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Re: serial comma usage

Mister Micawber — Fri, 09 May 2008 04:09:58 GMT

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Given the grammar, the author means:

...we are seeing violent extremist types of ( 1 ) alienation, ( 2) narcissism, and ( 3 ) fundamentalist religious, national, ethnic gender-related phobias which, near and far, have tightened the ring of ( 1 ) dialogue, ( 2 ) tolerance, and ( 3 ) coexistence in the world. These ( 1 ) alienations, ( 2 ) phobias, and ( 3 ) narcissisms, although more dangerous when religious, are not limited to religion...

serial comma usage

Anonymous — Thu, 08 May 2008 13:33:50 GMT

In today's globalized world, we are seeing violent extremist types of alienation, narcissism, and fundamentalist religious, national, ethnic gender-related phobias which, near and far, have tightened the ring of dialogue, tolerance, and coexistence in the world. These alienations, phobias, and narcissisms, although more dangerous when religious, are not limited to religion in the first place and moreover are not limited to a specific religion.

Please check bold commas (,) inserted. Are the insertions correct? I have doubt in comma insertion between narcissm, and fundamentalist religious and also between phobias, and narcissisms. I thought it as serial comma. Does the author intend to mean "narcissm and fundamentalist religious..." and "phobias and narcissisms" as alienation? Kindly advise.

Re: 'a half' or 'half ; by gender

Clive — Thu, 05 Jul 2007 14:36:45 GMT

Hi,

About a half domestic companies are unwilling to employ âoldâ people and place a limitation on qualifications by gender.

1. a half domestic companies / half domestic companies.

Which is right? You need to speak of 'half of domestic companies'. The article 'a' can be used, but more commonly I hear 'One half of . . .' or simply 'half of . . .'

In business-oriented writing, people will often say '50% of . . .'

2. I don't know if 'place a limitation on qualifications by gender' is appropriate expression. No, your meaning is not clear.

I want to express that when companies hire workers, they impose different requirements according to the applicants' sex. <<< This is a much better way to say it.

About 50% of domestic companies are unwilling to employ 'old' people, and impose different requirements according to the applicants' gender.

The comma is to show that the scope of 'unwilling to' does not extend to 'impose'.

Best wishes, Clive

Re: Starting a sentence with the word Or

Belushi — Tue, 13 Jun 2006 13:37:34 GMT

Hey, thanks for the speedy reply.

The full paragraph that she has written is this ...

According to Barry, Feminist Criticism could be described as the examination of representations of women in literature by men and women. Barry also describes feminism as being just the opposite of essentialism. Or as Culler points out, âFeminist theory stresses the impact of socially constructed gender roles on making the subject what he or she isâ (Culler:111)

I leant toward the comma after the "Or" but it just didnt sound right. The authoress is a natural German speaker, writing a small piece for her Master's Degree.

Re: Someone

Sextus — Sun, 09 Apr 2006 02:08:55 GMT

Hi Clive, thanks for the answers.

"I employ the term 'dogmatist' in the sense in which S. uses dogmatikos, namely, to designate one who makes positive or negative assertions about the nature of things, on the basis of what one considers to be evidence and reasoned arguments and doctrines."

This may work, but I'm not completely sure that it's clear enough. In any case "he" and "they" may be used to refer to someone whose gender is not known. But I know there are people who dislike both usages.

Do you feel you need the comma after 'things'? Perhaps a comma after 'evidence' rather than 'and'?

Yes, I should remove that comma. Regarding "and", the point is that "reasoned" goes with both "arguments" and "doctrines."

Is the term 'dogmatist' compatible with one who is influenced by doctrines?

Yes, in its technical usage.

Cheers, Sextus

Re: Please help me revise the first paragraph of my essay

Mister Micawber — Tue, 12 Jul 2005 05:35:00 GMT

Hi Jeff,

Your first paragraph is rather attractive already. I would make an effort to discover the quote author's gender, in order to avoid the 'he/she' awkwardness.

Here are some other words or phrases that need work:

speaker (I'd change to 'writer' since it is not obviously from a speech)
suggests that it (the referent for 'it' is a little vague)
needs. However (two spaces always after a period or a colon)
on case-by-case basis ('basis' is countable and singular)
buildings since (comma needed)
the aesthetic, cultural, and historic value (value is a generalized concept-- no article)

Your final sentence of the paragraph is too strongly opposed to the preceding opinion. The paragraph's beginning suggests that you support preservation, yet the concluding sentence suggests you support modernization. While it may be necessary in an essay to at least give lip service to opposing views, I find that students write better, stronger and clearer essays if they choose one side or the other to support, rather than trying to represent both sides. I don't know whether you have that option in this assigment, though.

Re: Sentences

nona the brit — Mon, 24 Jan 2005 17:28:25 GMT

Sentence one. Drop the comma and the word 'they' and the 'to it'.

Sentence 2/3. I'm not too sure of your intended meaning here. When you say resistance do you mean resistance from the existing population, or problems on her behalf. Who is 'she' anyway? If you are still talking about any hypothetical person, you can't use a gender spedific pronoun.

Sentence 4. Ok but a little ambiguous. Is the discrimination going to happen for a long time, or is it from people who have lived here a long time?

Sentence 5. I don't understand what you are saying here.

Re: Could Someone Proof Read my Short Essay that is due on Monday : )

CalifJim — Sun, 26 Sep 2004 07:24:06 GMT

I would have used a comma before the final "and" or "or" in a series, like this:
mother, and lesbian
church, or community

You need "losing parental custody" -- one "o" in "losing".

I think you need a more parallel structure than "as an activist and through faith", maybe "through faith and activism" or "through activism and faith".

The choice of "accompany" in "... injustices that accompany many gays ..." is not really satisfactory. I'm not sure that injustices can "accompany" people -- maybe "face", "confront", "are experienced by", something like that?

I would have used "discrimination" rather than "discriminations".

"the key in building bridges" should be "the key to building bridges". (We say "the key to the locker", right? -- not "the key in the locker"!) But, on the other hand, you may want to reconsider whether you really want to say what you said in the final sentence. How is your reader going to interpret "building bridges between the gender issues"? In what sense is there a bridge between one gender issue and another gender issue? I can't be sure, but I think you intend to say something a little different from what you actually wrote.

You may want to consider using "Boatwright" less often or at least using it in a greater variety of positions within the sentences. It is the first word in a large number of the sentences in the essay. Likewise, the word "Colorado" comes up too close to another "Colorado", and the same happens with "church" in another passage.

Related to that, you could provide the reader with a little more interest if you were to use a greater variety of sentence structures. For example, you might use a few more subordinate clauses with "although", "since", "because", and so on. Varying the length of the sentences might also help. And your reader would be swept along through the essay more smoothly, I think, if you used just a little sprinkling of some connective expressions to relate sentences to one another -- like "yet", "still", "nevertheless", "also", "further", "even so", and so on -- but you don't want to overdo it, and you'll need to think of what will work best with the meanings of the sentences.

Writing is extremely difficult; you've done a great job, and my suggestions are mostly to do with polishing what you have so far. I hope they will help.