By Genders, Sentence structures

My high school Chinese teacher asked me to help her translate these two abstracts from Chinese into English. I have finished, but I need to correct them into better English. Please help me. I have to give my teacher the translation. She helped me quite a lot while I encountered the most...

I would have used a comma before the final "and" or "or" in a series, like this: mother, and lesbian church, or community You need "losing parental custody" -- one "o" in "losing". I think you need a more parallel structure than "as an activist and through faith", maybe "through faith and...