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Re: Is my essay okay so far?? Its a movie analysis

AlpheccaStars — Sun, 16 Nov 2008 01:47:34 GMT

OK, here are a few specific things I see that may be problems in the first few paragraphs.

1st paragraph- Is going to movies a social standard? Or is it an activity?

Your first sentence is 3 lines long. It is difficult to read and needs to be shorter.

You frequently use "that" when it is better to say "who"

What is the name of the movie? Punctuate it for the reader. (Capitalize, underline, or put in quotes) I

s it "Maybe be"? or "may be"

Is a "back round" related to gollfing?

Self conscious? Is a movie aware of itself and embarassed to tell you something? Or maybe you mean subconscious (below the awareness of the viewer)

The comma after "you" needs to be "that".

Do you really mean "then"? (at that time), or "than" (John is taller than Mike)

2nd paragraph. Hes and thats are not words. They are missing something.

3rd paragraph Is Alexia Near her name? If so, is she a swimming pool? It's spelled differently a few lines later.

Henry has a "person life"- not a "personal life"? There are many misspellings in the rest of the paragraph.

"im" is not a word.

someones is not correct..

4th paragraph guy who is sexist (missing verb). Hawaiians has (subject-verb agreement is not correct)

its - should be "it is" , which is a contraction spelled as "it's". Its is possessive - The dog wagged its tail.

"does the characters" - subject-verb agreement is not correct.

Re: Please correct me with the essay

Mister Micawber — Fri, 04 Jan 2008 08:51:15 GMT

1) What should I replace my work with?-- No title is required for TOEFL essays; if you need a title, it should announce to the reader the topic of your essay.

2)
the parentless children-- these are not previously mentioned or specific children
make their lives better -- what English word means 'make...better'?
people (why did you underline here?). -- What word is more specific?
measure I will(why did you underline here?). -- Only one measure? And verb form is not consistent.

3)
normally(why did you underline here?).-- Orphanhood is normal??
lead miserable lives due to(why did you underline here?).-- Strictly, 'due to' is an adjective; use a synonym.
the lack of education and materials (why did you underline here?). -- wrong word
However, before we did all the (why did you underline here?).-- wrong verb form
A charity fund might well be operated(why did you underline here? Can I replace it with "opened?") -- Yes, wrong word; use 'opened' or a synonym.
make them pay at all costs(why did you underline here?).-- Idiom is wrong here, and redundant: taxes are mandatory by nature
The tax can be fluctuating(why did you underline here?).-- wrong verb form
It's time the government... emphasize the essay, why would you say it was extraneous?-- That is not emphasis; it is beside the point; the essay is about what you would do, not what the government should do

4)To sum up, I-the governor(why did you underline here?).-- Wrong punctuation, new title, unnecessary appositive
Everyone bears in their minds(why did you underline here?) - the idiom is incorrectly formed
that even orphans have the(why did you underline here?).--no previous mention, no specificity

NOTE: If you want to continue this revision, please post a clean, revised copy for my review, Belly.

Re: Please correct me with the essay

Belly — Fri, 04 Jan 2008 07:57:48 GMT

Mister Micawber wrote:

I have underlined some problem areas, vocabulary or grammar, and added some notes after some. All in all, your presentation is not very humane:

My work: (Am I right to write "my work" here?-- No)

Were I an influential member of the government, I would help the parentless children to make their lives better. In this essay, I will aslo describe some of the problems that confront these people and discuss what measure I will take to improve their situation. (You have no thesis statement.)

Parentless children, or orphans, (No need for the apposition of 2 common words) normally lead miserable lives due to the lack of education and materials. Obviously there are some orphanges but not every child has the chance to live in. It is time the government did something about the problem.(Irrelevant to the question) One of the measures I suggest is to build more and more orphanages, the more the better. Secondly, the government will have to gather groups of those orphans and send them right away to orphanages. Every child will have chance to go to vocational school to learn. However, before we did all the things, we should found charity funds and add a small amount of taxes called "charity taxes" to every adult. They have to pay it without exception. A charity fund might well be operated every other month and the taxes come once a year. Some may not want to pay, so we have to make them pay at all costs. The tax can be fluctuating from two hundreds to five hundreds Viet Nam dong and I think that is an acceptable amount for almost every adult.

To sum up, I-the governor will put all of the measures above in operation, perhaps after a vote (Irrelevant to the question). Everyone bears in their minds that even orphans have the child rights so we cannot ignore them all. We should help them at all costs and train them to be the workforce of our country.

1) What should I replace my work with?

Were I an influential member of the government, I would help the parentless children make their lives better(typo, sorry). In this essay, I will aslo describe some of the problems that confront these people (why did you underline here?). and discuss what measure I will(why did you underline here?). take to improve their situation. (You have no thesis statement.)

Apart from that mistakes (the typo, the quantity of sentence), I don't understand what wrong of those mistakes

Parentless children, or orphans, (No need for the apposition of 2 common words) normally(why did you underline here?). lead miserable lives due to(why did you underline here?). the lack of education and materials (why did you underline here?). Obviously there are some orphanges but not every child has the chance to live in. It is time the government did something about the problem.(Irrelevant to the question) One of the measures I suggest is to build more and more orphanages, the more the better. Secondly, the government will have to gather groups of those orphans and send them right away to orphanages. Every child will have chance to go to vocational school to learn. However, before we did all the (why did you underline here?). things, we should found charity funds and add a small amount of taxes called "charity taxes" to every adult. They have to pay it without exception. A charity fund might well be operated(why did you underline here? Can I replace it with "opened?"). every other month and the taxes come once a year. Some may not want to pay, so we have to make them pay at all costs(why did you underline here?). . The tax can be fluctuating(why did you underline here?). from two hundreds (I've got it here, thanks) to five hundreds(I've got it here, thanks) Viet Nam dong and I think that is an acceptable amount for almost every adult.

It's time the government... emphasize the essay, why would you say it was extraneous?

To sum up, I-the governor(why did you underline here?). will put all of the measures above in operation, perhaps after a vote (I think I've got it here). Everyone bears in their minds(why did you underline here?). that even orphans have the(why did you underline here?). child rights so we cannot ignore them all. We should help them at all costs and train them to be the workforce of our country.

*(why did you underline here?). : I cannot find what was wrong so I need you help

can some one please help me teach me how to correct my errors

Anonymous — Mon, 03 Dec 2007 20:12:59 GMT

can some one please help me take a look to see what mistakes do i have and how can i correct them? i want to learn my mistakes.
this is part of my essay please help me underline my mistakes.

Since husband and wife think themselves are right, arguments will occur frequently which make them unhappy. Gen Me attended school where teachers did not tell their mistakes. According to Twenge, âTeacher education courses emphasize that creating a positive atmosphere is more important than correcting mistakesâ (63). Teachers were informed to not tell the mistakes that the students have, because it will hurt the studentsâ self-esteem; As a result, Gen Me will think they did nothing wrong which continue this thought when they grow up. When Gen Me find their partners, all they can possible meet are the people who with the same thought of thinking which think themselves are right on everything. Therefore, if both Gen Me are being together, arguments will occur; because both of them think themselves are right. Thus, it will be hard for them to stop the arguments, since they both do not know their mistakes; also they have no concession for each other which will make them feel unhappy and dejected. Moreover, Gen Me were taught to think they are special in school. According to Twenge, âGen Me has been raised thinking we were special [...]â (217). In school, teachers will educate the students that each of them is special, because each individual student has the skills or thoughts that others do not have; therefore, they should feel proud of themselves. As a result, when Gen Me have different opinions that both of them will think their opinions are special that should not be wrong; since no one steps back, argument will happen which will continue for a long time. Consequently, when every time husband and wife have a different option, they will argue which will not create a happy family since arguments happen repeatedly that makes both of them feel displeasure.

Re: underline expression

Philip — Sat, 18 Aug 2007 15:41:27 GMT

Anonymous wrote:

Filmography =

a collection of writings about motion pictures, esp. detailed essays dealing with specific films.

Please explain the underline expression.

I'm not sure what part of it you don't understand, but it would be a group of papers/essays various that people had written on the subject of movies.

underline expression

Anonymous — Sat, 18 Aug 2007 13:13:56 GMT

Filmography =

a collection of writings about motion pictures, esp. detailed essays dealing with specific films.

Please explain the underline expression.

underlining

Anonymous — Sun, 10 Dec 2006 17:30:45 GMT

Do I underline a movie title in an essay about myself?

Re: Can somebody check please? I am preparing for mi IELTS exam

Anonymous — Sat, 14 Jan 2006 01:33:49 GMT

hello Ampollita,

i think your essay is far from clean and you're going to need some time to work on it. i didnt underline or otherwise mark your mistakes because in that case I should have highlighted the whole text. lets see if it helps...

Should wealthy nations share part of their wealth with poorer nations by providing such human facilities as food and education to help them keep up? Or is it the governments of the poor nations responsible for prevailing poverty without leaning upon help from outside?

Today, when it comes to talking about attempting to eradicate poverty, numerous questions arise as to who should take responsibility for carrying this task out. In this essay I am going to be exploring whether should the wealthy countries help those ones in need or should the governments of the poor countries on behalf of their unity attend to solving their own problems. My point is that both terms are necessary to eliminate poverty.

On the one hand, the wealthy nations, such as the European, are for the most part well-off because they once exploited their poorer neighbours. For example, the Latin American, African and Asians people for centuries were kept in slavery and their masters had taken much of the natural and human resources out of them. For this very reason it should nowadays be responsibility of the wealthy nations to help those affected countries recover their lost property that once belonged to them and rise again.

On the other hand, the governments of the poor countries should endeavour to lead their nations towards increasing of economical and social development. However, apparently in most of the poor countries a problem called 'corruption' develops as well which prevents them from having rapid economical burst.

To thoroughly eradicate poverty it is necessary that all the countries take on this issue. To do that they certainly need more than just good will. It should be responsibility of all of us that every person in the world had access to basics like food, education and shelter. Poverty is man-made so the solution must be man-made accordingly.

If you really want to pass your exam, there's is some good articles or even howtos on writing essays at www.englishbiz.co.uk and much more. The author is a genuine english teacher who helps other students, apart from his own students, achieve higher grades in GCSE.

P.S. Using 'GET' throughout essay writing is something that cannot be accounted for!

Re: please check my essay 600words

Mister Micawber — Thu, 22 Dec 2005 05:59:42 GMT

Hello, Tony. Here are some notes:

Comma not period after Finch in the title.
No colon after By
racism has occurred
Leave two blank spaces after the period at the end of a sentence
Mockingbird is one word
Underline or italicize the book title
change phrases; to says:
this novel states
just man is not capitalized
non-racist (no s)
a belief that he can
His wife deceased, he raises
kids, Scout
Jem,
studying law
lawyer
theme:
Atticus proves
should not
he says, "if you can learn
you not u
from her point of view
from that of everyone involved
Atticus, Tim
about his raping
Atticus is
wisdom; he
Tim's case
ideal not ideaic
rebelled against his arguments
everyone's
Unfortunately
seventeen shots
back, bringing
As Atticus said,
mockingbird
moral
racism has
a just man.

Re: An essay about debating

anon1 — Sat, 20 Nov 2004 17:26:46 GMT

Julielai,

Just curious: is OP a popular acronym? Never heard of it

In newsgroups it is. I have not seen it used much, if at all, in EnglishForums.

I'll probably have more comments later.

Yeah, if you can, that would be great. The most effective help is going through line by line. You might even want to "mark up" the text with the corrections.

bold (just remove the spaces)
underline
Bold and Underline

To quote something is with the appropriate end quote.

So you know now the appropriate formatting techniques.

MountainHiker