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Re: Please delete my thread "Argumentative essay writing, please help me!!!"

Mister Micawber — Fri, 16 May 2008 14:12:45 GMT

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Forums do not work that way, Mizh. Once a post acquires a response, the earlier post cannot be changed. For the future, please ensure that you have adequately thought out what you want to write before you post it.

Please help my writing improve

Belly — Fri, 16 May 2008 14:07:14 GMT

"Save for a rainy day"

"Sacrificing for the future is fine for many, but for some of us, it may never come. Enjoy the present, for it is the only thing of which we all are certain."

While some hold the idea of indulging as much as you can for now, others advise sacrifice for our future. In my opinion, it's absolutely necessary for one to save his future because the purpose of our life is to work for their beloved's benefit. This essay will discuss why people have to save their future by swinging into action today.

First of all, if we don't get goal, we will never achieve anything. As said, our purpose of this ephemeral life is to work for our beloved's benefit. It would be bad if we just sit there and overindulge. Nothing will be accomplised, thus we would be considered" a loser". After all, our life is just a mess.

The second reason why we should sacrifice for our future is inside and outside factors. Over-indulgence can debilitate over physical as well as mental strength. Therefore, we would be in a sluggish state and soon lose our taste in life. Moreover, if you enjoy yourself too much, you'll soon get bored. Then you may catch yourself asking" Why is there nothing for me to do?" In constrast, there are lots of interesting stuff awating for you at the same time.

I once hold the idea of reveling myself in too much entertainment when I was at grade 9. I slept late and let loose myself for about a week. The next days then turned into series of lethargy and sleep deprivation and all they lead to my poor performance on the final examination. Hence, I had to study in a mediorce high school, which I now regret having applied in.

So, by and large, I believe our sacrifice for the future certainly brings god result. Even if you are nearly die, you can do something really beneficial to your living relations and the living world. After my children are born, I will instruct them not to waste their present doing trivial things which can lead to their failure in school performance and later, in life.

Thanks in advance

Re: Please delete my thread "Argumentative essay writing, please help me!!!"

Mister Micawber — Fri, 16 May 2008 08:48:01 GMT

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Sorry-- a moderator has already responded and offered some good advice, which is valuable for other members. I suggest that you follow Clive's advice and repost on the same thread.

Please delete my thread "Argumentative essay writing, please help me!!!"

Mizh — Fri, 16 May 2008 00:57:39 GMT

Hi moderators and administrators, can you delete my thread.

I've changed my mind and I want to write another essay!

Please!

Re: Argumentative essay writing, please help me!!!

Clive — Thu, 15 May 2008 12:04:23 GMT

Hi,

First, you need to organize your thoughts into several paragraphs. This helps the reader to understand the way you are thinking about the topic, and to easily see the various points that you are making. Nobody really wants to read one huge paragraph.

So, please change this and repost.

Bets wishes, Clive

Argumentative essay writing, please help me!!!

Mizh — Thu, 15 May 2008 08:01:03 GMT

Hi everyone,

I just started m English courses 2 months ago. Could you help me and give feedback?

Does it flow? Could you understood me?

PUBLIC TRANSPORT SHOULD BE FREE FOR EVERYONE IN ADELAIDE

According to the Royal Automobile Association, Adelaide once had the reputation as Australiaâs â20- minute cityâ because 20 minutes were enough to access the city centre from all parts of the urban area. Today, its peak hour traffic congestion caused by a high private vehicle ownership rate puts Adelaide is in the unenviable position of the worst of any Australian capital city (Austroads, 2007). Many argue that solely free public transport may solve the traffic flow problem in Adelaide. However, introducing absolutely free public transport would result in a massive overloading of the whole public transport system and road network, to the extent that it might collapse altogether. This essay will consider the necessity of free public transport and will discuss that it is better to improve public transport services rather than making it free.It has been argued that free public transport may be the best way of reducing congestion on cityâs increasingly car-clogged roads (Fisher). This could be a valid point since free public transport encourages Adelaideans leave their cars at home and use public transport. However, boost in public transport patronage will require a public transport extension. Currently, 89% of Adelaide Metro public transport system consists of buses and most of the suburbs are connected by buses (Adelaide Metro, 2008). Thus, a demanded public transport extension will increase the amount of buses, which in turns will increase a pressure on bus system. According to Sam Powrie, the deputy char of Bicycle Institute of South Australia, it is doubtable that Adelaide will ever afford required bus system to entirely serve distances over Adelaideâs 90km by 30km sprawl footprint (2008). So it is clear that such inadequate public transportation turning numbers of people to private automobiles. Therefore, at the present and in the course of some years it would be better to improve public transport system integrated with an advanced road and railway network instead of making it free.It could be contended that by using a free public transport the commuters may save money on transportation expenses. While this may be true in some cases, the Government would be forced to increase other taxes to afford free public transport and employ a staff that is needed for passengers' assistance and security. This means that increased usage frequency of public transport would cost more to taxpayers. Professor Fisher (The Age 2006) in his recent work on public transport said that free public transport would cost $340 million per year for Melbourne. Meanwhile, the State's public transport improvement and road infrastructure budget for 2007- 2010 is just $542 million (Castello, Nakervis & Novak 2007). Logically, it is better to invest additional $340 million per year to improve services and public transport in Adelaide. Also, Corolan, the executive chief of Metlink, said, "The evidence is people are more sensitive to those improvements than they are to price. If we made it free, we would have less money to invest in the system, whereas what we really need is more money to invest" (cited in Brimbauer 2006). In other words, people would use public transport on which they can rely and where they feel themselves comfortable. They will know that paid money is being invested in public transport. Furthermore, more passengers more fares collected, public transport system would investment its revenue in a high- standard road network and extensive public transport service. So, it would be more beneficial to have reasonably priced public transport.Overall, free public transport is not the only solution for current situation in Adelaide. Adelaide's whole public transport system requires a development. Sustainable and organised public transport would attract more people rather than unreliable and free public transport. As a result, improved public transport with reasonable ticketing prices could defray its own expenses. Also, it could encourage people to leave their cars at home, which in turns, would significantly reduce congestion in Adelaide's streets.

Re: please check my essay on "dance is my favorite sport" it's due tomorrow:(

Mister Micawber — Thu, 15 May 2008 04:55:28 GMT

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I have underlined some problem areas:

Dance is my favorite sport

Ever since I was a little girl dance has always been my favorite sport. When I was three, I would put glitter on my face and run around the house twirling. Dance is and has always been my passion. Maybe itâs [avoid contractions] the control of the dancerâs body to execute each move flawlessly that enraptures me? Or it could be the look on the dancersâ face that says theyâre loving what theyâre doing? Either way ~~I absolutely love dance.~~ It brings such joy to so many people, both the person dancing and the people watching.

Some people may disagree and say âdance is not a sport!â But I say it is. Sports require pushing your ~~physical~~ body to reach itâs maximum performance level. Just as body-builders mush exercise and prepare their bodies, dancers must also. Body-builders ~~and muscle-men~~ have large, bulky, and strong muscles because of the foods they eat and the work-outs they do; dancers have long, lean, and strong muscles because they do different work-outs than body-builders.

Dance is great! However it still has some issues that come with it. It costs a lot of money to get good training, you may acquire a lot of injuries due to mistakes or improper stretching, and it is A LOT of work just to be good at it. Even though it is a lot of work with a lot of risks, I believe that itsâ good outweighs the bad. You learn life lessons from dance class and from your dance teacher.

Dance has helped me in a lot of areas; I am very athletic, strong, and I have high self esteem. I am encouraged now more than ever to try my best in class, at competitions, and in life in general. I remember the day I bought my first pair of Pointe shoes. They were so perfect and pretty. I can still see my face [in the mirror??] lit up with joy. Every time I go to dance class Iâm taken back to that moment where nothing else mattered but mastering the art of ballet.

~~So in conclusion,~~ dance is a perfect example of everything I want to be when Iâm older: Strong, beautiful, hopeful, and absolutely perfect. I know Iâm not completely those things now, but I can strive to become them as I get older. And that is why dance is my favorite sport.

please check my essay on "dance is my favorite sport" it's due tomorrow:(

lizz01 — Thu, 15 May 2008 03:15:12 GMT

Dance is my favorite sport

Ever since I was a little girl dance has always been my favorite sport. When I was three, I would put glitter on my face and run around the house twirling. Dance is and has always been my passion. Maybe itâs the control of the dancerâs body to execute each move flawlessly that enraptures me? Or it could be the look on the dancersâ face that says theyâre loving what theyâre doing? Either way I absolutely love dance. It brings such joy to so many people, both the person dancing and the people watching.

Some people may disagree and say âdance is not a sport!â But I say it is. Sports require pushing your physical body to reach itâs maximum performance level. Just as body-builders mush exercise and prepare their bodies, dancers must also. Body-builders and muscle-men have large, bulky, and strong muscles because of the foods they eat and the work-outs they do; dancers have long, lean, and strong muscles because they do different work-outs than body-builders.

Dance has helped me in a lot of areas; I am very athletic, strong, and I have high self esteem. I am encouraged now more than ever to try my best in class, at competitions, and in life in general. I remember the day I bought my first pair of Pointe shoes. They were so perfect and pretty. I can still see my face lit up with joy. Every time I go to dance class Iâm taken back to that moment where nothing else mattered but mastering the art of ballet.

So in conclusion, dance is a perfect example of everything I want to be when Iâm older: Strong, beautiful, hopeful, and absolutely perfect. I know Iâm not completely those things now, but I can strive to become them as I get older. And that is why dance is my favorite sport.

Re: Help me correct my essay

Anonymous — Tue, 13 May 2008 21:20:48 GMT

My English is still bad so please help me to correct it

Subject: advantages and disadvantages of living in the country

Living in the country is something that people from the city often dream about. However, in reality, it has both its advantages and disadvantages.

There are certainly many advantages to living in the country. This is the place where people spend their holiday peacefully with their family. Everything is quiet and you can have a good time and relax. You picture yourself lying down on the green grass, with your eyes closed, surrounded by nature, feeling nature, you forget yourworries, you have nothing to worry about. Moreover you will feel more comfortable with the people you are surrounded by bacause in smal places people know each other, we are not stranger as the inhabitants of big cities are. These friendly people make me laugh a lot with their great stories. My younger brother and sister also like this place. They play around all day and my family doesnât have to worry too much about them because traffic is not a problem, it is safer bacause for instance people donÂ´t speed. (me parece un poco utÃ³pico pero bueno, aporto mi grano de arena, no sÃ© si me equivovo pero me da q esto lo ha escrito alguien cuya lengua materna es el castellano. Se me he colado pido disculpas)

However, there are certain drawbacks to life outside the city. Sometimes, you feel that it is too quiet. You may be bored (a person feels or is bored and things are boring) because there are too people and you donât have many friends to talk to. Soon (this is kind of a strange connector!), you will find out that there is little entertainment and the only thing you can do at nighttime is go to bed. There are less shops and facilities. Finding a job isnÂ´t easy, if you work far awya you will wast time and money commuting.

In conclusion, life in the country is more suitable for some people than for others. Moreover, it is often the best (use "the" with a superlative) place for those who are retired or who have young children. On the other hand, young single people who have a career are better off living in the city.

You should have made a list with the advantages and disadvantages first. I donÂ´t agree with your first statement, How many people from the city want to run off to the countryside?!

Advantages of living in the city:

More job options, more places to entertain ourselves, better schools for our children.

Disadvantages of living in the city:

Pollution, traffic jams, kind of cold not knowing everyone around you (though most of us have eally noisy neighbours how know too much about us!)

Get more pros and cons from living in the country just as I did above with living in the city.

My final thought is that your conclusion is a bit short but all in all it is a pretty good essay. Keep up the good work. Oh! I also corrected "help correct"

Re: What is Prose?

Feebs11 — Tue, 13 May 2008 17:51:55 GMT

Anything that is not poetry is prose. So anything you write as an essay is prose.

And yes, novels are 99.99 per cent of the time prose works.