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Re: Shall I write my name and address at the top right side of my Motivation Letter..?

Tanit — Fri, 02 May 2008 08:41:02 GMT

Hi Tamguatlay,

I am not Nona, and you probably won't trust me because I'm not a native speaker of English. I only wanted to share my experience, which can add something to the topic.

As an ESL student of BrE, I was taught to end a letter with "Your faithfully" when it addresses an unknown addressee (i.e., when it begins with "Dear Sir or Madam") and with "Yours sincerely" when you know his/her name (i.e., the letter begins with "Dear Mr/Ms/Miss [+surname]").

However, during my year in the UK, I saw the expression "Your faithfully" only twice, in two letters written by members of my University staff. Funnily enough, the first one began with "To whom it may concern" (another extremely rare expression ) and the second with "Miss [+ my surname]", two opening formulae I was taught NOT to use, when having classes ... none of them actually began with "Dear Sir or Madam"! Both the letters I mentioned (I've still got them) come from a University, so I'm obviously not talking about illiterate writers.

Another thing I can say is that my British teacher on the one hand strongly advised us to close formal letters in our CAE and CPE exams with "Yours faithfully" or "Yours sincerely" (depending on the circumstances) because those were the expression the examiners were looking for. On the other hand, he also warned us that these day most people, also in the UK, will close those letters with "Sincerely", "Regards", "Kind regards".

If my experience is anything to go by, what we learn sometimes can differ from what is actually done nowadays, just as Clive said.

I would appreciate if you take a look at my reference letter

zink — Mon, 11 Feb 2008 18:51:10 GMT

Hello !
I am new to this forum and I have discovered it when I was looking for formal letter samples. I want to apply to a College in Denmark and I want to have a chance to be chosen, so I am requiring help from anyone that is kind enough to offer it. I would also like to use the experience of interacting with the users of this forum to get prepared for the English test (sort of TOEFL, but not exactly) that I am required to pass for that College.
This is my letter of reference that I wrote for my teacher to sign. (I know this practice isn't the right way, but my teacher was very busy, so he asked me to do so). I would appreciate if you could have a look at it and spot mistakes and unusual phrases, if there are any.

i have replaced - [me] = my name

~~begin~~

To Whom it May Concern,

I am writing this letter as a recommendation for [me], a student at â[my school]â National College, in the quality of Teacher and Class Master at â[my school]â National College.

I have known [me] for almost four years, and in this time he has proven to be an extremely valuable student, with a great potential for learning, surpassing many other students.

In my opinion, during the time I spent with [me] in class, I can say I got to know him quite well. He has proven to me that he has an ample knowledge in the field of technology, being capable of operating a PC and virtually any software and device. The student [me] is, without doubt, one of the most valuable students to whom I teach. He has participated in programming school contests, as well as other contests, like Kangourou European Contest of Applied Mathematics in 2007 and the Siemens Join Multimedia design contest, in 2006.

As far as I can say, he is a very conscious student, one of his greatest qualities is the ability to associate and use new information, so that he finds it very easy to understand a bigger concept and get the essential picture. Moreover, I have noticed that [me] progressed since I had first met him, in the way that now he is more mature, more capable of making right decisions. He has now reached a high level of intelligence and awareness and I can fully state that he is ready to meet the intellectual requirements that are demanded by a college course.

[me] is a talented person, and very passionate when it comes to his ambitions. In a conversation we had a little time ago, I had learned that he is inclined toward computer designing, especially web sites. He had told me that he was studying diverse designing techniques and programming languages at home, so that one day he could be prepared for a job as a web designer.

However, despite the fact that [me] has focused on the field of technology and computers, he has a vast general knowledge and he is aware that by also studying other fields he could solve problems that are related to his choice field. He is a sociable person that accommodates in a group rather quickly, being able to handle teamwork efficiently. He knows when to listen and how, and he adapts his ideas to fit the project he is working on, therefore proving to be extremely flexible.

All things considered, I strongly believe that [me] is the right choice for the Multimedia Design and Communication courses within the [my choice] College. His redoubtable qualities and abilities, along with his great potential render [me] able to respond to elevated academic standards and even to outperform them, in order to pursue his career prospects. I am utterly convinced that this student could be a valuable addition to a prestigious academic center, such as your college.

Yours Faithfully,

~~end~~

Thank you for your time.
p.s. I will also post my motivation letter as soon as it's finished.

Re: URGENT ATTENTION BOSS: WOULD YOU PLS COMMENT ON 'MY MOTIVATION LETTER'

Mister Micawber — Mon, 04 Feb 2008 12:08:38 GMT

I have reviewed your letter again, with suggested changes in bold. I cannot follow all your colours and interjections, so I have merely amended as I think best (and some of them are improvements on my own previous suggestions):

Program Code: MKT2345

February 2, 2008

Dear Sir/Madam:

I am writing to apply for your Masterâs Programme in ***.

My educational background is in the principles and practices of marketing management. I completed a three-year BBA (Honours) IT program in 2004. My studies have guided me through systematic research, analytical thinking, management of resources and information evaluation. I completed my MBA with specialization in marketing in December 2005. Marketing Management, Advertising, Sales Management, Services Marketing, Business Strategy & Leadership Management and Entrepreneurship were among my favourite subjects within the MBA program

After completing my MBA, I started my career at an international level. In June 2006, I was employed as an Operations Supervisor for a large supermarket chain in Saudi Arabia. This was valuable experience in leading a multinational team to plan and manage the availability of thousands of brands with complex supplier networks and demanding international customers.

In addition to daily supermarket operations, I have also been analysing leading brands. For example, the key Saudi fresh dairy product brands are Almarai, Nadec, Nada, and Alsafi Danone. I have been compiling monthly sales figures and attempting to determine why Almarai is the top selling brand. My analysis shows that Alamarai management focuses on high quality product, packaging design, promotions (renting 60% of the category shelf space) and advertising. The company uses a strategy of market penetration to beat the competition; promotion emphasises brand strengths across segments and an intensive distribution network is maintained locally.

My two-year contract will soon terminate and I have now been offered a Store Manager position, but I have a strong ambition to become a marketing/management specialist, which I cannot do without a fuller understanding of a specific marketing/management field. Obtaining a one-year master's degree from *** means becoming a specialist or advancing a step towards that goal.

I have already met people from many nations in Saudi Arabia, and I will further learn from others while living in a new culture. I will make new friends from Europe, will learn their life styles, achieving my objective of personal growth, and when I complete my master's degree I will achieve my objective of professional growth. Your programme will equip me with the necessary skills to continue to acquire new knowledge and understanding throughout my career.

I hope that the combination of my past experiences and academic education will qualify me as a University of *** master's programme candidate.

(Don't EVER use an ampersand in a formal letter unless it is part of a book/course/etc title!)

Re: Should I mention example production in my motivation letter?

Grammar Geek — Mon, 14 Jan 2008 13:51:21 GMT

Is this a cover letter (I would like to apply for...) or a motivation letter (The reason I want to be a developer is...)?

Certainly in whatever letter you develop, you should mention the movie.

You can follow whichever format you want for a formal letter.

Re: need only bitter true.plztake a look at my motivation letter and critic

nona the brit — Fri, 06 Jul 2007 15:42:27 GMT

I didn't say your view was that of a novice, but that the standard 3-paragraph essay structure is designed to make essay writing easier for novice writers. I apologise if you felt insulted; that was not my intent.

The 3 para format is also useful in other circumstances, of course, but not for everything. I certainly don't consider it a prerequisite for writing a formal letter. Motivation letters are often required to be of a length that would make the three paragraphs far too long and unwieldy.

We agree that it's a pretty good letter overall though, so I'm sure anon will be fine.

Re: need only bitter true.plztake a look at my motivation letter and critic

Triquediqual — Fri, 06 Jul 2007 15:34:26 GMT

The format isn't fine. Yes, there is no law that says paragraphs must be 3, and I don't like the condescending comment that my view is of a novice standard, please take that back.

If you are sending a formal letter, I think the style must be within certain limits i.e Formal limits. It looks better that you have a formal style on a formal letter. Therefore, I think it would have been better that he grouped a one line sentence hanging around with a medium sized one based on his lengths. I have read this in many texts and it's nearly a prerequisite when writing a formal letter of this kind.

Re: LETTER OF MOTIVATION

Kathrin — Sun, 13 May 2007 18:32:37 GMT

1) My name is X.X. This is a very unusual opening line and not even necessary one. Your name is known from the CV as well as the from the address. There is no need to introduce itself in a formal letter. My name is .. is for writing to potential friends, strongly informal. I would suggest to take it back, it could lead to a tradegy:_)

2) At the moment I'm going... The tense is not correct because the action started in the past and is still going. At the moment you are sitting in front of your computer:-)

Proposal: Recently I have been attending a private school in M., in the ... grade.

3) My principal courses are geography and german, My major subjects are geography and German (German with a capital letter)

4) I was born. See 1). The letter should provide your motivation. I doubt if your birthday is connected to your motivation. If so explain why:-) Cut the whole sentense.

OK, there is no point to go on. This isn't a motivation letter, more a mix between CV and cover letter. If possible, please forget it and write it complettely new after research about the structure of a formal cover letter. I would try to correct the obvious mistake as far as I can. It would be better:-)

Re: need help with motivation letter for university

Philologist — Sun, 01 Jan 2006 13:14:39 GMT

Your leter is a bit long; hence, I have only corrected the first paragraph. With these comments in the back of your head, you should be able to improve the other paragraphs, too!

There are some things that sound a bit strange to my ears. I have highlighted them. Please remember that you should not contract words in formal letters, e.g. "wasn't" should be "was not".

I suggest removing underlined parts. This is, however, your letter, and it should reflect your personality rather than mine. Therefore, I have chosen not to comment on the content of your letter too much.

I hope my comments are of use and wish you a prosperous 2006!

Anonymous wrote:
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I have been determined and motivated to find the best university according to my criteria. I have collected all the information that I could find and asked others to get me some in case it wasnât reachable. I have spent a lot of time on the internet seeking for any valuable information and reading university guides (Did you actually read these on the internet? If not, consider rephrasing) , contacted with people who could help me somehow, organized (Consider "asked") my friends and acquaintances to search for an information because it was also valuable for them. We became a team with a strong core that was aspiring after our common aim, challenging all the difficulties and never giving up. Success was obvious â soon we found some universities that perfectly fitted our criteria. Congratulations, your university is one of them! This example ideally reflects some of my characteristic qualities: highly- motivated, very effective and helpful team player, ambitious, with a huge perseverance level (Consider "persisting") , somebody who gets what he wants and who understands the invaluable importance of information and communication in the *** century, a person who realizes the full potential of information technology nowadays and in the immediate future. >>

Re: Pls help Vis-à-vis usage/meaning?

Guest — Wed, 20 Apr 2005 14:53:57 GMT

First 10x
So it's not possible to be used as I proposed or it's not good to be used like that in a formal letter?
As I already said it's not a motivation letter, it's a part of application form and there is a question in it: What motivates you to apply for an internship within XXXX?
And 6-7 lines for the answer!

And the guy need to send it in a half hour! So we don't have any time .

Would you please help me with my motivation letter?

miaojia — Fri, 01 Apr 2005 11:50:56 GMT

Dear all,

I am a new user and I found here by chance when I tried to get some guidance of letter writing. I have read a lot of examples together with the comments, as well as the helpful posts of suggestions from MountainHiker. I would like to thank all the members for producing such a great forum. It helped me a lot.

I am now studying in Japan and is going to apply for a job in Switzerland. I have managed to follow the regular suggestions and have modified the letter many times by myself, but since this is my first time to write such a formal letter, I know there is a long way and it needs a lot of modification works. Would you please kindly take a look on my letter and tell me how to improve it?

I am afraid the story is too long, but how to make it looks clear and effective?

Thank you so much in advance.

miaojia

And, here comes the letter:

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Dear Sir or Madam:

I am applying for an entry-level position with your company in Geneva office. The preferred field of employment would be the container transport operation and business management.

I have a Bachelorâs degree in International Shipping Management and a Masterâs degree in Transport Planning and Management both from XXX Maritime University, China. Currently, I am a full-time PhD student of XXX University, Japan. My research topics are container transport network analysis and competition strategies. The expected graduation time is October 2005.

After graduating from high school, I was enrolled by my favorite university: XXX Maritime University, which is one of the best maritime universities in China. During the four years study, I acquired wide and solid knowledge of international shipping management, together with firm foundation of mathematics, economies, laws and statistics. In 1999, as a nominated student, I passed the Masterâs Entrance Exams with top grades and started my further study in the same university and majored in Transportation Planning and Management. The three years study has widened my knowledge about transportation science, besides, I also involved myself in the practical sector works. From 2000 to 2002, I was the teaching assistance of my professor, my concentration and enthusiasm was highly appreciated by both the professor and the students. Due to my good performance, I was selected as one of the three student participants of a research team and took part in a project on human-resource evaluation supported by China XXX Shipping Company, XXX Branch. My duties included data collection and analysis, preparation of reports and presentations, the coordination work between the company side and our research team. It helped me to develop a strong analytical mind and interpersonal skills. Moreover, I learnt the value of teamwork during the two-monthâs project and became more solution-oriented. Furthermore, I found my interest toward real business management was evoked and strongly enhanced.

In my last year at XXX Maritime University, I was assigned the teaching assistant to a Japanese professor due to my excellent English skill and solid knowledge of shipping. He gave us lectures on container transport network analysis and my job was the two-way translation between Chinese and English. It not only enhanced my language skills but also evoked my interest of studying in different nations. After talking with the professor and expressing my desire to do PhD research in Japan, we found that our ideas were very well suited. Hence, he highly encouraged me to apply for the International Doctoral Course of XXX University because it offered exactly the professional courses I was eagerly to learn about, such as: game theory and business application. In October 2002, directly after my graduation from Masterâs course, I was selected, out of thousands of candidates all over the world, as one of the 550 selected Japanese government scholarship students. My focus lied on the business strategies and new trend of maritime industry, to be exact, the economic feasibility of mega-container ships as well as the business application of Game Theory.

The first year was, as expected, tough and challenging. I need to adapt to the new life and began the study as soon as possible. Besides, I did not speak Japanese, which simply made the situation more stimulating. I managed to apply my best effort to get through all these successfully even with very little guidance from my professor since he was not in Japan but teaching in World Maritime University until November 2003. I have had benefit from that period of time of how to start a total different life effectively and think more independently. After two and a half years living and studying here, I have been used to the circumstances already and get along very well with my colleagues.

The PhD research has been made considerable advancement during the past two and a half year and so far I have finished most of the work. Beside of daily studies, I actively participate in all kinds of volunteer works and local events also. Inside the campus, I am a lively member to help organize kinds of meetings and events. One specific example of these activities was in 2004, due to my excellent English skill and communication skill, I was assigned to lead a working team organizing the trip and presiding the welcome party when the student-delegation of World Maritime University came to visit my university. While the challenges were great, we are convinced that our team had tried our best and delivered to the guests an impressive party and very exciting trip. Outside of the campus, I also challenged several kinds of part-time jobs to enrich my experiences and get more chances to cooperate with different parties and matters. I benefited a lot from all these jobs and activities. It has helped me to know much more about this country and to discover how the different culture affects the ways in which people react and behave. This, I believe, would help me to respond effectively in an international business environment. Moreover, it strongly enhanced my confidence of living in a foreign country and gave me the full encouragement to chanllenge new targets.

With the solid knowledge and multinational cultural background, I desire to start my career in a global shipping company. I firmly believe that joining XXX Company would be the right choice for me. First of all, my education background makes a perfect fit with the worldwide container transport business that your company is involved. Working with XXX Company, I am going to be able to fully utilize my theoretical knowledge; besides, the company is able to benefit from my Asian culture background, too. Additionally, the fast growth of fleet scale and the incredible expanding of shipping routes network your company has completed in recent years impressed me very much. In the centuries-old shipping industry, XXX, as a relative newcomer, has been able to fully utilize modern information technologies and chosen the optimal approach to make the entire system more efficient. I strongly believe that a company likes this is definitely going to make more significant achievement in the future and I look forward to working and growing with the potential team.

Personally speaking, XXX is the best choice for me is also because of my deep interest in the European culture. Grown up in China and studied in Japan, I am deeply interested in Asian culture, but at the same time, I am also very curious to work in a different culture and in a different language as I am ambitious to learn more everyday.

A copy of my Curriculum Vitae is enclosed which will give you further informations of my studies and other activites. I hope that my qualifications would enable me to work for you since I am very confident that I could make an exciting contribution to your company.

Thank you very much for your kind consideration, I look forward to your positive reply.

Yours faithfully,
Liu Miaojia
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