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xox esme xox — Thu, 20 Nov 2008 10:09:59 GMT

Hey everyone,
i was just wondering if you could cheak this essay for me please. It's a creative writting essay about a scary experience.

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One of my scariest experiences happened when I was babysitting. It was the first time I had ever babysat Coco. I think she was about two, all dressed in clothes from Pumpkin Patch. She also had these big blue eyes and platinum blond, curly hair. She was honestly one of the most adorable two year olds I had ever met.

The weather was awful, really cold and windy. It was just getting dark as I walked up the drive to their house. The house was kind of old and a bit shabby with decrepit trees scattered round it. I was kind of scared as I knocked on the front door. I had never met Coco and I had only met Anna (Cocoâs mum) once. I heard cocoâs little feet patter down the stairs, followed by her mothers and i knew that I was just being silly. Coco would be fine.

She was, we did giant alphabet floor puzzles, played train and read story books. It was only really after I had put her to bed that I started to get scared. I could here this banging in one of the down stairs rooms. Just a tiny tap to start with, you know just like âtapâ¦tap tap tapâ¦.tap tapâ but then it started to get louder and louder. I just sat on the couch, hugged my knees and turned the T.V up a bit.

I could still hear it. What if it was someone who was coming to break in or kill me or something like that? What if someone had followed me and I just hadnât realized? What if someone else was in the room with me and he was hiding behind one of the frayed brown sofas, just getting ready to pounce on me?

About 5 minutes later I convinced myself to go down stairs and see what it was. Cautiously I tip toed down the stairs. I got about half way down before I sprinted back up. I told myself to stop being so stupid and just go down so once again I tiptoed down the stairs.

There wasnât really anything in the room. Just a few boxes and some tins of paint. I was just staring to feel like it was my imagination when suddenly I heard a loud âtap tapâ coming from behind me. I span round, expecting to see some skin head holding a massive dagger or something like that.

Instead I saw a tree planted a little too close to the window!

I just thought it would be a good idea to run it through you guys. sorry if i posted this in the wrong section but i had no idea which one too choose.

Thanks.
Esme
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NEED HELP. RESEARCH PAPER!

kandlerirene — Wed, 19 Nov 2008 02:29:09 GMT

I have an essay due.. well TOMMOROW! and i'm stressing because of my thesis:
my thesis is " The great gatsby is an irony whereas it is argued otherwise as a tragedy.."
first off, i don't know how to state that, and how to start off my paper.

Re: essay: attending college or university

ferpectedit — Thu, 13 Nov 2008 18:03:57 GMT

I work for an online editing and proofreading service. Please see my profile for more information. I won't do the whole essay here, but I will show you how I would revise your first paragraph.

Study is the most important activity in which we can engage. We learn throughout our whole lives. Everyone wants to have more knowledge. University is where one goes to gain the highest level of education. In university, students can prepare for a career, increase knowledge, and be exposed to new experiences.

I tried to clarify, sometimes guessing at your meaning. I removed awkward, ungrammatical or overly informal phrases like "thing in our life" and "want to study more than what they get in the present." Also avoid vague references to "people" when you can. "Students" is a good substitute here. In the rest of the essay (and maybe starting in the first paragraph) you should try to be more specific, as the question instructs, about why someone you know or someone you have studied or admired went to university.

help with essay

kulsum — Fri, 03 Oct 2008 15:30:52 GMT

i need to write an essay on 'if paper was not invented' . it has to be around 700 words
please give me some key points so i can expand
VERY VERY URGENT

Re: please correct this

ferpectedit — Tue, 09 Sep 2008 22:39:48 GMT

It's a long essay for this sort of question, but I'll edit the first sentence for you.
I am in my senior year of college, about to graduate in a few months.
You don't need to include "currently attending college", since being in your senior year (and about to graduate) already tells the reader that you are a student.

I'll let someone else take it from there. Maybe we can get a sentence-by-sentence answers for you.

Help me edit my perosnal statement THANK YOU

davidzhaos — Sun, 07 Sep 2008 15:44:01 GMT

My mom once told me a story about the lion and the deer. She said on the African grassland the deer mother tells her children when they run, they must run faster than the slowest deer because if they don't, then they will get eaten by the lion. The lion mother also tells her children when they run, they must run faster than the slowest deer, because if they donât, then they will not catch any deer and starve to death.

This story has taught me a variable lesson: it taught me to always try my hardest because other are trying their as well. This is why during my junior year in high school, I decided to push myself to the limit, to get the best out of myself by taking as many AP classes.

During my junior year I decided to challenge myself academically by taking as many AP classes I can. I took three AP classes including world history, chemistry and language. These AP classes were all difficult but I wanted push myself to the best of my ability. Of these three classes AP world history was easiest for me because I read a lot of books on history so I had a lot of background information. As result I was able to get A on every single history tests and score a five on the AP exam. AP chemistry was much harder for me, in chemistry I had to work more then any other class I had ever taken. Every night I would start doing chemistry homework at eight and not finish until twelve clock. But during this time I always worked as hard as I can and in the end the result of my hard works was clear; I was able to learn chemistry and score a five on the AP exam. The last AP class I took was AP language. It was my weakest subject. I am was born in China and English was my second language so even my parents werenât sure if I am ready to take this class. In the end I still decided to take it because I wanted to challenge myself. In that class I had to write one essay every week and write a ten pages research essay for the first semester. In the end I was able to survive it with a b average and a three on the AP exam. It wasn't perfect, but I tried my best and as result I am proud of result.

Throughout my junior year I always tried my hardest whatever is in school. This is because I know if I tried my best, I will have the greatest chance of succeeding.

Can you help me edit my college appliaction essay?

davidzhaos — Sun, 07 Sep 2008 15:39:42 GMT

b. The world is a better (or worse) place because of the computer chip.

Image yourself not being able to talk instantly to your friends or able to find information at lighting speed, what would life be like? This would be what life would be like without computer chip. The computer chip (whole computer technology) is one of the most significant advancement in the twentieth-century. It affect every single person who has access to it and affect the world as a whole. Computer technology has vastly improve world, whatever is your personal life or the world as a whole.

Computer has affect our individual life dramatically. People say knowledge is power, the computer chip allow us Internet access that can delivery huge amount of knowledge that we would not been to access before. Though the use of Internet, we can access information from classic Greek text to instant news on world event all with a touch of bottom. The Internet also have made the World a smaller place, connecting million of people who would not been able to keep in touch. Even without Internet, the computer is extremely helpful, With thousand of software from word that allow us to write and store document to game and more, it has made our life easier and funnier. The computer has help us so much that we have come to depend on it.

The computer also dramatically improve the world as a whole. For example in medical advancement, computer communication technology allow doctors to access information on new drugs and communicate with each other doctors with ease that allow them diagnosis and

cure medical conditions much quicker. More directly, micro chip allow new medical devices such as Ultrasound sensors and Electronic thermometer that save people life. Beside use in medical, chip is also important in many other fields such as space exploration. All current space vehicle such satellite and space shuttle all require computer chip to function. The progress in computer chip allow our society as a whole to advance that accomplish tasks that we benefit us.

Computer chip has made this world a better place. Although it has it own faults such as improving military technology that make war much more deadly, it has much more advantage such as improvement in our daily life and our society as a whole that these advantage outweigh the disadvantages.

Can someone proof read this essay?

Masterse7en — Wed, 27 Aug 2008 19:55:18 GMT

I really need someone to proof read this essay for my english class.
The instructions are:
Critique Oedipus Rex using mythological stratagies. 700 to 800 words. MLA format.
This essay will offer YOUR OPINION. Write in 3rd person. Keep plot summary to a minimum.

My e-mail is: <removed by mod: Please include it in your profile only.>

Here is the Essay:

Oedipus the Proud

Myths and legends have been a part of almost every culture in the world. Most began as word of mouth stories and transcended into plays, short stories and novels. Many of these involve a plague, quest, or prophecy that needs to be resolved by the end of the story. The protagonist will usually have to go through some kind of change by the end of the story in order to solve the quest, save the city, or the culture. The citizens of Thebes depended on these myths and legends to explain the events in their lives.

âOedipus the Kingâ is no exception. Within the first few lines, we can see that Oedipus is the character that must change in this story due to his abundant pride. He comes out of the palace and almost immediately announces his pride to the reader when he asks the priest âwhy are you here? Huddling at my alter, praying before meâ¦â (Sophocles lines 2-3). From the priest response, the reader hears of a âraging plague in all its vengeanceâ (36) on the city and a âblight on the fresh crops and the rich pasturesâ (31-32). This points to the things that need to be resolved by the end of the story. Oedipus attempts to resolve the problems the city faces by sending Creon to consult with the oracle. This again, points out Oedipusâs pride in that he thinks he is too good to go to the oracles himself.

Almost immediately Creon returns and announces the commands of the God Apollo, âPay the killers back â whoever is responsibleâ (122), referring to the killer of the late king Laius. Due to his pride, Oedipus decides to solve the problem himself and during his ranting about the killer we hear what must be resolved to save the city: âHe is the plague, the heart of our corruptionâ¦Now my curse on the murdererâ¦let that man drag out his life in agony, step by painful step â I curse myself as wellâ¦â (276-284). So now the reader can see the main problem in the story, the killer of Laius must come to justice. And now that we have a plague and a quest, we can finally get to the prophecy.

From the time Oedipus was born, the same prophecy had plagued him, âYou are fated to couple with your mother, you will bring a breed of children into the light no man can bear to see â you will kill your father, the one who gave you life!â (873-875).

Laius and Jocasta were given this prophecy when Oedipus was born, and Oedipus was given it when he was an adult in the city of Delphi, reiterating the importance of the prophecy. The reader knows that Oedipus did indeed kill his father that day on the road to Delphi when he was too proud to move to the side and allow Laius to pass, but at this point in the story, Oedipus is too proud to realize this. So now we have all the elements for a good mythological story, we just need a change in the protagonist to relieve the plague, solve the quest, and complete the prophecy.

Once Oedipus realizes that he was the one who killed Laius, he now knows the prophecy has come true. He has in fact married his mother and fathered their children and yet he still holds to his pride. Oedipus canât help but hope that no one else will find out what he has done so he calls on the one person who can allow him to escape persecution; he commands the shepherd to retell the events that led to Laiusâs death. This retelling of the story only confirms to Jocasta what she already knows, that she married her son and fathered their children. With this realization, Jocasta hangs herself and when Oedipus finds her, only then does he begin to change. Oedipus now knows and realizes the prophecy has come true and in his agony, he tore out his eyes with Jocastaâs brooch.

At last, after things have calmed down, Oedipus begins his foreseen change while ranting to Creon, âdrive me out of the land at once, far from sight, where I can never hear a human voiceâ (1572-1573). At this point in the story, the reader can see Oedipusâs pride begin to slip. The final turning point, when the plague is lifted, the quest and prophecy has been resolved is when Oedipus asks of Creon, âI command you â I beg youâ¦â(1584), at this point, he has let go and all pride has been lost. So as all myths and legends go, the quest, the city, and the culture have been saved.

Help. Could you please comments on my essay? Thanks a lot

bmatt — Mon, 25 Aug 2008 15:04:25 GMT

The question is: Today people in different countries can see the same movies, watch the same TV programs and follow the same fashions. To what extent do you think this is a positive development? Following is my essay. As the technology is advancing, movies, TV programs and fashion are increasingly accessible to people over the world. However, many people start to argue about whether this phenomenon has positive impact on us. From my point of view, I agree that it brings human many advantages, but it has short comes too. Convincing argument can be made that same movies, TV programs and fashions could benefit people in different countries. To start with, I would like to point out that people who watch the same movies and TV programs or follow same fashions are more likely to have same values. In other words, it makes people easier to communicate to each other. Moreover, movies and TV programs is an excellent tool to promote culture and people of a country. Therefore, it could make other parts of the world to understand this country easier and better. For example, the America soap opera show âFriendsâ is showing part of the American culture and it became a useful tool for people who are interested in America to learn its culture. Lastly, follow the same fashions could reduce costs for cloths companies. Try to imagine the âone design suite allâ situation which can make manufacturers spend less money on making different designs for different regions. On the other hand, it is not without any risks by people to have same movies, TV programs and fashions globally. One argument could be made in favor of this is that it makes the world lost its diversity. The reason is that people who watch same movies, TV programs and follow same fashions are tend to establish similar values and believes, event this means they need to give up their cultures and believes. Even so, the local education and society still can influence individuals in the sense of cultures and believes, and to avoid such thing happen. For example, many people in my age watched a vast number of American TV shows, but they are still with Chinese culture because of impacts which came from education and surrounding people. In conclusion, I would concede that it has drawbacks for people in different countries to watch same movie and TV programs, and follow same fashions. Despite that, people received more benefits. Overall, I am convinced that we should keep open arms to them, and we should learn from them but not follow them blindly. could you please comments on my writing? many thanks!!!! Lei

can someone help me edit my essays?

davidzhaos — Sat, 16 Aug 2008 00:38:39 GMT

hi can someone help me edit two essays?
1. If you could invent one useful thing for humankind, what would it be? Describe the invention and its impact.

In US today, one of the most significant issues we are facing is the automobile. Currently automobile produces the second largest amount of CO2 gas, the leading cause of environment damage and is cause oil crisis we are experiencing today. It is said that necessity is the mother of invention. Well, one of today greatest necessity is the need to replace conventional gasoline automobile and as result I would like to invent a eclectic power car that just do that. By using electricity rather than gasoline, my new electric automobile will solve both the environment problems and oil crisis cause by conventional automobile.

But first of all, what is my new electric automobile? It is a conventional design compact car that will use electricity rather than gasoline to power itself. This new car will feature four 36 by 24 inches solar cells located on the roof of the it that will allow the car to convert sunlight into electric power. It will also feature a 36 by 24 by 24 inches lead-acid battery located in the retractable hardtop of the car to store power. This new car will replace the conventional gasoline engine with an all new electric power engine that will use the electric energy store in the lead-acid battery to power the itself. During day time this car will use energy from solar cells to power itself and during night time or in other conditions such as rain where the car does not have access to sunlight, it will rely on the energy store in its lead-acid battery to power its engine. Last of all, this new vehicle will also has plug-in battery ability that will allow the car's acid-lead battery to be recharge by connecting a plug into electric power source such a electric power grid.

One of the major advantage my new electric automobile over conventional automobile is environment friendly. Although today cars allow us to travel faster and further, they also produce 1.5 billion tons of CO2 annually. CO2 is one of the major threats to our environment today. When this insidious gas is emission from the car, it can mix with cloud and create acidic rain. Acidic rain is extreme harmful as it can destroy farmlands and damage city's buildings. Worse, increase CO2gas in atmosphere can also increase the greenhouse effect, which trap heat absorb from sun. This increase in heat can lead to global warming, a serious threat to our survival. Global warming can melt ice in both North and South poles that will raise ocean level and consume our land. It can also increase in the intensity of extreme weather such as cyclone and increased pace of desertification that degrade land into desert. Overall CO2 can cause major damages to our environment that will make Earth unsuitable to human. As result by replacing conventional gasoline automobile with my electric automobile, we can stop producing this deadly every time we drive, thus protecting the environment.

Another threat that results from conventional automobile is the oil crisis we are facing today. Every time we drive our automobile we use gasoline. Not only does this cause co2 emission that damages the environment, but it also cost us a large amount of money. In US, the average person buys 16 barrels of oil each year, that is $1400 a year! Think of the all the things we can buy and all the money we can save if we didnât waste all that money on oil. Even worse US didn't make all the oil it need, as result US has to import 60% of oil. Our current major supply of oil is from Middle East. This is very damage since this makes us depend on foreign oil. If anytime Middle East stop the flow the oil to us, it would seriously damage our economy such what happen in 1973 oil crisis. By switching to my new eclectic, not only will we save money by stopping buying expensive gasoline, it will also stop USâs dependence on foreign oil.

Although nothing is perfect, though progress we make thing closer and closer to perfect. Today gasoline automobile have many faults including the environment damage and dependence on oil it cause, thought progress I can invent a new electric car that solve these problems and a more step toward perfect.

2.

My mom once told me a story about the lion and the deer. She said on the African grassland the deer mother tells her children when they run, they must run faster than the slowest deer because if they don't, then they will get eaten by the lion. The lion mother also tells her children when they run, they must run faster than the slowest deer, because if they donât, then they will not catch any deer and will starve to death.

This story has taught me a variable lesson. It has taught me to always try my hardest because other are trying their as well. This is why during my junior year in high school, I challenged myself and tried my hardest by taking as many AP classes as I can while constantly volunteering outside of school.

During my junior year I decided to challenge myself academically by taking as many AP classes I can. I took three AP classes including world history, chemistry and language. These AP classes were very hard, but I wanted push myself to the best of my ability. Of these three classes AP world history was easiest for me because I read a lot of books on history so I had a lot of background information. As result I was able to get a on every single history tests and score a five on the AP exam. The AP chemistry and AP Language were both a lot harder than history for me. In chemistry I had to work harder in that class then any other class I have ever taken. Every night I would start doing chemistry homework and study for chemistry at eight and not finish until twelve clock. But during this time I always worked as hard as I can and in the end the result of my hard works was clear; I was able to learn chemistry and score a five on the AP exam. The last AP class I took was AP language. It was my weakest subject. I am an Asian American and English was my second language so even my parents werenât sure if I am ready to take this class. In the end I still decided to take it because I wanted to challenge myself. In that class I had to write one essay every week and write a ten pages research essay for the first semester. In the end I was able to survive it with a b average and a three on the AP exam. It wasn't perfect, but I tried my best and as result I am proud of it.

During all this time I still volunteer every week by working in the hospital and protecting the environment. Every Monday I choose to volunteer at the hospital as a cashier in the gift shop department. I choose to work there not only because I want to serve my community, but also to improve my interaction skill (I have to constantly talk to different people and answer their question while working as a cashier). Also every other Saturday I help protect the environment by working with an organization to pick up and recycle trashes on the street. At the beginning of the year I had my friends volunteering with me at both of these places, but as the time go by all all my friends quit volunteering either because they became too lazy or didn't have enough time. However I never quit both place I wanted to try my hardest and not give up.

Throughout my junior I always tried my hardest whatever is in school and when I am volunteering. This is because I know if I tried my best, I will have the greatest chance of succeeding.