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Re: Please correct my grammar, thanks

Terryxpress — Tue, 06 Nov 2007 10:36:11 GMT

We have arranged for the surveyor to inspect these goods in November (or do you mean, on 7th November).
After that: your paragraph sounds like it is part of a formal letter to a client or customer, so that "after that" is slightly too informal. You could say, "Following this inspection, they will submit a certificate to us which will certify that these goods can be returned to China. This certificate will be sent/forwarded ("forwarded" is more in keeping with the formal tone of the letter) to you as soon as possible. The charge for this is USD240, which we will deduct (which will be deducted) from your next payment.
(By using the passive tense -will be deducted - you are making it more formal, which is more in keeping with a business letter, less personal, as it avoids using the personal pronoun "we".)

Please advise when you will be able to collect the goods ("pick up" is too informal, too casual for a business letter)
for return to your factory for ...
reworking: I am unsure whether this is the best word, as I don't know what the actual goods are, or what is apparently wrong with them. Possible alternatives are,
for modification, for repair, for alteration.
Hope this helps.

Re: need only bitter true.plztake a look at my motivation letter and critic

nona the brit — Fri, 06 Jul 2007 15:42:27 GMT

I didn't say your view was that of a novice, but that the standard 3-paragraph essay structure is designed to make essay writing easier for novice writers. I apologise if you felt insulted; that was not my intent.

The 3 para format is also useful in other circumstances, of course, but not for everything. I certainly don't consider it a prerequisite for writing a formal letter. Motivation letters are often required to be of a length that would make the three paragraphs far too long and unwieldy.

We agree that it's a pretty good letter overall though, so I'm sure anon will be fine.

Re: need only bitter true.plztake a look at my motivation letter and critic

Triquediqual — Fri, 06 Jul 2007 15:34:26 GMT

The format isn't fine. Yes, there is no law that says paragraphs must be 3, and I don't like the condescending comment that my view is of a novice standard, please take that back.

If you are sending a formal letter, I think the style must be within certain limits i.e Formal limits. It looks better that you have a formal style on a formal letter. Therefore, I think it would have been better that he grouped a one line sentence hanging around with a medium sized one based on his lengths. I have read this in many texts and it's nearly a prerequisite when writing a formal letter of this kind.

Re: Quick Question on how to write a formal letter!!

Anonymous — Mon, 26 Mar 2007 13:20:22 GMT

Hello .. I will give you some help in writing your letter ..

I'm going to tell you how to write a very formal letter..

You should write your address right aligned in the top of the page..

after you finish writing your address skip one line and write the date also right aligned on the page..

next you should skip 1 line and then write the sendee's address .. in other words the person who you want to send to..

after that skip 1 line and write your greetin with no indention .. and since you dont know who you are senting to just write " Dear sir or madam, (dont forget the comma)

then skip another line and start writing your paragraphs .. and there is no indention too .. dont forget to skip 1 line between each paragraph..

when you finish writing your paragraphs skip 1 line and write " Yours sincerely, " or " Yours faithfully " .. but dont write something not formal .. like best wishes or other stuff ..

then skip 1 line and write your name..

dont forget that there should be left and write margins and there are no indentions through out the letter ...

VERY Urgent: a semiformal letter

Anonymous — Mon, 16 Oct 2006 15:53:37 GMT

Can you help me with my English task? I have to weite a semiformal letter to this subject: You contact a previous teacher about your choice of career. Your heart is set on theatrical studies but your parents disapprove of this choice for various reasons. Ask for his/hers advice. (2-3 paragraphs)

I have come up with this and wanted to ask, what should I add? It seems a bit "empty". I know there are mistakes in my letter, I would appreciate if you corrected them.

Dear Mrs. Smith,

I am writing to ask your advice on my choice of career.

I have always wanted to become an actor, but my parents disapprove my choice. They find an actorâs job to be unappreciated and think that it is not suitable for me. I, on the other hand, am very keen on joining theatrical studies at the University. I really donât know what to do. I want to have a job that I appreciate, on the other hand I donât want to upset my parents.

I would very much appreciate your advice on the issue.

Yours sincerely,

Re: Please help me to write a formal letter to English school

Anonymous — Thu, 07 Sep 2006 18:02:22 GMT

Here's how you should lay it out:

Date

Name of recipient (This line and the next two should be single-spaced, this program won't allow me to do that.)

Recipient's address

Rest of address

RE: What your letter is about

Dear Name of recipient

Here you start writing your letter. Begin by expressing your interest in the school. Tell them something you like about the school. Everyone likes getting a compliment. Expand on that information a little. Tell them how you heard about the school and some characteristics of the school that make you want to study there. That's your first paragraph.

Your next paragraph should explain that you have some questions. Then, you ask the questions, focus on any details that are of particular concern to you.

In your next paragraph, you should thank the person to whom you are writing for their time and tell them that you appreciate their response to your questions.

Sincerely,

Your Name

Re: need help with motivation letter for university

Philologist — Sun, 01 Jan 2006 13:14:39 GMT

Your leter is a bit long; hence, I have only corrected the first paragraph. With these comments in the back of your head, you should be able to improve the other paragraphs, too!

There are some things that sound a bit strange to my ears. I have highlighted them. Please remember that you should not contract words in formal letters, e.g. "wasn't" should be "was not".

I suggest removing underlined parts. This is, however, your letter, and it should reflect your personality rather than mine. Therefore, I have chosen not to comment on the content of your letter too much.

I hope my comments are of use and wish you a prosperous 2006!

Anonymous wrote:
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I have been determined and motivated to find the best university according to my criteria. I have collected all the information that I could find and asked others to get me some in case it wasnât reachable. I have spent a lot of time on the internet seeking for any valuable information and reading university guides (Did you actually read these on the internet? If not, consider rephrasing) , contacted with people who could help me somehow, organized (Consider "asked") my friends and acquaintances to search for an information because it was also valuable for them. We became a team with a strong core that was aspiring after our common aim, challenging all the difficulties and never giving up. Success was obvious â soon we found some universities that perfectly fitted our criteria. Congratulations, your university is one of them! This example ideally reflects some of my characteristic qualities: highly- motivated, very effective and helpful team player, ambitious, with a huge perseverance level (Consider "persisting") , somebody who gets what he wants and who understands the invaluable importance of information and communication in the *** century, a person who realizes the full potential of information technology nowadays and in the immediate future. >>

Re: Can you check it for me? formal letter to a university

nona the brit — Wed, 05 Oct 2005 10:59:23 GMT

Hi,

Just tidy up these paragraphs a little bit.

I have few questions connected with the application process for this course. Will my IBD qualify me to attend or would I need to take any additional courses, which are obligatory to access this course? How may points do I need to apply?

Knowing the answer to these questions will allow me to more effectively plan for my future.

I am really interested in media and hope to pursue a career in this field. I have enjoyed working on the (redaction - I don't understand this word? re-design?) of our new school web site and I held an exhibition of my photography for the Personal Project of my Middle Years Programme Certificate. For this I achieved a grade 7, which is the top mark.

writing a letter (final paragraph)

Sunflower — Thu, 07 Jul 2005 21:39:31 GMT

Hi everybody

I am writing a formal letter and I would like to write a final sentence saying:
"Thank you very much for your attention and I am at your disposal for any further requests or explanations"

Could you please help making it more formal?

Thank you so much

Letter for scholarship application

Guest — Mon, 07 Feb 2005 08:33:04 GMT

hie!
i just found this forum on the net and i thought it is very useful to people like me who have never written a formal letter before.
i'm actually writing a letter applying for private scholarship to continue my education in foundation studies. but i have a really vague idea on how the letter should develop. could you help me with the contents and the flow of the letter so that it might catch the readers attention?
it should be brief and take up only to about four paragraphs as i don't want to bore the reader.
this is very important as without it, i wouldn't be able to continue my studies! please help.