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Actually I just want you to correct the grammar, sentence structures and check if the sentences sound OK. If a sentence is awkward, please suggest a better one.

Hi, I am applying for BBA-Finance in a university. They have asked me to write an essay on why I want to pursue the program. I've written it, but I feel that it doesn't sparkle. I am not sure if grammar, sentence structure, flow, punctuation, mood and tense are presented in a manner that makes...

Hi I am applying to a Clinical Psychology program and here is my essay. Can you tell what you think and give any suggestions especially with grammar and sentence structure. They want me to state my reasons for seeking admittance to the program at this point in my life; my scholarly and...

Leolyy wrote: hi Goodman, it seems that you feel it not easy to alter and modify the paragraph of my test essay. even though you have written a new one in addition, you have not modified on it. why? i cant understand because i think that it is easier to alter than to re-create. the...

chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />> Your essay is clear in general. Yet you have to be careful about some points. >> First, try to paraphrase what you want to say if it's given by the topic. Don't use the exact wordings. >> It's good for you to have used different sentence structures...

Bunny, I have gone through your essay and made some comments. It looks scattered to me. Not well thought out. I have also started a second iteration. You need to decide which one you want to work with and make the essay flow smoother. You are about to graduate from university in a business...

Dear Sir or Madam: I am applying for the Engineering program (Diplome d'Ingenieur)at a member institution of N+I. I graduated in Automation with a bachelor degree in 2003 from the university of Science and Technology. My study focuses on Control Theory, Distributed and Process Control....