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Your help about a Letter of motivation for BMW

Sanji — Fri, 16 May 2008 18:15:24 GMT

Hello,

First I m sorry about my very bad control in English.

I need some urgent help in writing a letter of motivation for BMW group for application job !

I have tried writing one by myself but it's not coming like I hope.

Can somebody please have a look at it below and make any necessary changes / corrections for me ?

This is my Letter :

Dear Sir, Dear Madam,

Two principal criteria direct my choice towards your Group BMW :

To integrate very a large company and to choose a âjob with prospectsâ.

Your company answers these two waiting is since your group is ones of the pioneers in the automobile field and new technologies, which integrate them. Moreover, gives the means of being present on the markets in strong progression and with high potential.

Your company is particularly attractive because it offers the face impassioning of modern automobile and corresponds best to my technical curiosity. I am sure to profit there from a prosperous environment where the strong reactivity of the market is an additional emulation.

I remain at your disposal for further information and asks you to approve, Sir, Madam, the expression of my sincerity.

Thank you for your Help !!!

Letter of motivation for Master degree

Shineman — Tue, 29 Jan 2008 19:29:14 GMT

Hello everyone,

I am from Hong Kong and I have finished writing a letter of motivation for a master degree overseas. My written English is quite poor so I am afraid that there are many grammatical mistakes. Moreover, I worry whether my contents are strong enough to have the attention of the university. Would you kindly help me to have a look?[Maybe this letter is very strong in Hong Kong style]

Best regard,

Tommy

Dear sir/madam,

My name is ---, aged -- , from Hong Kong. I am writing this letter to apply for the Masterâs Programme in Systems, Control and Mechatronics at --University . I am a final year undergraduate at the ----University, majoring in Electrical Engineering.

In my university studies, I learnt the basic knowledge in Electrical technology with fundamental technical engineering skills, for example computer programming, electric power theory, systems and control theory, building services and basic electronics. At the end of my second year, I found my interests in Systems and Control Engineering but it must be associated with Electrical, Electronics or Mechanical technology in order to become more practical. Knowing that Mechatronics consists of both of them, I believe this Masterâs programme suits me the most even though Mechatronics is quite new for me. I will finish my bachelor study by June and I am now working on my final year individual project titled âDeveloping a humanoid robotâ, to develop a robot that can simulate human facial expressions by the use of sharp memory alloy. The knowledge gained in this project is helpful for me to take this Masterâs programme.

In the last summer holiday, I worked at the -- in Singapore as a lecturer trainee for two months, which carried out duties on teaching basic calculus and an innovation oriented student project. I participated in several industrial visits with local students. I had the opportunities to know more about manufacturing process. It was also found that Engineering is still playing an important role in the society. The Hong Kong society is changing rapidly. In the past, Electrical Engineering graduates had a wide range of career opportunities but now it becomes very competitive. On the one hand, I need to compete with local fresh graduates and experienced degree holders. On the other hand, many graduates studying overseas would choose to return to Hong Kong. Although I am deciding to work overseas, my knowledge is not enough. It is necessary for me to pursue further education before entering the working society.

Sweden is not only famous of its technology in Science, but also the education system. In Hong Kong, most Masterâs programmes are called taught postgraduate programmes which are not research-oriented. I am eager to study in a new environment and take some research liked courses. At --University, I can have the chance to take both taught and research-oriented courses, which are relevant to the labor market. I believe that --University can provide me a world class programme with a quite environment to learn. Moreover, since international students are all welcome, I can learn and study as a group with students from all over the world, to enhance my international understanding and communication skills. In Sweden, spoken Swedish is rather important for a foreigner to get adapted to local culture. My aunt lives in --- which not far away from campus so I can live with her family and learn Swedish and local culture from her. I want to have the opportunity to work at international Swedish enterprises or take a PhD programme in Sweden in the future.

Chinese always say that âLearning is like sailing against water current. We cannot move forward without putting effortâ. As a graduate or being a postgraduate, self-motivation is important and I should place more expectations on myself rather than on others.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I am looking forward to your positive response. It would be a valuable opportunity to study at --University.

Yours faithfully,

----

Please have a look at my LoM, I really need help with the structure...

Jorgy — Sun, 08 Apr 2007 07:18:22 GMT

Hi all,

I'm another person that needs help with a Letter of Motivation... It would be great if you had a look at it. I would be very thankful for any comment on the structure, grammar..., also I'm interested in the expression you would have of me after reading the lom.

The institution I apply at gave the following information for the lom: Please write (on a separate sheet of paper) a statement explaining your current goals, career plans and reasons for being interested in a doctoral program at the University of X. Discuss your study plans and your intended fields of interest. Your statement should be in English and not exceed two pages (not more than 700 words). (Btw, this lom is not meant as a cover letter.)

OK, here's the first version of me lom (I x marked the local information to avoid that the selection panel could find it in the www, I know, it's a little paranoid... ;-))

cheers, jorgy

Dear Prof. Dr. X,

I am a 25 year old German Sociologist currently working at the X at X. I am writing to you to apply for the Doctoral Program in Sociology at the Graduate School for X at the University X starting in December 2007.

To attend your Doctoral Program (both in capital letters?) on empirical and quantitative methods is of high interest for me because during my studies of Sociology and Political Sciences at the University of X from 2001 till 2006 I have developed a great interest in empirical social research. While I gained work experience as a student assistant at X from 2001 to 2005 I became awake that I want to start a career as a researcher in the field of empirical social sciences. A first important step towards that goal was obtaining an award from the âXâ in November 2005. They funded me for 13 month to work on an expertise about the âEfficiency of the Measurement of Further Educationâ wherein I compared and evaluated the measurement of further education in four different German surveys. Since this was a part time project I was able to spend three month (May to July 2006) at the Marketing Department at University X, working as a research assistant on the X Survey Programme. This gave me the opportunity to gather more work experience with a large data set and to improve my English as well in written and spoken in an international environment. Throughout my task on the funded project and on the X data I recognised once more that methodology and quantitative methods are substantial for any social research.

Since January 2007 I am now working as a researcher at X on a project which aims to enhance the quality of the X Survey. Within that project it comes apparent to me again that the use of appropriate methods is crucial to get reliable and valid results exceedingly in the cross-national comparison. Therefore I intend to do my doctoral studies on empirical and quantitative methods whereas my main interest lies in survey methodology for cross-national studies. Thus the topic of my doctoral thesis should be related to a topic dealing with establishment of comparability of data in cross-national surveys. Hence I need a solid education in the fields of empirical and quantitative methods which I expect to obtain in your Doctoral Program.

Additionally I want to mention two more reasons why I have a great interest to gain a doctorâs degree in your program. The first is that the training in empirical and quantitative methods at your Graduate School is combined with their application to business, economics, and the social sciences. Moreover, notwithstanding the decision for one study field, in my case i.e. Sociology, the exchange across the different disciplines is fostered amongst other things through attending to a seminar in a neighbouring field and through the contact to other Graduate School students who specialise in these other disciplines. A second reason why I appreciate your Graduate School is the excellent and international orientated research environment. Both the Social Sciences faculty and the cooperating centres are internationally well renowned and house experts in their fields. This and to study in an English speaking environment would provide me with skills which are necessary to compete internationally successful as a researcher.

I honestly feel confident that the Doctor in Sociology with a focus on empirical and quantitative methods would be the best choice for me. Furthermore it would be an honor for me to be a doctoral student at the Graduate School funded under the âXâ as the first of its kind in Germany. Therefore I would be glad of receiving the opportunity to attend the Graduate School of X.

Thank you very much for considering my application. Iâm looking forward hearing from you.

Sincerely yours

Once more: hepl for a letter of Motivation

Anonymous — Sat, 07 Apr 2007 08:37:12 GMT

Hi all, I'm another girl that need help with her letter of motivation...

I have to writte this letter to apply for a PhD Program at a German University . They want: a statement explaining my current goals, career plans and reasons for being interested in a doctoral program at the University of Mannheim. I should discuss my study plans and my intended fields of interest. The statement should be in English and not exceed two pages (not more than 700 words).

Since I'm doing this the first time and I am not a native speaker it would be really great if somebody of you could check the letter ??? (Please, please) Also I would be interested in your expression of me from the letter. (I x marked all local information, not because of your, more because of the institution I 'm applying at...)

best, jorgy

Letter of Motivation,

Dear Dr. X, dear Prof. X,

I am a 25 year old German Sociologist currently working at the X. I am writing to you to apply for the PhD Program in Sociology at the Graduate School for X at the University X starting in September 2007.

To attend your PhD Program on empirical and quantitative methods is of high interest for me because during my studies of Sociology and Political Sciences at the University of X from 2001 till 2006 I have developed a great interest in empirical social research. While I gained work experience as a student assistant at X from 2004 to 2006 I became awake that I want to start a career as a researcher in the field of empirical social sciences. A first important step towards that goal was obtaining an award from the âXâ in December 2005. They funded me for 13 month to work on an expertise about the âEfficiency of the Measurement of Further Educationâ; within this project I compared and evaluated the measurement of further education in four different German surveys. Since this was a part time project I was able to spend three month (May to July 2006) at the Marketing Department at X University, X, working as a research assistant on the International Social Survey Programme (ISSP). This gave me the opportunity to gather more work experience with a large data set and to improve my English as well in written and spoken in an international environment. Throughout my task on the funded project and on the ISSP data I recognised once more that methodology and quantitative methods are substantial for any social research.

Since January 2007 I am now working as a researcher at X on a project which aims to enhance the quality of the X Survey. Within that project it comes apparent to me again that the use of appropriate methods is crucial to get reliable and valid results exceedingly in the cross-national comparison. Therefore I intend to do my doctoral studies on empirical and quantitative methods whereas my main interest lies in survey methodology for cross-national studies. Thus the topic of my PhD thesis should be related to a topic dealing with establishment of comparability of data in cross-national surveys. Hence I need a solid education in the fields of empirical and quantitative methods which I expect to get in your PhD programme.

Then I want to mention two additional reasons why I have a great interest to gain a PhD in your Program. The first is that the training in empirical and quantitative methods at your Graduate School is combined with their application to business, economics, and the social sciences. Moreover, notwithstanding the decision for one study field, in my case i.e. Sociology, the exchange across the different disciplines is fostered amongst other things through attending to a seminar in a neighbouring field and through the contact to other Graduate School students who specialise in these other disciplines. A second reason why I appreciate your Graduate School is the excellent and international orientated research environment. Both the Social Sciences faculty and the cooperating centres are internationally well renowned and house experts in their fields. This and to study in an English speaking environment wouuld provide me with skills which are necessary to compete internationally successful as a researcher.

I honestly feel confident that the PhD in Sociology with a focus on empirical and quantitative methods would be the best choice for me. Furthermore it would be an honor for me to be a PhD student at the Graduate School as the first of its kind in Germany funded under the âXâ. Therefore I would be glad of receiving the opportunity to attend the Graduate School of Economic and Social Sciences at the University of X.

Thank you very much for considering my application. Iâm looking forward hearing from you.

Sincerely Yours

yet another Letter of Motivation to be ispected under the magnifying glass

Zargon — Fri, 12 Jan 2007 18:31:29 GMT

Dear Friends,
I desperately need some help on my Motivation Letter, as I haven`t spoken/written a word in English since I started learning German and that`s years now...
I just want to underline how important this letter for my study is, since I am obligated to have a foreign semester in order to finish my bachelor degree.

I`m a bit unsure about the letter. I find it huge, nevertheless I just don`t know what I could drop. Secondly there are too much iterations and some expressions (all in italics) for which I can`t find a solution.
So you are my last hope... here it is :

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply as an exchange student for the Communication Design Program at the School of Architecture and Design for the fall semester 2008. I am a Bulgarian student attending my third semester of "Digital Media" studies at the University of Applied Science in Bremen, Germany. Since I would like to devote my life to improving intercultural communication by means of interactive art and media, I strongly believe that the experience of studying abroad will help me to further develop myself and my knowledge.

My flair for arts is by blood. I grew up in my motherâs atelier, who is an artist herself, getting to know all different kinds of art. During my high school years, I supported my mother with developing trademarks for different companies. My task was the technical realization on computer, thus I could easily learn the fundamentals of conventional and professional software.

A decisive step for my further evolution was the year I spent as an exchange student in the eleventh grade in Germany. During this year I took part in diverse seminars organized by YFU (Youth For Understanding), which main goal was to make communication between cultures easier. The most important seminar I took part in was "Communication and Media", which was held two weeks in Berlin. I visited some of the biggest news agencies and print houses and took actively part in the working process of printing a magazine issue. This experience of communicating with people from different cultures bent with the media impressions I made, clearly pointed out my future way.

After graduating high school I was self-dependent enough to carry out my studies in a foreign country. Considering my affinity to arts and languages I applied for "Digital Media", because it combines both design and media competence. I experienced my first year as a great inspiration. In the first and second term we learnt the fundamentals of design and computer science by means of theoretical and practical exercises. Courses like "Theory of Media" and "Media Engineering" have put the basis of understanding what actually media is.
As I consider myself more as an art student I have focused on lectures at the University of Applied Arts in the current third semester. I have enrolled in a bachelor-project for the Syne-Institute (part of this university), which ends in summer 2008. We have an assignment to build up a new identity of a local Radio and TV sender. I am really enjoying the process of bringing up a new image of a company: briefing, analyzing, developing and presenting ideas for a real client.

Working on various projects, reading and holding out presentations, made me realize how essential media and digital technology nowadays are. I am permanently seeking challenges and try to find a way not just to be a part of this modern world, but actively change it. I have a clear vision for what I want to achieve through my study - I want to be able to create innovative, interactive and entertaining systems for the different walks of life. I am confident in my personality and my skills, but I recognized that my knowledge in some areas is limited. I therefore have chosen your program, because it suits my interests and needs most.

I have carefully read the descriptions of your courses and since I am attracted from the topic of design and communication, I have found the following highly interesting: âDesign, Media and Cultureâ, âCommunication and Interactionâ, âProduction Process of Communication Designâ and âCombining Mediaâ. I would like to visit these courses, because they will enrich my knowledge and help me put it to a higher standard. It would be a great pleasure for me to study in Thailand, not only because of the course variety. I am eager to meet such a distant culture and take the best of the time I will spend there.

I hope you consider my application and can regard me as a favorable candidate to this program.

Yours faithfully,
Ivan Yanev

There`s another thing. I have to upload the letter by Sunday evening, so I`m pretty much out of time.
I thank you in advance for your time and nervs.

Please help with my letter of motivation....

Anonymous — Tue, 15 Nov 2005 02:17:17 GMT

I'm studying medicine in Germany and I would like to do a clinical elective in Malta next summer. For this, I need to write a "Letter of Motivation"....and I would greatly appreciate some help. I will send the letter to a central organization that will forward the application to various hospitals, that's why I don't know the name of the contact person or the name of the hospital....therefore I had to use the expression "your hospital" which sounds a bit weird to me....do you have any suggestions which expression I could use instead?

It would also be great if someone could correct spelling or grammar mistakes....and don't hesitate to tell me when I have written some silly crap that should be removed or rewritten. I would also be thankful for some suggestion of what I could add....

Thanks a lot, Moritz

Enough talk, here's my letter:

Dear madam or sir,chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>>

I am a 4^th year student of medicine at the Ludwig-Maximilians-University of Munich in Germany. I would like to apply for an elective period of 30 days in September 2006 in your hospital.>>

I have completed electives in internal medicine, rheumatology and psychiatry, but I would like to do my fourth and final elective period in surgery, a subject in which I already have some experience: I did my alternative civilian service in the emergency room of the surgical university hospital of Heidelberg for 13 months. I learned a lot about clinical work during this time, and the experiences I had there were one of the reasons that made me decide to study medicine. I regularly do nightshifts in a surgical ward in the university hospital of Munich as a part-time job besides my studies.>>

I would like to do a clinical elective abroad to learn more about hospital organisation, provision of medical care and medical education outside Germany. I am considering to specialize in surgery after I have qualified as a M.D. and I think it would be very interesting for me to learn about surgical practice in other countries.>>

I hope to learn a lot from clinical staff in your hospital and to be present at rounds and in the operation theatre. I could help with physical examination, history taking, drawing blood and other procedures during my elective period. >>

I also have some experience in medical care because I worked as a paramedic in Hamburg and as a facilitator for disabled people in London before I started studying medicine.>>

I am reasonably familiar with laboratory work which is required for my doctoral thesis in heart surgery. The topic of my doctoral thesis is the comparision of a new kind of coronary artery bypass graft with established grafts through various methods.>>

I would like to do my elective period in Malta both because fellow students who went there have spoken highly of their clerkships and because I am fascinated by Maltaâs culture and history. I went there for holidays four years ago and I would like to return for a longer time, hopefully next summer. >>

Yours faithfully,

Please be so kind and correct my letter of Motivation

georgfriedrich — Mon, 20 Jun 2005 20:44:45 GMT

Hi,

IÂ´m writing a "Letter of Motivation" for a Study Programm. Please be so kind and help me to find my mistakes, grammar errors and somehow "D-English" expressions.
Sorry for BLOCKING out the school names, but privacy is nice to have

Thanks a lot from Germany

cu
Georg

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Dear Sir or Madam,

At first I would like to thank for the interesting Open and Buddy Days. They have gave me a unique insight into UNIVERSITY2 and convinced me to choose Hospitality Management in UNIVERSITY2 .

Consequentially I would like to apply for admission to Hospitality Management in September 2000.

I did a 3-year-apprenticeship as a chef in PLACE1 and Place2 till April 2000. In the first part of my apprenticeship we served 800 plates a day with several different types of diets for medical and health reasons whereas at Orangerie we served 30 plates a day with a focus on gourmets. Both parts gave me a broad view into hospitality.

Afterwards I succeed in serving my 10 months military service at PLACE3.
I worked there as a `Head of Ordonnanz` and chef. Leading a team of up to 20 Ordonnanzen (staff) I was in charge of organising celebrations and events with up to 100 guests. There I was awarded for exceptional work in June 2000.

Thereafter I went to SCHOOL where I obtained my general qualification for university entrance in June 2000.

When I started studying business economics at UNIVERSITY1 I wanted a good economical background for a leading position in the Hospitality Industry. But I realized that their theoretical approach doesnât fit my needs.

Iâve searched for a mixture of Theory and Praxis approach which equips me with the knowledge needed for Hospitality Management. I found it in your Study programme.

Iâve chosen Hospitality Management for the challenging and prospering approach, but furthermore for the working ambience in Hospitality. I am into this unique mixture of passion, stress and perfectionism dedicated to improve our customerâs satisfaction. Their smile makes this branch so unique, their pleasure is my motivation.

Iâm looking forward to our interview on July 10th,

Yours faithfully,

Georg