ and âLeonâ which compete with American super production.

In my opinion, the association between masculine culture with men who search for success and power, and feminine culture with women who look after their family is a stereotype. It tends to disappear today, women are more and more independent and they can be companyâs bosses or minister.

For instance, the French company CHANEL is lead by a woman.

To conclude, obviously the US is a more âmasculineâ culture than France. But in my view, there isnât a best culture because self-confidence and relationships are essential to have a happy live.

We can wonder if the promotion of power and success could not lead to abuse.

Sincerely,

Correction of an Essay

learner_of_english — Mon, 21 Apr 2008 21:37:28 GMT

Hello,

I'm trying to write Essays to improve my English level cause I want to study in the United Kingdom. But I always have some problems in grammar.

So I would like a kind English speaker correct the big mistakes in the grammar of my sentences (not the content). I'll be very grateful if you can help me

Thanks a lot !

The topic is : "According to press articles, the US is a more masculine country than France. To what extent do you believe this is true ?"

Through History, weâve seen that American people are proud and want to manage the world. Meanwhile, French people know how to live and they have a more collectivism mentality. According to several studies, the US is a more âmasculineâ country than France. Weâre about to study if this is a reality or not.

First, we can compare educational values between these two countries.

American people are rather individualistic.

Each person must show his value to be recognized. The merit is more important than the link formed with others. Pupils and students have to be independent, self-confident and competitive. Competition is the key word there.

For instance, intercollegiate sporting events are promoted in American football and basketball. These competitions attract not only young people but all sport fans.

In France, people are rather collectivistic. Ties between people are privileged. It doesnât matter if a person undergoes many failures, his family and his friends will always support him. Devotion in relationships is essential because people donât want to be alone.

Weâre used to partying several times by week, we enter in student associations to share our ideals with others and we think that is the victory of groups which is more important.

In a soccer games, one player goal is the equip goal. (but 1 joueur est le but de lâÃ©quipe)

According to Geert Hofstede, these points show that the US is a more masculine country than France. I think there is another aspect of this topic with the gender ideas.

One of those ideas is the power that is a more masculine idea. We have noticed that big is part of American culture, I think it can illustrate that idea.

Indeed, American cars are big like 4x4 or Espace, there are big burgers.

They use an amazing budget for their movies with many special effects. They often contain fights like Rambo, Terminator or Rocky. Each time, we have the feeling that American glory is bet and itâs always American people who win.

Then, American comics imply more heroes with superpowers and a nice physical appearance like Superman or Hulk.

On the contrary, French culture hires the small things. Products are adapted to family which is a more feminine idea.

French cars for young people are smaller like the Twingo, the Clio or the Smart. Weâre used to taking a little break with a small cup of coffee.

In France, there are often humoristic or romantic movies. At the moment, âBienvenue chez les châtisâ is the best French humoristic movie of the year.

In France, weâre used to reading comics like âAstÃ©rixâ or âTintinâ who are not really superheroes.

As we see through all these examples America owns more masculine ideas than France. We really see a gap between these two mentalities.

However, the feminine culture in France is limited.

We also have a competitive policy as we se through a job or college interview. The selection is tough, there are some oral or written exams and many people are refused.

The vision of soccer as a âsweetâ sport is far from reality because many players are hurt during the games. There are French action movies like âLes riviÃ¨res pourpresâ, âNikitaâ, âLeonâ which compete with American super production.

In my opinion, the association between masculine culture with men who search success and feminine culture with women who look after their family is a stereotype. It tends to disappear today, women are more and more independent and they can be companyâs boss or minister.

For instance, the French company CHANEL is lead by a woman.

To conclude, obviously the US is a more âmasculineâ culture than France. But in my view, there isnât best culture because self-confident and relationships are essential to live.

And we can wonder if the promotion of power and success could not lead to abuse.

Sincerely,

Please revise the paragraph, thank you!

Anonymous — Mon, 28 Jan 2008 08:57:07 GMT

The following is a supporting paragraph in an essay "Why do people attend college". I think the last sentence is not coherent with the topic. If omitting it, i think the passage will be too short. How to do? Thank you!

Next, more education means more money. According to the US Census Bureau, a person who attends college generally earns more than a person who does not. For example, in 1997, a person with a college degree from a four-year college earned approximately $18,000 more in that year than a person who did not go to college. Someone with a two-year associateâs degree also tends to earn more than a high school graduate. In addition, people attending college are more likely to get promotion and other benefits from their employers.

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Dado — Sat, 06 Oct 2007 11:03:56 GMT

Hello everyone. My english is not so good so I need help. As you can see here I have text not so big but I think it is not grammatical correct. Well. Can you help me and correct. Thanks.

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Need pointers to essays that heavily use indrect speech

sharad — Wed, 11 Jul 2007 06:31:14 GMT

I need to compose an essay all in indirect speech. I am looking for some good references for style etc.. I somehow find it very tedious to compose essays in indirect speech.
Please point me to any reference essays that use indirect speech heavily.

Few essays that would require heavy usage of indirect speech are :

1. How do you think school teacher will describe your strengths and weaknesses you to your parents ??

2. How do you think your manager will recommend your promotion to his manager ??

3. How do you think your friends will miss you ??

4. How do you think readers will reach to your article on Iraq War ??

PLEASE CHECK MY ESSAY...

Rolandoc — Fri, 23 Feb 2007 01:41:59 GMT

SUGAR AND BLOOD: SLAVERY IN TWO WORLDS
BY: ROLANDO CASELLA

    Between the early 1790s and the early 1820s, there was a difference in the way that slaves from the US and Brazil were treated. The slaves developed lawsuits against their masters in which, they argued for their right to be free. This essay will talk about three consistent themes from those arguments of the freedom suits: First, the urban slaves who sued their masters in the two countries sharing the common concepts of justice, freedom, and rights. Second, that Brazilian and U.S. lawyers both used Roman lawyers and Roman laws concerning slavery to defend slaves. Even though slavery did not undergo in most parts of Europe after the decline of the Roman laws, capitalist desires there encouraged and grew in other areas in thrill like the U.S. and Brazil. Third, the ways that slaves were treated in different situations in both Brazil and the U.S. Slavery involves the legal state of existing rights to the norm of property rights over things. The laws in the U.S. and Brazil were different from each other and the people were treated differently.
    In the U.S., only planters and private individuals owned slaves. In Brazil, besides the planter class, large plantations were owned by such religious orders as the Benedictine and Carmelite friars, who treated theirs really well. Also, there were slaves that belonged to the government. Brazilian slavery was everywhere, instead of in a few small places. In Brazil the sale of slaves from one master to another apparently was not as common as it was in the US. Brazil was known to have an extensive slavery system.
    Slavery in North America was very different than slavery in the rest of the Americas. In the first place, far fewer slaves were brought into what became the United States. Only around 500,000 slaves were brought in, compared to around 12 to 13 million that were imported into the Caribbean and South and Central America. Most of these slave imports to North America ended by 1770, except for a burst of activity by a few southern states after the American Revolution. Secondly, the fact that the English people had little experience with slavery in comparison to the Spanish and Portuguese, mainly said that they really didn't have any past experience. Initially, the first slaves in the Virginia colony were looked upon as workers rather than as property, and some of them were treated much like white indentured servants. The enslaved Africans often worked along side the indentured European laborers in the tobacco fields of the Chesapeake region. The Africans werenât especially valued, either. It was cheaper in the early years to bring in white laborers from England as indentured servants than to pay for slaves. And most whites looked upon Africans as morally and intellectually inferior, in any case.
    Brazilâs African slaves were treated as inferior to the white man, whether they were servants or free. Slavery was involved as a legal status, it reflected and included this same act as a part of its essence, which white men had practiced against Africans all along and before any statutes, had decreed it. There were at least three major traditional safeguards, which tended to protect the free Negro against being treated as an inferior. In the U.S. the Negro slaves were treated as products not human beings. Even if a black man or woman were free they would still be treated as if they were slaves. On the eve of the Civil War, the Jim Crow idea was one of many stereotypical images of black inferiority. A white southern man who saw a crippled, elderly black man dancing and singing created Jim Crow. Thomas Rice created Jim Crow, and he charcoaled his face and sang a song and danced. Jim Crow was the stereotype of a black man described in a nineteenth century song-and-dance act.
In the United States, State legislations such as the Labor Laws continued attempts made by workers to improve their positions in society, yet dismantled previous federal attempts to improve African-Americans positions through the Black codes and Grandfather laws. Between 1874 and 1896 a number of Labor Laws were passed to lessen working hours, regulate wages, and lessen the amount of women and child laborers. In Brazilâs Congress they passed variants of a constitutional amendment that would permit federal authorities to seize land from slave owners. The law prohibited landowners from holding workersâ documents or using control over their transportation to and from remote farms to imprison them.
    In the United States there were two types of slavery, one the storied domestic slavery of the towns, and the southern country seat, where the Negro was usually feeling kindly treated and loved as though one of the family. This type of slavery was most common along the Mason-Dixon line. The other type was determined by the large-scale enterprises in the cotton and rice fields in the âsouthernâ South, where absentee ownership was often the rule. People become slaves because they are poor, vulnerable
and their basic rights are not protected. Lack of access to work, land, education and lack of enforcement of laws prohibiting the holding of people in bondage result in slavery. Slavery provides âemployersâ with a form of extremely cheap labor, which they will fight, to hold onto. The only option is to pledge their labor to repay their debt. Some resort to selling one of their children. People who are enslaved are usually unaware that they have legal rights to freedom or are unable to take action to defend their rights, because of the threat of violence. In Brazil there is 4 different types of slavery, bonded labor, forced labor, child labor, and sexual misuse of children.
Brazil never had anything similar to the Black Code and other legal prohibitions of contacts of races by marriage and intermarriage such as were very frequent elsewhere in the U.S. âIt takes a new look at the meanings slaves and masters drew from formal wedding ceremonies and celebrations, and examines marriages between slaves and free blacks as well as marriage between slavesâ(Will). In Brazil a slave who wished to marry first had to learn the requisite number of prayers, understand the confession, and receive the sacraments. Having received consent from Master, he is to be married by the vicar. In the U.S. a slave might marry a freeman. If husband was free and wife was a slave, their child would be a slave; but a slave father and a free mother produced a free child. Sacredness of marriage was more highly regarded in Brazil than the U.S. In the U.S. it was illegal for a slave to marry, own property, appeal to court, or be a witness. Black slaves and free blacks alike could not vote, testify in court against a white person, or marry a white person. Slaves were allowed neither to carry arms nor to leave their homes without written permission. The Brazilian slavesâ marriage was sanctified, had legal rights, and could appeal to court, own things, make money, and could buy freedom. The religious feeling has also favored crossbreeding, and it was very common among the colonists. The legislation and the strength of the public opinion in Brazil with reference to marriage and intermarriage is also important. In the U.S., the slave might marry on the plantation, but the very next day be sold, and separated from his wife and parents.
    In both countries, there were certain religions that the slaves had to follow. Many people in Brazil gave emphasis to the religion of Catholicism with its doctrine of essential equality of mankind and its estimation of racial principle that tends to hinder action. Many Protestant countries influenced by modern missionaries have adopted this position of Catholicism. The Church insisted that the marriage ties of the slave be respected, and that the master never forget the slaveâs status as a human being with an immortal soul. That paralleled the concern of the Church by the active interference of royal officials in matters of slave welfare. In the U.S., the Protestants had eradicated the slavesâ old religions, to control and rationalize them. It was always about race and saying the slaves were inferior. The lack of civil law slave code did not mean that the church exercised authority in the regulation of slavery. The 1705 Law stated that all blacks, mulattoes, and Native Americans, and all non-Christian persons brought into the colonies as servants (even if they converted to Christianity later) and were considered slaves. In Brazil state and religious bodies owned slaves. âThe Catholic Church tried to Christianize the blacks, looking for extirpating a tradition milenar. Even so, the black resisted to the domain of the white culture maintaining their faith, and adapting their rituals and transforming their religion in a contemporary realityâ(PARAÃSO). The Catholics in Brazil treated the slaves better since they thought their souls were equal. They believed that all people could and should receive sacraments, marriage, host, and blessings and also allowed African traditions to continue. Religion was a vital factor in slave life. In the Old South, religion was at first discouraged among the slaves. There was a reason for this, for masters knew that nowhere in Christian teachings were there provisions for enslaving Christians. Sometimes the Negroes were allowed to worship under the same roof as their white superiors, but they usually had to steal away to some secret place for this purpose. In Brazil, however, Christianization of the slaves was an essential.
    In master-slave relationship, intimacy, cordiality and the masterâs protection of the slave were maintained as long as the slave stayed in his âplaceâ. In the absence of individual juridical status, the slaves exercised their social identity through their relationship with the master, attempting to negotiate, within the context of white power, individual or collective spaces of autonomy or social promotion, or even their freedom. His master could liberate him during his life. In the U.S. the ultimate controlling factor, that is, in every relationship between white men and black will be the black manâs status as property. Hypodescent is the practice of determining what ethnicity a child of mixed race is, by assigning it the ethnicity of the minority parent. It has always been the cornerstone of the U.S. racial classification system. Hypodescent does several things necessary for the maintenance of strict and rigid racial division. First, it has effectively arranged the U.S. into easily discernable racial groups â no middle ground. Second, it eliminates African ancestry from the white population â African ancestry that in secret makes its way into the white population is unacknowledged. Third, it discourages intermarriage. This is not to say that interracial sex can involve use or simple pleasure â it does not necessarily mean respect or friendship. âIt is said that the Jews and the black slaves had a secret relationship in Brazil, though it has been ignored by bothâ(Levin).
    The women in both Brazil and the U.S. were treated differently. In the U.S. the owners raped the women. In Brazil, the women were raped but there was also a lot of marriages between Africans and whites. âWhat he labels sexual, she labels harassmentâ(Baldwin). The black slave women really couldnât say anything the people would only believe the white man. There was a shortage of white women so there was a lot of mixing. Besides the heavy work, the women slaves were forced to assist sexually with the masterâ(Florentino). If a Negro woman had brought 10 children into the world by virtue, her tenth child would become free. Because of their interests in the physical reproduction of human capital, slave-owners intervened in even the most intimate of slave family ties.
    America and Brazil had very different ways to become free. It was easier to become free in Brazil, and the liberation of slaves was widely practiced. There were different rules to become a free citizen. Among the legal restrictions placed on free blacks, there was the 1717 Connecticut Law that required aspiring black business owners to get official permission to open shop. During the Reconstruction period, reconstituted southern state governments passed "black codes" that shortened the rights of the newly freed slaves. 259,000 free persons represented 9% of Brazilâs total free population. âNo one shall be held in slavery or servitude. Slavery and the slave trade shall be prohibited in all their formsâ (Universal Declaration of Human Rights, Article 4).
In 1696 the comprehensive code outlined severe penalties for a variety of offenses committed by blacks and excused any whites that caused the death of a slave while carrying out a punishment. Legal standing of African Americans in North America has changed over time, varying according to history and place. As black laborers gradually replaced white indentured servants as the principle source of agricultural labor during the second half of the 17th century, laws were being introduced, reducing slavery as a race-based system to a code. For elderly blacks, this practice benefited the company for whom older slaves were a liability rather than an asset.
    During the turn-of-the-century, the South was funding for education. Education there had been at rock bottom and whites were fiercely opposing African-American schooling. By 1867, schools had been set up in even the most remote counties of each of the confederate states. Most children never had the opportunity to attend school with any regularity, since they begin working in the fields around the age of ten or twelve. âA child cannot be taught by anyone who despises him, and a child cannot afford to be fooledâ(Baldwin). Girls were more likely to get a formal education than boys were, because of the greater demand for male field labor. African-Americans have had a respect for education since the first communities of black slaves were established in this country. Slaves and their teachers assumed frightening risks when they created secret schools where a few blacks could learn to read. By the 1830s, it was a criminal offense in most Southern states to teach a slave to read or write. âEducation is indoctrination if you're white - subjugation if you're blackâ(Baldwin). There is an unbroken historical link between the newly freed slaves who fought for universal state-supported public schools in the South and the black mothers and fathers who from the 1950s through the 1980s sent their children in search of a better education on foot and in school buses into the teeth of hostile and sometimes violent white resistance.
    In the 20th century, most blacks in the South remained bound to whites as sharecroppers or tenant farmers. Few blacks owned, or even managed to rent land, so they remained poverty-stricken and propertyless, both dependent on and subordinate to whites. Even then, complained one planter, sharecropping "is wrong policy; it makes the laborer too independent; he becomes a partner, and has a right to be consulted." In Brazil, some of the slaves were able to own their own land. When blacks were freed in America, they really didnât have much to do since all they knew was to work in the fields.
    Much more research needs to be done concerning the concepts of race, laws and ethnicity in the United States and Brazil. Research, which ignores the class-like properties of racial classification and definition, overlooks a significant part of the social landscape of Brazil and the U.S.

How about my essay, could you give me attention to check it please.

Dragontv — Thu, 08 Feb 2007 14:49:24 GMT

Education is a life long task. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, education is an important key for people to be success. Education is not only to go to school for learning, it also means that people may learn from their family, social life, their work or by themselves. They always need to promote their life, their career and I think you and me, so do we. Therefore, education is that we have spent our whole life on.

The life is a learning process. Why can I say that? After you were born, you actually have to learn many things around you day by day. You learn how to stand up, how to run, how to speak and so on. You got all basic lifeâs skills and beginning knowledge by yourselves or by your other helps. When you had enough ages, your parents sent you to school for studying. You spent your all childhood for learning, consequently you could get a good level of knowledge to find a job after leaving your schools (after graduating from high school or university). Then, you can not stop learning because you have to fight for your work. Obviously, you have to get more and more knowledge of your working field because your experience is your valuable. There are many ways to obtain it, you could join a cyber class, mine knowledge from the internet or study yourselves. And even so after retiring, you must continue studying. At that time, you learn to enjoy the rest of your time, take care yourselves and practice your health and so on. All your life is spent to learn.

In addition, everyone try to get promotion in their career. People know that nothing lasts forever. Nowadays, life has changed quickly and are higher and higher competitive. Technology and knowledge improve day by day. So, if they stop striving for that, they would be left behind, even lose their own position. Thus they should update their education all the time. Some my friends even came back university to study higher education because they wanted to have a higher position. With strong knowledge, we could easily be successful.

In summary, I think people always need to get more and more knowledge. They learn day by day to live and to advance their life. That means we spend all our lives on education, it is a lifelong task.

Pls help me checking this essay. Thanks in advanced!

Dragontv — Tue, 06 Feb 2007 13:41:21 GMT

In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?

In actual fact, in many countries children have to work as workers for money. Someone consider this as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. However, in my opinion I strongly argue it. This even infringes the International Convention on the Rights of Child which is made and supervised by UN.

Actually, in poor countries governments would not have enough money and care to help children having a good life. Therefore, children in these countries have no more choices; they need to work for supporting themselves and even their families, instead of going to school. They maybe became strong ones in the future as well as having good life skills. But children would not grow up that way. They need to go to school, and have time to play and enjoy the life. This is the way for them to have better future.

Moreover, the children are an important resource of nation, a key of successful future. So supporting and protecting them are responsibility of their families and our society. No one is allowed in using them as workers, we have to prepare for our children strong healthy, good knowledge that are very important for better future.

Finally, all countries should obey the International Convention on the Rights of Child; this is a promotion of our civilization. We have to protect our children, our future and defense of misusing them for any profit.

In concluding, I strongly recommend that it would be really bad to engage children in some kind of paid work. This is absolutely wrong. They need to be protected under the International Convention on the Rights of Child and other regulations.

Re: Admission Essay-Please Help

Anonymous — Sun, 29 Oct 2006 01:19:33 GMT

Hi,

Thank You Nona the Brit for your reply. I made some changes. I kept the veterinary aspect of wanting to pursue the degree, but I tried to explain it a little bit more. Please tell me what I need to work on further. Here is my essay.

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For nearly two decades my father lived with Membranoproliferative glomerulonephritis type II a rare kidney disease that resulted in chronic kidney failure in 2001. My father was lucky enough to get a kidney transplant two years later. Upon learning the full extent of my fatherâs disease I decided that I wanted to pursue the profession of veterinarian medicine so that to under the disease the mechanism of the disease of the disease through animal models and one day find a cure this disease so that people like my father may not have to deal with the agony of the disease.

As my undergraduate years preceded me, I became more interested in how social aspects of my studies and became more interested in the prevention and education concerning diseases. I got my first glimpse of public health when I shadowed a veterinarian at the El Paso Humane Society. During my shadowing period with Dr. ---- I learned of many common zoonotic diseases that affect the El Paso region. As Dr. ---- told me of how this disease has been controlled considerably through education of the public and initiative of the local government I became interested with the field of public health field.

Since this time I have been looking to further my interest in public health. In the summer of 2006, I took two health promotion courses to help better equate me with the field. Through these courses I was able to survey many significant diseases that are affecting the world today and learn that health promotion is key in lowering the occurrences of these diseases.

I am constant in a health setting working at the Department of Veterans Affairs (VA) as a work-study for the Facility Support Service (FSS). I work with the FSS staff assisting the engineer, maintenance, safety, and telephone staff in ensuring that the facility works efficiently.

Presently I am a studying biology in with concentration in the biomedical aspects of biology. My curriculum allows me to explore all aspects of biology, especially those in the preventive measures of diseases. Currently I am taking Immunology and future will be taking Pathogenic Microbiology to understand the basis of pathogens why they are able to easily access the body.

Currently I am a member and secretary of Sigma Alpha Lambda, an honorary society. In this society we work through community service to promote unity throughout our community whether its through helping with the United Food Bank El Paso chapter helping sort food items so that they can be distributed to needy families or working with our adopt a highway project to help beautify our community.

If admitted to your MPH program I plan to use my knowledge of biological sciences and apply it my public health studies. Upon earning my degree I plan to go to veterinary school where I plan to concentrate my studies on renal diseases so that I might understand the understand these diseases in humans.