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Re: Please correct my essay thanks my friends!!

26TMNTJG2PG — Fri, 15 Aug 2008 12:28:04 GMT

Dipsik
Could you please explain to me why you didnÂ´t correct the indefinite article before the word kids (second paragraph, first line)?

You are right the 'a' before 'kids' should not be there. I missed out. Thank you. The original poster, please note.

Dipsik
I would also write seriously, instead of the word "serious" you used (the latter is only used in informal English - at least as far as I know...)

The part in question is

"The streets practically were practically flooded but not serious enough to cause a total flooding or some any tragedy" and you have a point here as 'seriously' will be another adverb modifying the verb 'were flooded' but I used the adjective there to be illiptical for 'the floods were not serious enough' to be natural.

... to do something "as" the next part of an activity or period of development

Peaceblinkfriend — Tue, 05 Aug 2008 11:42:43 GMT

follow (sth) through phrasal verb [M]
to do something as the next part of an activity or period of development
The essay started interestingly, but failed to follow through (its argument).

I wonder what exactly 'as' means in this context. There seem to be so many meanings for the word.

Thank you

PBF

I need help with essay, Please!

hupdy — Thu, 24 Jul 2008 00:13:24 GMT

This is my essay I wrote, my teacher told me I need help with my grammar and verbs, hope someonw can help. Thanks.

Engineering is in the hands of the engineer, I believe that the engineers have a responsibility on what technology that person would create. In the documentary âThe Day After Trinityâ shows the life of Robert J. Oppenheimer and his contribution to the making of the atomic bomb. In the short story âThe Poemâ by Ray Bradbury depicts an artist with powers to create or destroy life with his writing, in another short story by Bradbury âThe Veldtâ depicts a futuristic society where kids have become addicted to technology. In the documentary âAmerican Experience: New York Undergroundâ shows the innovation of the New York City subway system and how it was made.

Engineers have the responsibility on what they design, which would either help mankind or destroy it. In the documentary, Oppenheimer wanted to help build the atomic bomb because he believed that this contribution would help the United States win WWII, he believe that making the bomb will help the world get rid of Nazi Germany, but instead they killed thousands of innocent Japanese with two atomic bombs. The engineer should think before creating.

Anyone that has the power to create things should have the responsibility on how to use it. âHis eyes shone fiercely. âThen I can destroy the universe and immortalize it at one and the same instant. Itâs in the power of a sonnet, if I choose to write it. (Bradbruy,781)â David (character from story) found out about his powers and was not responsible enough to handle it. Davidâs wife, who had more reasoning, tires to manage Davidâs powers. Engineers have the power of creation, with this power, responsibility will follow.

Engineering a technology can become an addiction. âThey walked down the ball. âI locked the nursery up,â explained the father, âand the children broke back in to it during the nightâ¦â (Bradbury, 8)â The kids were punish were not allowed to use the nursery, but they were addicted to this technology, since there addiction was so strong they decide to kill their parents in order to save the nursery. The short story was publish during the 1950âs and is amazing how the depiction of the addiction to technology is not far from the present. Engineers would have to think about what is good for the individual.

There are some engineers who did take the responsibilities in order to help their fellow man. In the documentary âNew York Undergroundâ shows engineers and workers work day and night in order to provide an essential service that New York which was the subway. Because of the subway congestion from the streets fell 70%, life and business grow.

My stand on engineering is base on how the engineers would design something to help the world. Engineers have become more wanted because technology is advancing, advancing in many areas such as medicine, communication, environmental, etc. In the case of the atomic bomb it was necessary to fight the enemy, but having the power to create should not be use to destroy life with your creation. Somethingâs the things that are created can become an addiction. Engineers must decide to weather create something that could help or destroy the world.

Re: This is my first writing. Please help check my writing.

Skrej — Sat, 05 Jul 2008 23:12:04 GMT

Hi Neung,

I've made some corrections to your essay. Any corrections I made are now in red letters. If you have any questions about what I mean, or would like a more detailed explanation on why something was incorrect, please ask. We'll try to answer.

Anonymous

My name is Jeerapun Khunsopa and My (don't capitalize 'my') nickname is Nueng. I 'm 22 years old. I was born in Suphan Buri province and move (should be 'moved', since it's in the past) to Bangkok, ~~this is~~ (remove the words 'this is', and add a comma after Bangkok) a big city, (add another comma) with my family when I was nine years old. I graduated from Bangkapi school of fishing. My favorite websites are Google, Yahoo! <... some URLs removed by a mod.> I enjoy visiting tourists attractions and traveling. I also enjoy reading, going to movies and watching TV. I'm very interested in politics. I am following the presidential race in my county. I'm also interested in the global warming crisis and alternative sources of energy, such as solar and wind power. My dream job would be to run a successful Internet company that helped people. I have visited Cambodia,Cannada, (correct spelling is 'Canada', with only 1 'n') Hong kong, (capitalize 'k' in 'Kong') Laos and Mexico. I went to Chiang Mai on my last vacation. It was great! ~~and~~ (remove the word 'and' to avoid a sentence fragment) I do not have any pets, but I wish that I had a dog. My house does not allow pets. I have two brothers and one sister. If I won a million Baht, I would travel around the world. I would really like to visit Japan. My hight (correct spelling is 'height) is 173 and My weight is 64. My blood type is B and My (don't capitalize 'my') hobbies is ('hobbies' is plural, you need the plural verb 'are' instead) Listen (this should be 'listening' instead of 'listen, and don't capitalize it) to the radio, and (since there are only 2 hobbies, remove the comma and add the word 'and') read (this should be 'reading' instead of 'read') catoon. My address is Bangkapi

Neung, I think this was very good work for your first writting attempt. You did have a few very minor mistakes, but you still did quite well.

One more thing to remember, is that when you're typing things on the Internet, always put 2 spaces after a sentence, instead of one, to make them easier to read. This is a very minor thing, but it does make all writing a little easier to read, (even if it's written correctly!)

Re: Use of 'either'

Tanit — Fri, 04 Jul 2008 20:55:19 GMT

Anonymous
The remaining seven SMEs were unable to participate either due to their head office being located elsewhere, had not commenced their operation or refused to take part.

Hi,
I am terribly sorry, but this sentence makes no sense at all to me!
It looks as if it were an excerpt of an academic work (essay, paper, article) describing the results of some sort of research. Is it?

Are you saying that those SMEs did not take part in something for one or more of the following reasons: (1) location of their head offices, (2) business not started yet, or (3) refusal to participate?
If that's the case, I wouldn't say "were unable to participate", because this does not apply to somebody who "refused to take part" in whatever it may be. If I refuse to do something, I don't want to do it, despite being able to!

As for your question, I wouldn't use "either" and I would also rephrase the part after "due to" ("due to their head office being located elsewhere, had not commenced their operation or refused to take part"), which doesn't sound good to me. I think you've got some problems with verb forms.

Warning: This is just my opinion and I'm not a native, so please wait for some more reliable answers. I really don't want to mislead you.

Re: Fragmented sentences

New2grammar — Mon, 16 Jun 2008 04:03:51 GMT

Delmobile
New2G, be careful - my teenagers frequently get into trouble with their school essays when they can't stay in one tense.

I don't really understand why native speakers will get into trouble for switching tenses. Isn't it part of everyday speech which is why they do tense switching in their essays in the first place?

I understand that even native speakers make spelling mistakes and occasional subject-verb agreement mistakes. But I don't think I've heard or seen any native speaker make tense mistakes. Oh..it's very likely because I don't know tense switching well enough. Could you give an real world example of a tense switching mistake committed by a native? I don't believe they woudl say "Yesterday, I see a man" or I graduate last year"

Sorry, If I'm asking a lot.
Thanks in advance.

any better topic for writing a thesis

sebayanpendam — Fri, 06 Jun 2008 10:06:24 GMT

hi,

I'm a teacher in a local school in Malaysia. I teach english subject. my first degree was social science and diploma was tesl. english taught in my country is communicative. teaching english in a rural school is a great challenge.at the moment, i am considering to pursue my studies to a master's level. in fact i am waiting for a reply from a local university about my application. i chose to do tesl. the thing is i need to write a thesis and the topic i could think of at this point is 'using newspaper is an approach in teaching writing. in my opinion, a person can learn to write proper sentences by observing sentences constructed in an article. people can learn on how a good sentence is built around a newly-learnt verb. furthermore, newspapers contain various columns ranging from general news to sports from which students are able to read and learn how to write essays of different genre. Do you think that this topic has somewhat been written too often? could anyone give me advice on what topic i should write for my thesis or should i keep on with this topic?

thanks.

Re: Could you please help me to correct my essay?

bmatt — Thu, 29 May 2008 15:06:20 GMT

Hi Julielai,

I've done some correction, well, at least I think they are correction :), based on your comments. hope you can check for me again, if you have time.

thanks a lot

I partly agree with the point expressed. I would like to argue that the computer does improve the childrenâs learning efficiency in various ways. The computer can offer learning materials over various media to help children to learn faster, and even more importantly, in a fun way.

However, computer can be a danger to childrenâs health due to the âunergonomicâ design. Without paying too much attention to their body posture, children could develop RSI (Repetitive Strain Injury) after use the computer for a long time. Also, the light of the monitor (verb->yes) is harmful for eyesight because it is very strong and the screen is blinking in a high frequency. Childrenâs eyesight will be decreased if they constantly starring at the computer screen.

Moreover, children can be easily misled by inappropriate contents of computer game. There are many Nowadays, every one out of five computer games involve sexual and violence contents on the market. By watching and playing with them, children tend to learn from the characters in the game, and that could lead to serious crime. Another drawback is that it does not help children to develop communication skills. Todayâs technology is not sufficient enough to provide communication methods in cyber world as rich as in the real one. For example, The sense of touching, one of the important factors for human communication, is as yet the impossible to be communicated over computer equipment.

In conclusion, the computer can be an excellent tool which affords effective learning to children. Yet it has many disadvantages. Children should only use computer with under the supervision of parents of adults in order to avoid to abuse it.

Re: which vs of which

CalifJim — Wed, 21 May 2008 01:47:44 GMT

which, of which, among which, to which, about which, for which, ...

Combine The car is big with the following:

The car is blue. > The car which is blue is big. [no preposition before the car]

The car is parked there. > The car which is parked there is big. [no preposition before the car]

I bought the car. > The car which I bought is big. [no preposition before the car]

Helen likes the car. > The car which Helen likes is big. [no preposition before the car]

The workmen repaired the car in two hours. > The car which the workmen repaired in two hours is big. [no preposition before the car]

The strongman picked up the car. > The car which the strongman picked up is big. [no preposition before the car -- pick up is a phrasal verb]

The Smiths auctioned off the car. > The car which the Smiths auctioned off is big. [no preposition before the car -- auction off is a phrasal verb]

Jerry is talking about the car. > The car about which Jerry is talking is big.

I paid $10,000 for the car. > The for which I paid $10,000 is big.

The new puppy is afaid of the car. > The car of which the new puppy is afraid is big.

Robert traveled to Chicago in the car. > The car in which Robert traveled to Chicago is big.

A breeze is blowing through the car. > The car through which a breeze is blowing is big.

I hit a tree with the car. > The car with which I hit a tree is big.

A truck is headed toward the car. > The car toward which a truck is headed is big.

The children danced around the car. > The car around which the children danced is big.

Karen knows the owner of the car. > The car of which Karen knows the owner is big.

Albert lost the key to the car. > The car to which Albert lost the key is big.

Marty had trouble with the car. > The car with which Marty had trouble is big.

Lucy set a book on the car. > The car on which Lucy set a book is big.

There's not enough gas in the car. > The car in which there's not enough gas is big.

A stranger walked up to the car. > The car up to which a stranger walked is big. [up to - a compound preposition]

The stranger ran away from the car. > The car from which the stranger ran away is big. [run away - a phrasal verb]

______

Note that these sentences are for pattern practice only. They are not particularly useful in conversations or in written essays!

Re: Money to live, or live to money?

Mister Micawber — Mon, 05 May 2008 23:03:19 GMT

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I have underlined some problem areas:

I appreciate if you could let me know the mistakes I am sure I made somewhere in the essay below.I felt the time really changed when I watch a TV program about the salary of various occupations. Today, peoples care a lot about money because food/gas prices are risen up but salaries are stay the same or lowered.Even for the childrenâs show that introduces various jobs mentioning the average salary of todayâs occupation at the end of the program, which had been considered rude and improper when I was a child. Collapse of the communism brought us kind of an idea âpursuing money is justiceâ, I can not totally agree with the idea when listing the news of suffering people because of the risen food price and the speculation made the price crazy. . I am not a communist, and also value the importance of the money since I am living this era.However, I believe money is not the most important, but just a method to pay our daily bills and helps our dream come true, not the dream itself.Flour and butter prices are risen up, bad news for the sweet teeth like me.

Good ideas, but you need to work on verb tenses especially.