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Re: Can you tell me what my writing gets wrong ?

Grammar Geek — Tue, 18 Nov 2008 14:21:17 GMT

Online translators take words in one language and produce words in another. Sometimes they mean the same thing. More often, they return phrases that make little sense. I won't give you a site for one because they are highly ineffective.

If you want to rewrite your essay so that you stick to one topic, have a logical flow, and make sure that you're made a good attempt to use standard sentence structure, you can repost it and someone can take a look.

Dear members, i need some help with my grammar

summersnow69 — Sat, 26 Jul 2008 06:59:01 GMT

Normal 0 false false false MicrosoftInternetExplorer4 Dear members,
i need some help . i hope u all can review and edit a few sentence on my application essay, on the grammar and the sentence structure, and vocabulary.

--When I was eight, most of my leisure time was spent gluing my eyes on the tv screen watching Disneyâs magical series, âGummi Bearâ.

o Do i sound chilidish??

THANKS IN ADVANCE for you reading.

Re: Need Help with this sentences

Goodman — Fri, 28 Mar 2008 19:15:13 GMT

I agree with Nona. Your sentence structure needs much improvements. I think part of the problem is that you intend to create a sophsiticated tone using big words in your writing but not quite mastering the skills as yet. As a result, your writing was entangled with wrong usage and ended up in confusing contexts.

As already indicated by Nona, your essay appeared to me as well a messy and bewildering description of an âurban environmentâ which lead the readers to wonder what the essence of your essay really was. I am not sure itâs your style but there is quite a bit of âabstractivismâ in your writing. Good writing should paint a vivid picture of what the author tries to convey in words. To improve, first we have to learn how to clearly state something without having the reader to guess, and then improve on the choice of words and sentence sturcture. Thatâs my opinion.

Please proofread my thesis =D

Kaito1412kid — Mon, 10 Dec 2007 09:51:43 GMT

Dear Experts,

Hi, I have been wondering whether to use my first thesis format or my second thesis format in making my thesis statement for:

Argumentative essay - What do you think the legal drinking age in your province should be? Give examples (be specific)!

My first format:

In my opinion, the legal drinking age should be 21 years old because by the age of 21: an individual has reached adulthood; an individual has acquired a lot of life experience to aid them in making the right decision; and above all, an individual has been thoroughly educated about the risks of drinking.

My second format

In my opinion, the legal drinking age should be 21 years old because by the age of 21 an individual has reached adulthood, has acquired a lot of life experience to aid them in making the right decision, and has been thoroughly educated about the risks of drinking.

Also, is it grammatically correct to use "an individual has acquired a lot of life experience to aid them in making the right decision" ?

On top of that, =) please let me know if I have made some mistakes or if there are better format/sentence structures for this type of essay.

Thanks in advance,

Kaito

Re: TWCSR essay. Does this sound correct?

Clive — Thu, 01 Nov 2007 21:34:17 GMT

Hi,

Welcome to the Forum. I've made some suggestions. If you'd like to revise your writing and post again, I'd be happy to have another look.

I'm 14 and this is my first exam year. I really want to achieve a 1 but I need to be able to write stylish sentences and sentence structure is one of my weak points. I would appreciate it if you could help me with this sentence as I don't know if it sounds okay or is grammarly correct.

An excellent short story I will remember for a long time to come is Ray Bradbury's " There will come soft rains", notably for it's terrifying message about humanity's demise and the techniques used to effectively create the appropriate atmosphere throughout the story. For example, using precise words, the author creates brilliant imagery (creating very accurate, vivid images in our mind) and helps express the correct mood and emotions, which plays a crucial part in personification.

An excellent short story I will remember for a long time to come is Ray Bradbury's " There will come soft rains". <<< Starting a new sentence here makes your writing 'tighter', more precise. It is notable for its terrifying message about humanity's demise, and for the techniques used to effectively create the appropriate atmosphere throughout the story. For example <<< the previous sentence spoke of two notable things. say which one this is an example of (or is it meant as an example of both?) , using precise words, the author creates brilliant, very accurate and vivid images in our mind and helps express the correct <<< what does 'correct' mean here? say it another way mood and emotions, which <<< make it more clear as to what 'which' refers to plays a crucial part in personification.

Next time, please try to post with a smaller font size.

Best wishes, Clive

TWCSR essay. Does this sound correct?

Noinnocentvictim — Thu, 01 Nov 2007 18:20:05 GMT

Hi, I'm 14 and this is my first exam year. I really want to achieve a 1 but I need to be able to write stylish sentences and sentence structure is one of my weak points. I would appreciate it if you could help me with this sentence as I don't know if it sounds okay or is grammarly correct.

Re: Please evaluate this Ielts essay. I would appreciate any comments!

Anonymous — Tue, 02 Oct 2007 15:18:14 GMT

Hi julielai, thank you for pointing out some gramamtical mistakes and lack of explanation in the essay for me. However could any of you assess the introduction and sentence structures because the introductions of my essays are often criticized as ineffective and the sentences sometimes appear vague?Thanks

Re: How does it sound?

Angelica_04 — Fri, 07 Sep 2007 09:03:26 GMT

Yes, that sentence is correct. I've read essays and some books which used that kind of sentence structure. But if I'm not mistaken, I think that it is used in old english language (just a guess), because I've read some works of Shakespeare, and I saw some sentences of this kind. But I'm not a native speaker of english.

Re: hello

Samarnh_p — Sun, 15 Jul 2007 05:15:04 GMT

Writing is a tough job, but once you like it you never fail to success. There are bunches of good web addresses that may guide you to be an excellent writer or composer. You can make things alive, so you also can make it good and shiny. I recommend that each time you've done with your writing whether just a word, a sentence, a paragraph, or an essay, it's your responsibility to revise it again and again until you feel enough. Surely, no one can make a perfect paper, unless it's polished and critized. Always be ware with unity, style, sentence structure, spelling, and word choices. Writing is formal; thus, slangs or idioms are not included.

Good luck with your study Littl...

Re: My essay for the topic "Why people go to university or college". Pls check.

Kyn — Fri, 29 Jun 2007 16:43:56 GMT

Actually I just want you to correct the grammar, sentence structures and check if the sentences sound OK. If a sentence is awkward, please suggest a better one.