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Re: Business letter

Feebs11 — Thu, 01 Nov 2007 21:03:13 GMT

Anonymous wrote:

I tripped over these fourms just on accident looking for advice on a formal letter that is due. If it isn't any trouble could someone point out any areas that need revision. here it is:

*** Bunting Drive

North Augusta, *** ***

November 1, 2007

Mr. B

Assistant Academic Dean.

X College

X Road

X-town, State zip code

Dear Mr. B:

Subject: Grade Disputation

The reason ~~why~~ I am contacting you is because of my strong disagreement with my final grade in English 102 (Fall 1, X). I feel that I have received this grade unfairly and wish it to be reviewed. ~~I must emphasize on the imbalanced acts that were made during the quarter.~~

My concerns primarily deal ~~a lot~~ with my final paper. Mr. X informed the class that âeveryoneâ could and should turn their paper in for him to review before the due date. I tried to take advantage of this but was rejected because of Mr. Xâs busy schedule. On September 20th my final paper was due. I had to appear in court and was not able to make it to class (documentation attached). I turned in my paper at the next class and was notified that it would be counted late and after a quick review was told that I would fail the paper. He identified the major format errors I had made within five minutes of looking at my paper. I do not know why he could not have taken five minutes before the class to tell me about these errors that needed to be fixed. I asked if I could quickly change these errors and turn back in a revised copy. I was rudely told, âYesâ¦next quarter.â I was dissatisfied with myself but life goes on.

I left in disappointment and walked to my next class with another one of Mr. Xsâ students. I asked her how she did and was shocked when told that she was allowed to take her essay home and revise it. She forgot to type major parts of her paper and had many format errors. Mr. X told her that if she didnât redo the paper and turn in back in on the 23rd, she would fail (a due-date altered from the rest of the class). I had asked Mr. X for the same privilege minutes before and was denied. When confronted about it, he told me that it did not matter as she failed anyway. I found out when talking to him a second time that she had actually made a âBâ.

The second of my concerns is about my âdaily gradeâ. I ~~just~~ recently found out about this and should also be brought to your attention. Mr. X enlightened me that I had earned a âDâ for my âdaily gradeâ when I initially spoke with him about my disputation. His reasoning behind it was that I slept in class âall the timeâ as he put it. It is hard for me to grasp this because of the fact that we had to write an essay every class besides the first week and a half. The first week and a half was âan exact repeat of English 101â as Mr. X put it. The repetition of the material made it hard to fight dozing off. I saw this in many students' faces. I dozed off twice during this time period. I would like to bring it to your attention that I was not the only one falling asleep during his lectures. It became sort of a joke about Mr. X and his dictionary. He would prop it up acting as if he was reading, but was clearly sleeping. After the introduction of the course, our assignment from then on was to write an essay each class. It is rather hard to fall asleep writing an essay that is due in two hours. I am 100 per cent sure that I was awake for each paper. Not only was I awake for each essay, but I made it a goal to stay in class until everyone had left ~~early~~. He told us that he wanted us to stay the full two hours even if that meant writing another twenty pages. I figured that was the reason I had received such a low grade in English 101.

Yours sincerely,

Cory X

<mod note: Specific names and places have been removed>

Re: Expressing a consequence

Philip — Mon, 01 Oct 2007 16:08:34 GMT

Danish_Duckling wrote:

Dear all,

In the process of writing an essay in English, I've come across the issue of expressing a consequence of something.

For instance;
Yesterday I fell down the stairs. This meant the start of an all new problem for me.

I am, though, rather sure that I've heard someone express themselves with the word "boot", ie;
Yesterday I fell down the stairs. This booted an all new problem for be.

I'm not sure though if this is anywhere close to being correct English, if it's slang or if it's simply not English.

I hope I've made myself understandable, and I hope that someone could provide me with their expert knowledge.

Yours sincerely,

I, myself, wouldn't use the word 'boot' this way, but I think I understand it perfectly. We 'boot' our computer when we start it. I don't know why the term was adopted over the simple 'start', but that's computerese.

Welcome to the forums!

Expressing a consequence

Danish_Duckling — Mon, 01 Oct 2007 16:02:10 GMT

Dear all,

In the process of writing an essay in English, I've come across the issue of expressing a consequence of something.

For instance;
Yesterday I fell down the stairs. This meant the start of an all new problem for me.

I am, though, rather sure that I've heard someone express themselves with the word "boot", ie;
Yesterday I fell down the stairs. This booted an all new problem for be.

I'm not sure though if this is anywhere close to being correct English, if it's slang or if it's simply not English.

I hope I've made myself understandable, and I hope that someone could provide me with their expert knowledge.

Yours sincerely,

Re: I can't think how to make a thesis with this short essay.

Paul92 — Sat, 11 Aug 2007 16:19:19 GMT

If you want to elaborate on the quote, you can easily cook something up, such as:

Since money had been widely utilized, the lust for money has always been abundant. In the ancient times, it is like "He who has money has power......", therefore there has been an assumption that having money is equal to having power. ...................

You can say that money is a representative of social status , money is a "gift in disguise" from the devil (it has given us much convenience and much trouble), money is mostly the reason one steals or dies for, .......

Sorry if I am not of any help, but I have tried my best.

Good luck and hope you get a good grade on the thesis.

Yours sincerely,

Paul92

Re: I need help ....It s urgenntt.....Please help me to correct my cover le

Doll — Tue, 12 Jun 2007 18:02:47 GMT

As we know, SCAN is a section that provides a multi-cultural environment and an international linguistic dimension. All SCAN students benefit from the same high-level scientific teaching in English with the specific feature of the SCAN.

Actually, English is the key of the international communication. In the world of engineering, English is also the key giving access to the fortune of scientific knowledge. To become a successful engineer, in the international environment , it might be necessary to master English. That is also my aim .Joining SCAN, I will have a chance to develop my English/ to make my English perfect, to discover science, with a new methods and new points of view, the anglophone sciences. Also with the help of science, I will have the chance to discover anglophone culture.

     "Enthusiastic" is how I characterized my feelings towards SCAN section. As I always love science (don't use science again and again.I am sure it has a different name, I mean the thing you are talking about.) and foreign languages, during my secondary and high school, I have learnt science in French. With such an experience, I know how effective and interesting it will be to study these scientific subjects through English media. Nothing is easy, and SCAN section motivates me also by its challenges.
     I am confident in my ability to study in English. For the first year at ASINSA, I had English course with ~~the~~ French friends,~~clin the~~ ~~ass 2/4~~. At the end of the first ~~school~~ year, my Toelf score was.....
I believe that having a good knowledge of English will help me have the chance to study at SCAN. ~~About~~ As for the scientific(not scientific again please, three must a branch name of this science) level, I am also ready to confront the new obstacle next year.
      Please consider me as a serious candidate for SCAN section for the next year. You can have a contact with me with the e- mail address below.
I look forward to hearing from you and thank you for your consideration.
Yours sincerely,

I am not sure of punctuation and still fell that this essay is not fluent.

Politely asking for feedback on my letter of motivation

Richard1985 — Wed, 04 Apr 2007 15:52:40 GMT

Hello,

I am Richard, a Dutch undergraduate student applying for a Masters programme in London, England.
As a part of the application form, I have to give 'further information' , which I interpreted as roughly analogous to a letter of motivation:

"
9. Further Information
Please state your interest in the subject and give information on any related activities, relevant courses and projects. Continue on a separate sheet if necessary.
"

I have written a first draft, and I was wondering if some of you would be willing to comment on it. I have read several other posts on the forum, and found them most informative.
I welcome comments on any aspects, but especially suspect myself of being a little too enamoured with comma's. Also, the end lacks in zest, I realise I will have to work some more on at least that part , and there is a small bit about some research I am doing at the moment, which I don't know where to place. Comments on any other subjects are also very much appreciated. Thanks!

Dear Sir, Madam,

My enthusiasm for your course in International Studies is engendered both by its specific content and by its method of instruction. The programme is perfectly suited to my aim in pursuing a Masters degree in International Studies, namely acquiring a thorough empirical knowledge of the various social and political structures in East Asia, both at the national and international level. I have already, besides my philosophy studies at the Radboud University Nijmegen, followed a half-year course on contemporary Asia, at the University of Amsterdam. Through its courses, this program gave me some knowledge about various parts of East Asian social and political structures, and it certainly whetted my appetite for a more thorough investigation into East Asian societies. During my philosophy studies, I have focused on political, social and cultural philosophy. Among the topics treated in those courses, two chime especially well with the modules available.

First, there are the various theories concerning political and social practice in democracies, some descriptive but most normative, like the theories of Rawls and Habermas. Their normative character theoretically makes them context-independent, but in practice they seem to be elevating an abstracted version of the political and social systems in contemporary Europe and the USA to the status of ideal political system. Through modules like âPolitics and History of Japan and East Asiaâ, âThe Politics of Culture in Contemporary Chinaâ and âIntroduction to Contemporary Chinese Cultures and Societiesâ, I hope to gain an understanding of the structure of civil society in these countries, and to use this knowledge to refine notions about civil society and its role in a democracy, instead of dismissing non-complying structures outright as flawed, as is often done. A possible outcome might be a âvarieties of democracyâ hypothesis, mirroring the âvarieties of capitalismâ paradigm which has surfaced in economics these last few decades.

A second set of modules, âAsia and Globalisationâ, âInternational Relations I: Theoretical Perspectivesâ and âNation, Transnationalism and Globalism in East Asiaâ, could function in very much the same way for political philosophy concerning international relations and globalisation. This field has been burgeoning over the last decades, without, however, yielding a limited number of guiding theories. Here I have no specific research object in mind, but I feel that this is a subject which will see the most interesting new theorizing in years to come. Knowledge about the complex interstate relations, both within the area and between these countries and the world at large, may function as an empirical touchstone and hopefully even illuminate the way in which an understanding of these processes should be sought.

It is not just the content of your modules which appeals to me; your method of instruction, focused on interactive group work following student and staff presentations, mirrors the more fruitful modules I have taken. The Radboud Universityâs Honours Programme, an extra-curricular programme for selected students, is explicitly centred around thorough student discussions of the literature prepared, guided by the staff. In my experience, this results in a far more nuanced understanding of the subject, and especially its pitfalls, than an ordinary staff lecture. This method of instruction, coupled with assessment by essays, also promotes the development of skill in arguing clearly and succinctly both on paper and verbally, an attribute which can never be honed well enough.

In short, your programme in International Studies chimes perfectly with my research interests, and its method of instruction is a most fruitful one. I look forward to continuing my academic education and research at your institution.

Yours Sincerely,

Richard

Here's the part I want to splice in somewhere:
I am currently writing my Bachelor thesis on the shifts in the intellectual debate in late Tokugawa and early Meiji Japan, and its relation with the vast changes in institutions and governance around the same time.

I could expand a bit on this, make it into its own short paragraph, but it doesn't seem to fit into the current format. I would, however, like to include something about research I've done. So I don't really know what to do with it. Any ideas?

Re: Could someone please check my motivational letter for me? Thanks.

Savvysavz — Wed, 26 Oct 2005 16:39:54 GMT

Hi SabianX,

I brushed your essay a bit but mind you, I'm not a native. It's not a good idea to start a letter with 'having completed'.Ok, here we go:

____________________________________________________

Dear Sir or Madam, Bonn,24.10.2005

I am (please delete now) very keen to study (delete for) the Master of Science course in Public Policy and Human Development offered at the University of Maastricht. I completed my Bachelor of Arts degree in Sociology and International Relations at the University of Reading,England in July 2005.

I did my schooling upto the tenth grade in Germany.I then decided to continue my education in England to improve my English learning skills and experience a foreign culture. I was so impressed by the international climate of the English school (please delete which )I attended that I stayed on to complete my A-levels in Mathematics, Biology and History. I then decided to continue in an English University and focus my career aspirations on an area that relates to globalisation.

My studies in mathematics at school (delete also) included two years of (delete classes in) Statistics, (delete the final exams of) which I completed with a C+. (delete Apart from that I am positive that) I benefited a lot from (delete all) the courses I attended during my time at the University of Reading when studying Public Policy and Human Development. We especially focussed on issues of international migration, class and inequality, social stratification, race and nationalism, as well as the forth going European political integration. In addition to my studies of Sociology and International Relations I also studied (delete the) Spanish (delete language), achieving very high marks in the final exam. (why not write your Spanish mark since it's good?)

I decided to apply for the Master of Science in Public Policy and Human Development at the University of Maastricht for several reasons. The first reason is that the course offers a specialised insight into the aspects of global issues which interests me the most, namely globalisation, trade and development, as well as issues of social policy. In my view a stable and regulated social policy is the key to creating positive, and most importantly, sustainable(delete comma)changes in education, trade and health around the globe. The second reason for applying is that the University of Maastricht is higly reputed for producing outstanding graduates throughout its faculties, a fact that greatly contributed to my decision of applying. The third reason, though not important to the course, also impacted on my decision. After visiting the campus and town of Maastricht I (delete think) feel that it comprises a warm and friendly climate, which will surely contribute to making me feel welcome and enjoy my studies there. After considering these aspects, applying to the MSc in Public Policy and Human Development at your esteemed university was my natural choice at this point of my career.

I am now working since three months at the German Federal Ministry for Economic Cooperation and Development in Bonn. The department I work with concentrates on the regional policies in the Middle East, with a heavy focus on the education of children and adults alike.

Thank you for taking your time in considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours sincerely,

Sebastian Kuehn

Re: Request for valuable and experienced suggestion how I can make Motivation Letter better.

anon1 — Wed, 22 Dec 2004 17:35:19 GMT

akb,

I think you need to tighten the integration between your opening paragraph and the rest of your essay. Knowledge corresponds to which paragraphs. Skills corresponds to which paragraphs. etc. You also want to make sure that you provide adequate disclosure on each adjective. Where you stuff is comingled, you need to tell the reader that. They won't assume it for you. Imagine you are taking a red pen and drawing arrows from "knowledge" "skills" "experience" and "dedication" to the relevant key words in your essay.

Good luck.

MountainHiker

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am applying for the Masterâs Degree (? better ?) programme in International Humanitarian Action.

I will highlight my relevant knowledge, skills, experience, [and dedication?] that qualify me for admission to your programme. Upon graduation, I will return to the not-for-profit sector as a health professional with a solid background and training in humanitarian aid work.

I earned my medical degree in 2000. I chose the health (or healthcare?) profession because I have always enjoyed helping people and being a doctor allows me to both help and heal people. I worked as the person in charge of Basic Health Unit in the rural area of district X. My responsibilities included supervision, surveillance, monitoring, reporting of public health activities as well as recruiting, training and teaching of healthcare workers. I gained more exposure to administration aspect of healthcare. Thus, I have a solid foundation of both medical practice and administration.

I completed my post graduate degree in public health from country X .When I started my MPH course at X(city), X (country), I was unsure how my degree would further career aspirations. However, as I proceeded with my Masterâs Degree, I gained increased confidence in my abilities to analyze of disease patterns and databases, to recognize of potential risks, and to plan and act in a timely action. Furthermore while writing my thesis and working in the summer in biochemistry laboratory, I gained more valuable exposure to research. During my post graduate work, I became increasingly interested in the relationship between health and humanitarian work, and I realised the importance of public health in the alleviation of suffering of humanity.

[The above deals with knowledge?]

International humanitarian action depends heavily on the skills of its medical aid team to deal with natural disasters, to provide medical care to outreach people and to care for those affected from war and conflict. [I am thinking here, âso what?â If this is your skills, you need to specify YOUR skills?]

The experience of living in such sharp contrast to my life in X (city), X(country), has given me a broader view of the world and the ability to adapt to different cultures. The experience of education at University X, country X, one of the most developed countries, has given me maturity and dedication that I will bring to this programme. [experience paragraph, no?] [ I would add something to the effect that your ALL your , volunteer work, to be mentioned shortly, education, and work has provided experience.]

[I introduced the word dedication above ârelevant knowledge, skills, experience, [and dedication?]â because I need to see where you are going with this stuff. So if you like âdedicationâ, you need to use that word in the next paragraph or two to anchor this stuff back to your opening paragraph.]
Since my teenage years I have always found it interesting to work for the suffering people. I joined Leo Club, a sponsored programme by Lions International in 1990 to serve community by doing meaningful work and help those less fortunate as well as to learn leadership skills by leading projects. Since then I worked for different non-governmental organizations such as eye camps, a blood bank, and a non-profit fundraising institution for the cancer patient. I have always enjoyed my volunteer work.

Moreover, my volunteer work has strengthened my organization and management skills. For example, I worked as a part of team on the student magazineâs editorial board during university where I learned to effectively manage people and their personalities as well as manage tight deadlines. I also served as an elected class representative in the second year of medical college.

With my personal traits and medical background, I am confident that I will perform well and provide a meaningful contribution as a humanitarian medical aid worker. Living in a developing country, we need those who have specialized qualifications to address the complex medical issues. Most of the international non-profit sector lacks well-trained local professionals to run their projects in developing countries. Being a health professional, I intend to work for humanitarian assistance where I can use my dedication, skills, knowledge and enthusiasm to best advantage. [this paragraph seems to fit better here, no?]

The Masterâs Degree programme in International Humanitarian Action is the next necessary step towards fulfillin my career ambition. Moreover, the aim of the programme is consistent with my academic background, experience, and future aspirations. I am confident that with the knowledge, experience, skills, and helpful contacts gained through this programme I will be well positioned to deal with complex medical aid issues and meet the challenges of humanitarian work.

Thank you very much for your time and considering my request. I look forward to your positive reply.

Yours sincerely,

[1]This is medical graduate degree . equivalent to MD
It was the âgraduationâ that was bothering me. I think it is fixed now.

Re: An essay about debating

franco2004 — Tue, 23 Nov 2004 06:32:50 GMT

Dear Julielai:
Thank you for your commets,and your reply encourages me write the compositions better.

yours sincerely

Fanzhongcui

A motivation letter for a scholarship

qksilver10320 — Thu, 07 Oct 2004 11:30:36 GMT

is there a particular format to a letter of motivation for a scholarship? does it look like a letter where my name and address are at the top, followed by the date, name and address of the person i'm writing to and "yours sincerely" at the end with my signature? or should i write it in an essay format?

if anybody still have old letter of motivations saved in your computer, i'd appreciate if you could post it in this board. I just need to see the format. what's the appropriate length anyway? thank you