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chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />> Your essay is clear in general. Yet you have to be careful about some points. >> First, try to paraphrase what you want to say if it's given by the topic. Don't use the exact wordings. >> It's good for you to have used different sentence structures...

I would have used a comma before the final "and" or "or" in a series, like this: mother, and lesbian church, or community You need "losing parental custody" -- one "o" in "losing". I think you need a more parallel structure than "as an activist and through faith", maybe "through faith and...